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It's cold and uncomfortable outside my warm duvet. Why do I need to leave my bed each morning when there's nothing important to do? The fact that it is still pitch black outside doesn't help either. I'm not sure what exact force helped me to leave my bed half asleep and go straight into the hot shower but here I am, trying not to fall asleep again. Who told me that waking up at 5 am is a great idea, that its the best time to focus on the things without any distractions? And when I'm up I'm up, theres no point in doing nothing. I can't easily magically transport to my cozy and chaotic dreams now, no matter how hard I might try. Warm water is starting to be too warm as a sign that I should go out, but again everything is so uncomfortable on the other side of shower curtains. And here it is, my beloved unknown force giving me motivation to move on with my day and embrace the cold room. And then I'm standing, wet and cold thinking about warm black coffee and the unknown power can take a break for rest of the day.
Highlands cows
It's cold and uncomfortable outside of my warm duvet.
Why do I need to leave my bed each morning when there's nothing important to do?
The fact that it is still pitch black outside doesn't help either.
I'm not sure what exact force helped me to leave my bed half -asleep and go straight into the hot shower, but here I am, trying not to fall asleep again.
Who told me that waking up at 5 am is a great idea, that it's the best time to focus on the things without any distractions?
And when I'm up, I'm up, theres no point in doing nothing.
I can't easilyjust magically transportgo back to my cozy and chaotic dreams now, no matter how hard I might try.
"Just" here has a meaning like "simply", so it's a more natural replacement for "easily". And I changed "transport" to "go back" because "transport" has the more specific feeling of physically travelling, so it sounded like you wanted to go into the world inside your dreams haha
WarmThe water is starting to befeel too warm a, which is a sign that I should go out, but again everything is so uncomfortable on the other side of the shower curtains.
And here it is, my beloved unknown force giving me motivation to move on with my day and embrace the cold room.
And then I'm standing, wet and cold, thinking about warm black coffee, and the unknown power can take a break for the rest of the day.
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Very evocative writing! That's really the worst kind of struggle. If you need to get up early for work/school and struggle with it, I recommend getting a sunrise alarm. Even if you don't get enough sleep, it helps you naturally wake up, instead of having to start your day with a blaring alarm making you panic. But if you don't need to get up at 5am, then it definitely doesn't help productivity if you just feel terrible at that hour 😄. Your body wants to wait for the sun.
Highlands cows
Why do I need to leave myget out of bed each morning when there's nothing important to do?
If this is supposed to sound like prose (writing you'd find in a story), your original phrasing is great. If you want it to sound more like everyday speech, I would recommend my phrasing instead.
The fact that it i's still pitch black outside doesn't help either.
Again, this correction only makes the sentence sound more casual, like everyday speech. If you want the formality, your original version is fine.
I'm not sure what exact force helped me to leave my bed half asleep and go straight into the hot shower, but here I am, trying not to fall asleep again.
If a FANBOYS conjunction (for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so) links two complete sentences, you need to put a comma before it.
Who told me that waking up at 5 am is a great idea, that its the best time to focus on the things without any distractions?
And when I'm up I'm up, there's no point in doing noanything.
Avoid double negatives in English.
I can't easily magically transportreturn to my cozy and chaotic dreams now, no matter how hard I might try.
WThe warm water is starting to be too warm a-- it's a sign that I should goet out, but again everything is so uncomfortable on the other side of shower curtains.
And here it is, my beloved unknown force giving me motivation to move on with my day and embrace the cold room.
And then I'm standing, wet and cold, thinking about warm black coffee, and the unknown power can take a break for rest of the day.
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Really good writing! All of my corrections are really just nitpicks or more advanced grammar concepts that even native speakers struggle with.
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With the "doing nothing", I don't think "there's no point in doing anything" is the meaning they were after. "There's no point doing nothing" isn't a double-negative here, they mean that doing nothing would be pointless.
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It's cold and uncomfortable outside my warm duvet. It's cold and uncomfortable outside of my warm duvet. |
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Why do I need to leave my bed each morning when there's nothing important to do? Why do I need to If this is supposed to sound like prose (writing you'd find in a story), your original phrasing is great. If you want it to sound more like everyday speech, I would recommend my phrasing instead. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The fact that it is still pitch black outside doesn't help either. The fact that it Again, this correction only makes the sentence sound more casual, like everyday speech. If you want the formality, your original version is fine. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I'm not sure what exact force helped me to leave my bed half asleep and go straight into the hot shower but here I am, trying not to fall asleep again. I'm not sure what exact force helped me to leave my bed half asleep and go straight into the hot shower, but here I am, trying not to fall asleep again. If a FANBOYS conjunction (for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so) links two complete sentences, you need to put a comma before it. I'm not sure what exact force helped me to leave my bed half |
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Who told me that waking up at 5 am is a great idea, that its the best time to focus on the things without any distractions? Who told me that waking up at 5 am is a great idea, that its the best time to focus on Who told me that waking up at 5 |
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And when I'm up I'm up, theres no point in doing nothing. And when I'm up I'm up, there's no point in doing Avoid double negatives in English. And when I'm up, I'm up, theres no point in doing nothing. |
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I can't easily magically transport to my cozy and chaotic dreams now, no matter how hard I might try. I can't easily I can't "Just" here has a meaning like "simply", so it's a more natural replacement for "easily". And I changed "transport" to "go back" because "transport" has the more specific feeling of physically travelling, so it sounded like you wanted to go into the world inside your dreams haha |
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Warm water is starting to be too warm as a sign that I should go out, but again everything is so uncomfortable on the other side of shower curtains.
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And here it is, my beloved unknown force giving me motivation to move on with my day and embrace the cold room. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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And then I'm standing, wet and cold thinking about warm black coffee and the unknown power can take a break for rest of the day. And then I'm standing, wet and cold, thinking about warm black coffee, and the unknown power can take a break for rest of the day. And then I'm standing, wet and cold, thinking about warm black coffee, and the unknown power can take a break for the rest of the day. |
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