June 13, 2024
13/06 Environment : opinion essay :)
Nowadays, people are getting more concerned about the impacts that their lives have on the environment and its degradation. One of these topics of discussion between experts is the loss of species of plants and animals, which for many is considered the main environmental problem of our time. Although I believe this issue is worth addressing, I also think that there are other concerns with the same relevance.
Firstly, the loss of species can lead to ecosystem extinction, but also to the pollution of the air and water. Global warming due to burning fossil fuels used in transportation and electricity generation can produce the disappearance of species and also threaten human beings. That is because it increases the risk of illness and death from extreme heat. In the same way, water pollution is a critical issue because all species need it to survive.
Additionally, deforestation and plastic pollution are other aspects that pose a potential danger to people and animals' lives. The felling of trees raises the appearance of fires, which is dangerous for many species and leaves them without a place to live. Furthermore, plastic pollution affects life in the sea. For instance, turtles are choking and suffocating after eating or getting trapped in some plastic.
In conclusion, even though I think that loss of animals and plants is an important environmental issue there are other concerns such as global warming, deforestation and pollution that are threatening life on the planet as well.
One of these topics of discussion between experts is the loss of species of plants and animals, which for many is considered the main environmental problem of our time.
Using the passive voice is not wrong, but it often sounds better to use the active voice.
Although I believe this issue is worth addressing, I also think that there are other concerns with the same relevancerelevant concerns.
This phrasing is a bit more natural-sounding and more concise.
Global warming due to burning fossil fuels used in transportation and electricity generation can produccause the disappearance of species and also threaten human beings.
In the same way, water pollution is a critical issue because all species need itwater to survive.
All species need water, not water pollution.
The felling of trees raiincreases the appearaoccurrences of fires, which is dangerous for many species and leaves them without a place to live.
For instance, turtles are choking and suffocating after eating or getting trapped in some plastic.
In conclusion, even though I think that loss of animals and plants is an important environmental issue, there are other concerns such as global warming, deforestation and pollution that are threatening life on the planet as well.
Nowadays, people are getting more concerned about the impacts that their lives have on the environment and its degradation.
One of these topics of discussion between experts is the loss of species of plants and animal species, which for many is considered the main environmental problem of our time.
My version is easier to read because it uses a shorter 'of' chain.
Although I believe this issue is worth addressing, I also think that there are other concerns with the same relevance.
Firstly, the loss of species can lead to ecosystem extinction, but also to the pollution of the air and water.
Global warming due to burning fossil fuels used in transportation and electricity generation can produccause the disappearance of species and also threaten human beings.
'produce' also makes sense, but 'cause' or a synonym like 'bring about' is a more vanilla acceptable option.
That is because it increases the risk of illness and death from extreme heat.
In the same way, water pollution is a critical issue because all species need it to survive.
Additionally, deforestation and plastic pollution are other aspects that pose a potential danger to people's and animals' lives.
The way you've written it isn't wrong, but it sounds better to have some parallel structure, either my version or "to human and animal lives".
The felling of trees raises the appearance of fires, which is dangerous for many species and leaves them without a place to live.
Furthermore, plastic pollution affects life in the sea.
For instance, turtles are choking and suffocating after eating or getting trapped in some plastic.
In conclusion, even though I think that loss of animals and plants is an important environmental issue, there are other concerns such as global warming, deforestation, and pollution that are threatening life on the planet as well.
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13/06 Environment : opinion essay :) |
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Nowadays, people are getting more concerned about the impacts that their lives have on the environment and its degradation. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One of these topics of discussion between experts is the loss of species of plants and animals, which for many is considered the main environmental problem of our time. One of these topics of discussion between experts is the loss of My version is easier to read because it uses a shorter 'of' chain. One of these topics of discussion between experts is the loss of species of plants and animals, which Using the passive voice is not wrong, but it often sounds better to use the active voice. |
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Although I believe this issue is worth addressing, I also think that there are other concerns with the same relevance. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Although I believe this issue is worth addressing, I also think that there are other This phrasing is a bit more natural-sounding and more concise. |
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Firstly, the loss of species can lead to ecosystem extinction, but also to the pollution of the air and water. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Global warming due to burning fossil fuels used in transportation and electricity generation can produce the disappearance of species and also threaten human beings. Global warming due to burning fossil fuels used in transportation and electricity generation can 'produce' also makes sense, but 'cause' or a synonym like 'bring about' is a more vanilla acceptable option. Global warming due to burning fossil fuels used in transportation and electricity generation can |
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That is because it increases the risk of illness and death from extreme heat. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In the same way, water pollution is a critical issue because all species need it to survive. This sentence has been marked as perfect! In the same way, water pollution is a critical issue because all species need All species need water, not water pollution. |
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Additionally, deforestation and plastic pollution are other aspects that pose a potential danger to people and animals' lives. Additionally, deforestation and plastic pollution are other aspects that pose a potential danger to people's and animals' lives. The way you've written it isn't wrong, but it sounds better to have some parallel structure, either my version or "to human and animal lives". |
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The felling of trees raises the appearance of fires, which is dangerous for many species and leaves them without a place to live. This sentence has been marked as perfect! The felling of trees |
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Furthermore, plastic pollution affects life in the sea. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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For instance, turtles are choking and suffocating after eating or getting trapped in some plastic. This sentence has been marked as perfect! For instance, turtles are choking and suffocating after eating or getting trapped in |
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In conclusion, even though I think that loss of animals and plants is an important environmental issue there are other concerns such as global warming, deforestation and pollution that are threatening life on the planet as well. In conclusion, even though I think that loss of animals and plants is an important environmental issue, there are other concerns such as global warming, deforestation, and pollution that are threatening life on the planet as well. In conclusion, even though I think that loss of animals and plants is an important environmental issue, there are other concerns such as global warming, deforestation and pollution that are threatening life on the planet as well. |
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