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deleted_user_21186

Jan. 21, 2024

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1/1-7/2024

1/1
I edited my note,did laundry and trimming my garden until afternoon.
Afterwards,I went to the cafe and cooked dinner.

1/2
I was invited the new year lunch by my aunt!
Afterwards,she taught me how to make arranged cookies and chirashi sushi.

1/3
I edited my house during afternoon.
I suddenly felt hungry then,so I went to have sushi lunch and take a cup of coffee.

1/4
It wasn’t so busy at my work.
I could stay home after work.

1/5
I could study during my work well.
It was kind of relaxing day include gym class after work.

1/6
I went to the gym in the morning and healed by it.
I went to have a break and foot massage after have a lunch at home.
It was a bit stressed by dental clinic in the evening.

1/7
I went to join yoga class in the morning and refreshed by it.
Afterwards,I found nice Japanese cafe and have a lunch in there.
Also I walked to buy handmade parts and take a break at another plant based cafe.
It was quite busy today.
I could care my foot at night.

Corrections

1/1
I edited my note,
did laundry and trimminged my garden until the afternoon.

Afterwards, I went to the cafe and cooked dinner.

1/2
I was invited t
heo a new year’s lunch by my aunt!

1/3
I
editcleaned/ rearranged/organized my house during the afternoon.

I suddenly felt hungry then,so I went to have sushi lunch and takeand had a cup of coffee.

I could stayed home after work.

1/5
I
could studyied during my work well.

It was kind of a relaxing day and included a gym class after work.

1/6
I went to the gym in the morning and
healfelt envigorated by it.

I went to have a break and foot massage after have aing lunch at home.

It was a bit stressed by dental clinic in the evening.

1/7
I went to join
a yoga class in the morning and refreshed by it.

Afterwards,I found a nice Japanese cafe and have ad lunch in there.

Also, I walked to buy handmade parcrafts? and takeook a break at another plant -based cafe.

I couldtook care of my fooeet at night.(??)

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deleted_user_21186

Jan. 23, 2024

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Appreciate for everyone who made corrections

1/1
I edited my note,
did laundry and trimminged my garden until the afternoon.

Afterwards, I went to the cafe and cooked dinner.

If there's only one cafe in your area, you can use "the", but otherwise, if you haven't referenced the cafe, I would use "a".

1/2
I was invited
to the nNew yYear's lunch by my aunt!

Please note "invited to.." Or, "My aunt invited me to a / the New Year's lunch!"

Afterwards, she taught me how to make arranged cookies and chirashi sushi.

I'm not sure what arranged cookies are ... maybe "how to arrange cookies" if there's a certain best way to do this?

1/3
I
editedstraightened up my house during afternoon.

You can organize or straighten up the rooms in a house.

Then I suddenly felt hungry then, so I went to have sushi for lunch and takhave a cup of coffee.

"Have a cup of coffee" is more common than "take a cup of coffee".

1/4
It wasn’t so busy at my work.

Or just "at work" (i.e., it's assumed that it's at your workplace).

1/5
I could study
well during my work well.

Or "I could study well at work".

It was a kind of relaxing day, which included gym class after work.

1/6
I went to the gym in the morning and healed by it.

I would simply say "...and I felt so much better afterward".

I went to have a break and a foot massage after have aing lunch at home.

Note "to have lunch".

It was a bit stressed byful at the dental clinic in the evening.

1/7
I went to
joina yoga class in the morning and felt refreshed by it.

Or "and felt refreshed afterward".

Afterwards, I found a nice Japanese cafe and have ad lunch in there.

Note "had lunch there".

Also I walked to a store to buy handmade parts and takeook a break at another plant -based cafe.

Maybe it's a vegetarian cafe.

It was quite busy today.

I could care for my foot at night.

Or "treat my foot" (give it a particular treatment - apply a cream or ointment etc.).

Feedback

Very well done throughout! You've practiced well using various verbs.
I'd like to start writing similarly, just about normal things that happen during the day. I guess a diary doesn't need to have really long entries.

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deleted_user_21186

Jan. 23, 2024

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Appreciate for everyone who made corrections

Afterwards,I went to the cafe and cooked dinner.


Afterwards, I went to the cafe and cooked dinner.

If there's only one cafe in your area, you can use "the", but otherwise, if you haven't referenced the cafe, I would use "a".

Afterwards, I went to the cafe and cooked dinner.

1/1/2024


I edited my note,did laundry and trimming my garden until afternoon.


1/5 I could study during my work well.


1/5
I could study
well during my work well.

Or "I could study well at work".

1/5
I
could studyied during my work well.

It was kind of relaxing day include gym class after work.


It was a kind of relaxing day, which included gym class after work.

It was kind of a relaxing day and included a gym class after work.

1/6 I went to the gym in the morning and healed by it.


1/6
I went to the gym in the morning and healed by it.

I would simply say "...and I felt so much better afterward".

1/6
I went to the gym in the morning and
healfelt envigorated by it.

1/1-7/2024


1/1 I edited my note,did laundry and trimming my garden until afternoon.


1/1
I edited my note,
did laundry and trimminged my garden until the afternoon.

1/1
I edited my note,
did laundry and trimminged my garden until the afternoon.

1/2 I was invited the new year lunch by my aunt!


1/2
I was invited
to the nNew yYear's lunch by my aunt!

Please note "invited to.." Or, "My aunt invited me to a / the New Year's lunch!"

1/2
I was invited t
heo a new year’s lunch by my aunt!

Afterwards,she taught me how to make arranged cookies and chirashi sushi.


Afterwards, she taught me how to make arranged cookies and chirashi sushi.

I'm not sure what arranged cookies are ... maybe "how to arrange cookies" if there's a certain best way to do this?

1/3 I edited my house during afternoon.


1/3
I
editedstraightened up my house during afternoon.

You can organize or straighten up the rooms in a house.

1/3
I
editcleaned/ rearranged/organized my house during the afternoon.

I suddenly felt hungry then,so I went to have sushi lunch and take a cup of coffee.


Then I suddenly felt hungry then, so I went to have sushi for lunch and takhave a cup of coffee.

"Have a cup of coffee" is more common than "take a cup of coffee".

I suddenly felt hungry then,so I went to have sushi lunch and takeand had a cup of coffee.

1/4 It wasn’t so busy at my work.


1/4
It wasn’t so busy at my work.

Or just "at work" (i.e., it's assumed that it's at your workplace).

I could stay home after work.


I could stayed home after work.

I went to have a break and foot massage after have a lunch at home.


I went to have a break and a foot massage after have aing lunch at home.

Note "to have lunch".

I went to have a break and foot massage after have aing lunch at home.

It was a bit stressed by dental clinic in the evening.


It was a bit stressed byful at the dental clinic in the evening.

It was a bit stressed by dental clinic in the evening.

1/7 I went to join yoga class in the morning and refreshed by it.


1/7
I went to
joina yoga class in the morning and felt refreshed by it.

Or "and felt refreshed afterward".

1/7
I went to join
a yoga class in the morning and refreshed by it.

Afterwards,I found nice Japanese cafe and have a lunch in there.


Afterwards, I found a nice Japanese cafe and have ad lunch in there.

Note "had lunch there".

Afterwards,I found a nice Japanese cafe and have ad lunch in there.

Also I walked to buy handmade parts and take a break at another plant based cafe.


Also I walked to a store to buy handmade parts and takeook a break at another plant -based cafe.

Maybe it's a vegetarian cafe.

Also, I walked to buy handmade parcrafts? and takeook a break at another plant -based cafe.

It was quite busy today.


It was quite busy today.

I could care my foot at night.


I could care for my foot at night.

Or "treat my foot" (give it a particular treatment - apply a cream or ointment etc.).

I couldtook care of my fooeet at night.(??)

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