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shimei

March 11, 2022

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IELTS T2 (4)

Topic:
Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


My answer:
It is argued that people become more rely on each other nowadays. There are various aspects show different views, and in my opinon, I think that citizens rely on themselves more than others.
Here are the reasons why people think we need more company. People prefer to use social media more than ever before, no matter they are children or old people, because they need interation from the other person. For example, when you walk in any streets in a city, you can see many people hoding a smartphone and wathing short videos from different APP. Furthermore, many people indulge in the Internet and frequently share their emotion or special moments in the social media, and they would keep their eyes in the screen whenever they are free. Because they hope somebody will respond inmediately.
However, people become independent. On one hand, increasing people especially the young who prefer to live alone rather than with their families. The main reason is that they have enough money for they working hard. With a good salary, they can also take part in numerous acctivities they favor. On the other hand, life in cites is more convenient because of the technology. There are so many domestic machines can help with the housework, so that citizens do not need do many housework by their families.
In conclusion, there are different views of whether people are more indepent through many aspects. I think that people are more rely on themselves because of the development of technology.

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March 12, 2022

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Here are the reasons why people think we need more companysocial interaction.

I wasn't sure what "more company" means here.

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Furthermore, many people indulge in the Internetsurf the web and frequently share their emotions or special moments ion the social media, and they would keep their eyes ion the screen whenever they arhave free time.

Wasn't sure what "indulge in the Internet" meant

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March 12, 2022

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My answer:


Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


IELTS T2 (4)


Topic:


Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent.


It is argued that people become more rely on each other nowadays.


It iscould be argued that people have become more relyiant on each other nowadays. It could be argued that people have become more reliant on each other nowadays.

There are various aspects show different views, and in my opinon, I think that citizens rely on themselves more than others.


There are various aspects showthat support different views, and in my opinion, I think that citizens rely on themselves more than others. There are various aspects that support different views, and in my opinion, I think that citizens rely on themselves more than others.

Here are the reasons why people think we need more company.


Here are the reasons why people think we need more companysocial interaction. Here are the reasons why people think we need more social interaction.

I wasn't sure what "more company" means here.

People prefer to use social media more than ever before, no matter they are children or old people, because they need interation from the other person.


People prefer to use social media more than ever before, no matter if they are children or old people, because they need interaction from the other personople. People prefer to use social media more than ever before, no matter if they are children or old people, because they need interaction from other people.

For example, when you walk in any streets in a city, you can see many people hoding a smartphone and wathing short videos from different APP.


For example, when you walk in any streets in a city, you can see many people holding a smartphone and watching short videos fromon different APPapps. For example, when you walk in any street in a city, you can see many people holding a smartphone and watching short videos on different apps.

Furthermore, many people indulge in the Internet and frequently share their emotion or special moments in the social media, and they would keep their eyes in the screen whenever they are free.


Furthermore, many people indulge in the Internetsurf the web and frequently share their emotions or special moments ion the social media, and they would keep their eyes ion the screen whenever they arhave free time. Furthermore, many people surf the web and frequently share their emotions or special moments on social media, and they would keep their eyes on the screen whenever they have free time.

Wasn't sure what "indulge in the Internet" meant

Because they hope somebody will respond inmediately.


Because they hope somebody will respond inmmediately. Because they hope somebody will respond immediately.

This should be part of the previous sentence- "They would keep their eyes on the screen whenever they have free time, because they hope somebody will respond immediately.

However, people become independent.


However, people becomhave become more independent. However, people have become more independent.

On one hand, increasing people especially the young who prefer to live alone rather than with their families.


On one hand, increasingly more people especially the young who prefer to live alone rather than with their families. On one hand, increasingly more people especially the young prefer to live alone rather than with their families.

The main reason is that they have enough money for they working hard.


The main reason is that they have enough money for theyrom working hard. The main reason is that they have enough money from working hard.

With a good salary, they can also take part in numerous acctivities they favor.


With a good salary, they can also take part in numerousenjoy their favorite acctivities they favor. With a good salary, they can also enjoy their favorite activities.

On the other hand, life in cites is more convenient because of the technology.


On the other hand, life in cities is more convenient because of the technology. On the other hand, life in cities is more convenient because of technology.

There are so many domestic machines can help with the housework, so that citizens do not need do many housework by their families.


There are so many domestic machines that can help with the housework, so that citizenspeople do not need do many housework by their familiesto do their own housework. There are so many domestic machines that can help with the housework, so that people do not need to do their own housework.

In conclusion, there are different views of whether people are more indepent through many aspects.


In conclusion, there are different views of whether people are more indepent throughdent when considering many aspects. In conclusion, there are different views of whether people are more independent when considering many aspects.

I think that people are more rely on themselves because of the development of technology.


I think that people are more rely on themselvesself-reliant because of the development of technology. I think that people are more self-reliant because of the development of technology.

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