Colleague campusAttending college is becoming increasingly more attractive to a growing number of people for various reasons, most of which. Many reasons are linked to professional careers, including expanding knowledge or acquiring skills, whereas some others are for a more cultural or social experience related, such as exploring different lifestyles or making new friends. Attending college is becoming increasingly more attractive to a growing number of people for various reasons. Many reasons are linked to professional careers, including expanding knowledge or acquiring skills, whereas some others are for a more cultural or social experience, such as exploring different lifestyles or making new friends.

This section would be easier split up into two sentences. The first sentence introduces the topic and the second one expands on it.

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"Whereas" could work, but it would need some rephrasing since it suggests an idea in opposition to the main clause ("college is becoming increasingly attractive") in the form that you wrote. "Though" would also work, but "some others" is still awkward. For example, you could wrote "though others are motivated by cultural or social experiences that they can have."

CThe colleaguge campus is becoming increasingly attractive to a growing number of people for various reasons, m. Most of which are linked to professional careers, including expanding knowledge or acquiring skills, whereas some others are more related to cultural or social experience related, such as exploring different lifestyles or making new friends. The college campus is becoming increasingly attractive to a growing number of people for various reasons. Most are linked to professional careers, including expanding knowledge or acquiring skills whereas others are more related to cultural or social experience, such as exploring different lifestyles or making new friends.

In English, the article "the" goes before general nouns like "college campus." Another way to say this would be "college campuses" The second sentence could cut off in a number of places, but as is it is a run on sentence which needs to be broken into multiple sentences. Also, in this context "related to cultural or social experiences" sounds more natural than "cultural or social experience related"

As far as I’m concerned, the real value of going to college lies in two fields – broadening one’s horizons and expanding their network. As far as I’m concerned, the real value of going to college lies in two fields – broadening one’s horizons and expanding their network.

One usually says "their network"/"my network" because professional networks are usually specific to a person.

As far as I’m concerned, the real value of going to college lies in two fields – areas—broadening one’s horizons and expand theing one's network. As far as I’m concerned, the real value of going to college lies in two areas—broadening one’s horizons and expanding one's network.

"Fields" suggests a topic or subject.

As far as I’m concerned, the real value of going to college lies in two fields – broadening one’s horizon and expand theing one's network. As far as I’m concerned, the real value of going to college lies in two fields – broadening one’s horizon and expanding one's network.

The gerund form ("broadening") is the most common way to say a verb as a noun in English. You could also use infinitive "to broaden" though it would sound more literary. In this case, "expanding the network" is too general, since the reader does not know which network one is referring to. This part could also be written simply as "networking."

To begin with, I’d like to clarify that I neveram not denying the importance of gaining knowledge in college, especially for STEM majors, which require a high level of specialty. To begin with, I’d like to clarify that I am not denying the importance of gaining knowledge in college, especially for STEM majors, which require a high level of specialty.

Changing the verb tense so it uses "-ing" (present continuous tense) makes the sentence sound smoother.

To begin with, I’d like to clarify that I neverdo not deny the importance of gaining knowledge in college, especially for STEM majors, which require a high level of specialty. To begin with, I’d like to clarify that I do not deny the importance of gaining knowledge in college, especially for STEM majors, which require a high level of specialty.

Without solid fundamentals, academic research can be ill-undisciplined and will be exposed to arbitration and imprecisionimprecision and controversy [/dispute]. Without solid fundamentals, academic research can be undisciplined and will be exposed to imprecision and controversy [/dispute].

"Arbitration" doesn't work here, since it suggests a sort of legal judgment. "Dispute" or "controversy" are better. Obviously, academic work is always subject to revision and discussion, but from context, we can tell that you mean something beyond the usual.

Without solid fundamentals, academic research can be ill-disciplined and will be exposed to arbitrationry and imprecisione. Without solid fundamentals, academic research can be ill-disciplined and will be arbitrary and imprecise.

This sounds more natural - also, arbitration in English is a specific legal term.

However, the knowledge wone gaineds at college is far from enough to satisfy the job requirements. However, the knowledge one gains at college is far from enough to satisfy job requirements.

However, the knowledge we gained atin college is far from enough to satisfy the job requirements. However, the knowledge gained in college is far from enough to satisfy job requirements.

However, the knowledge we gained at college is far from enough to satisfy the job requirements. However, the knowledge we gain at college is far from enough to satisfy the job requirements.

ARE, the Architect Registration Examination, is a multi-division test every that architectural designer has to pass if he or sthey aspires to become an architect. ARE, the Architect Registration Examination, is a multi-division test every that architectural designer has to pass if they aspire to become an architect.

In English, you can use "they" to replace "he or she".

ARE, the Architect Registration Examination, is a multi-divisionpart test every architectural designer has to pass if he or she aspires to become an architect. ARE, the Architect Registration Examination, is a multi-part test every architectural designer has to pass if he or she aspires to become an architect.

The exam involvecontains broad fields of knowledge, including, but not limited, to buildwriting codes, building mechanical systems, and building constructions that college architecture schools seldom teach to students during their five years of school life. The exam contains broad fields of knowledge, including, but not limited, to writing code, building mechanical systems, and building constructions that college architecture schools seldom teach to students during their five years of school life.

One doesn't "build" code; rather, you can say "coding" or "writing code". "Contains" sounds better in this context because these fields of knowledge are in the test. "Involves" implies that the subjects are only related to the topics covered in the test.

The exam involves broad fields of knowledge, including but not limited to building codes, mechanical systems, and building constructions that college architecture schools seldom teach to students during their five years of school lifeing. The exam involves broad fields of knowledge, including but not limited to building codes, mechanical systems, and building constructions that college architecture schools seldom teach to students during their five years of schooling.

Instead, students acquired the knowledge through years of working experience and studying the exam materials, let alonebut they have to keep learning from daily work even after they become architects. Instead, students acquire the knowledge through years of working experience and studying the exam materials, but they have to keep learning from daily work even after they become architects.

"Let alone" isn't used in this context; it's used after a (usually negative) phrase to show that the next statement is even more true. Example: "With your work schedule, you can't expect to take more than three classes per semester, let alone graduate early."

Instead, students acquired the knowledge through years of working experience and studying the exam materials, let aloneand furthermore, they have to keep learning from daily work even after they become architects. Instead, students acquire the knowledge through years of work experience and studying the exam materials, and furthermore, they have to keep learning from daily work even after they become architects.

"Let alone" isn't really used for introducing new clauses: - He can hardly carry on a basic conversation in French, let alone write about complex topics. - It is difficult enough for her to name the days of the week, let alone say them in order.

With that in mind, we should never set too much store byglorify/encourage studying alone since there are things that are more valuable in college. With that in mind, we should never glorify/encourage studying alone since there are things that are more valuable in college.

"Set too much store" isn't suitable for this sentence; it sounds a bit off in my opinion. The words in the suggestion are similar enough to the meaning of the idiom and fit better.

People’s alttitude in life to some degree is determined by the horizon to some degree. People’s attitude in life is determined by the horizon to some degree.

To be honest, this sentence sounds a bit off because "horizon" makes the subject vague. I change the sentence to be grammatically correct, but personally I recommend a sentence more like: "People's attitude in life is determined by their work ethic/ambition."

People’s altitude in life to some degree is determined by their horizon. People’s altitude in life to some degree is determined by their horizon.

Not sure if you meant "attitude," although "altitude" could also work an an analogy. If so, however, you should expand on it a little to make it clearer.

The ones with a broader wide experience tend to think big and consider faaim higher. The ones with a broader wide experience tend to think big and aim higher.

I'm guessing what you mean with this sentence, but I think that "aim higher" fits in this context. It means the same as having a lot of ambition.

The ones broawith broad and wide experience tend to think big and consider far. The ones with broad and wide experience tend to think big and far.

"Consider" doesn't really work in idioms the way "think" does.

Life is full of choices, and we need to make the right move at every critical moment, which, of course, would nevercannot be possible if we can not see the whole picture. Life is full of choices, and we need to make the right move at every critical moment, which, of course, cannot be possible if we cannot see the whole picture.

Life is full of choices, and we need to make the right move at every critical moment, which, of course, would never be possible if we can notwere unable to see the whole picture. Life is full of choices, and we need to make the right move at every critical moment, which, of course, would never be possible if we were unable to see the whole picture.

Conditional ("would") requires the imperfect or past perfect in the "if" clause.

Going to college provides people with the opportunity to jump out of the small town where wethey used to live and plunge ourthemselves into exploring a new world with endless treasures. Going to college provides people with the opportunity to jump out of the small town where they used to live and plunge themselves into exploring a new world with endless treasures.

"People" ----> they (proper indirect object) You would use "we" if you wrote something like "I, as well as other people like me" since it includes you.

Going to college provides peopleus with the opportunity to jump out of the small town where we used to live and plunge ourselves into exploring a new world with endless treasures. Going to college provides us with the opportunity to jump out of the small town where we used to live and plunge ourselves into exploring a new world with endless treasures.

The subject ("people") of the main clause needs to be consistent with that in the relative clause.

Think about Steve Jobs; he would have never created Apple if he followed the conventional path like most other people did,: being devoted to studying hard and joining a big company after graduation. Think about Steve Jobs; he would have never created Apple if he followed the conventional path like most other people did: being devoted to studying hard and joining a big company after graduation.

Think about Steve Jobs; he would have never created Apple if he followed the conventional path like most other people did, devoteding himself to studying hard and joining a big company after graduation. Think about Steve Jobs; he would have never created Apple if he followed the conventional path like most other people did, devoting himself to studying hard and joining a big company after graduation.

NPlease note that I’m not encouraging people to follow Steven and quit school. Rather, I’m stressing that his Apple empire would have been built without his passion and enriched life experience whichif he had followed the conventional route. Dropping out helped him envisagcreate the future of personal computers and guided him through the hard times. Please note that I’m not encouraging people to follow Steven and quit school. Rather, I’m stressing that his Apple empire would have been built without his passion and enriched life experience if he had followed the conventional route. Dropping out helped him create the future of personal computers and guide him through the hard times.

Putting "note" in the beginning sounds a bit easygoing in an essay such as this, but "please note" has a more formal tone. Additionally, like the first correction made, this section would be easier to read split up into multiple sentences.

Note that I’m not encouraging people to follow Steven and quit school,. I’m stressingpointing out that his Apple empire would have been built without his passion and the enriched life experience which helped him envisage the future of personal computers and guided him through the hard times. Note that I’m not encouraging people to follow Steven and quit school. I’m pointing out that his Apple empire would have been built without his passion and the enriched life experience which helped him envisage the future of personal computers and guided him through hard times.

So if we cherish college life and experience more, we might receive unexpected harvests. So if we cherish college life and experience more, we might receive unexpected harvests.

So cherish college life and experience more,; we might receive unexpected harvests. So cherish college life and experience more; we might receive unexpected harvests.

College campus is a place where elite social aggregate, particularly with the top universitieses, particularly top universities, are places where the elite assemble socially. College campuses, particularly top universities, are places where the elite assemble socially.

"Aggregate" doesn't sound quite right in this sentence, mostly because it can also be used as a noun or an adjective. Because of that, its usage in this sentence is a bit off. "Assemble" sounds more concise.

CThe college campus is a place where the elite social agcongregate, particularly withat the top universities. The college campus is a place where the elite congregate, particularly at the top universities.

"Aggregate" is for numbers and data.

Cultivating a network of good mentors and helpful friends who might be prominent talents in one way or another can massivegreatly expand the width of life and bestow ourselves withour lives and bestow unlimited possibilities upon us. Cultivating a network of good mentors and helpful friends who might be prominent talents in one way or another can greatly expand our lives and bestow unlimited possibilities upon us.

"Width of life" is awkward. "Bestow" is used with "on" or "upon." "Ourselves" is not necessary here, as the subject is "cultivating a network…" and not "we."

Influenced by the charisma of admirable human beings, there is a chance we wouldcan get enlightened and recast and become a better man we can ever imagine. Influenced by the charisma of admirable human beings, there is a chance we can get enlightened and become a better man we can ever imagine.

"And recast" makes the sentence a bit redundant.

Influenced by the charisma of admirable human beings, there is a chance we would getbe enlightened and recast andshaped, become aing better mpeople than we can ever imagine. Influenced by the charisma of admirable human beings, there is a chance we would be enlightened and reshaped, becoming better people than we can ever imagine.

I think this wording sounds better. Be careful of subject-object correspondences.

Besides, we would never know when our friends willcan give us a helping hand while we are struggling with our careers or having trouble in our lives. Besides, our friends can give us a helping hand while we are struggling with our careers or having trouble in our lives.

"We would never know when our friends will" suggests something negative, in that it probably won't happen.

Given the shared experiences and precious memoryies between schoolmates, this network can be a lifelong treasure to us. Given the shared experiences and precious memories between schoolmates, this network can be a lifelong treasure to us.

Sadly, I didn’t realize this whole idea until I graduated from college and discovered that my four-year life was stuck with textbooks butand nothing else. Sadly, I didn’t realize this whole idea until I graduated from college and discovered that my four-year life was stuck with textbooks and nothing else.

Sadly, I didn’t realize this whole idea until I graduated from college and discovered that my four-year life was stuckfilled with textbooks butand nothing else. Sadly, I didn’t realize this until I graduated from college and discovered that my four-year life was filled with textbooks and nothing else.

Feeling a little remorse, I heream shareing my feelings with young generations, here and wishing you a spectacular college life. Feeling a little remorse, I am sharing my feelings with young generations here and wishing you a spectacular college life.

Feeling a little remorse, I heream shareing my feeling here with younger generations, wishing you a spectacular college life. Feeling a little remorse, I am sharing my feeling here with younger generations, wishing you a spectacular college life.