Jan. 29, 2021
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I'm trying to improve my English by reading stuff and rewriting immediately after a text using my own words without looking at the original source. Therefore, I'd be very appreciative if you could spot any mistakes or unnatural words and sentences out there. Thank you!
After Elizabeth I died childless in 1603, James I of England and VI of Scotland became king (1603-1625), who had inherited the Scottish throne when he was only 13 months old. His childhood was turbulent, and later on married Anne of Denmark, with whom had 9 children. James I was a strong advocate of royal absolutism and the divine right of kings, which asserted kings derived their authority directly from God and, therefore, could not be held accountable for their actions by an earthly authority (such as Parliament), only by a divine authority. This earned him a reputation for narrow-mindedness and conflict with an increasingly self-asserted Parliament, which set the stage for the rebellion against his successor, Charles I. He commissioned a version of the Bible, which remained the standard text for more than 250 years - the King James’ Bible.
The Gunpowder Plot
13 young catholic gentlemen from the midlands had being conspiring a frustrated plot led by Robert Catesby to blow up the king, the House of Lords and House of Commons the 5th of November 1605 on the ceremonial opening of Parliament. The family links of a fellow plotter, Thomas Percy, to the powerful Earl of Northumberland, for whom he worked as steward, would help the conspirators gain access to Parliament. After the explosion, they would gather together the Catholic gentry of the Midlands and seize Princess Elizabeth, the only one of King James' children who would not be present at the ceremony. They wanted to return England to the Catholic faith and hoped for a new monarch (Jame's 9-year-old daughter) who was brought up to be sympathetic to their cause.
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I'm trying to improve my English by reading stuff and rewriting it immediately after a text using my own words without looking at the original source.
Therefore, I'd be very appreciative if you could spot any mistakes or unnatural words and sentences outin there.
I would use 'in' when talking about a piece of text :)
Thank you!
After Elizabeth I died childless in 1603, James I of England and VI of Scotland became king (1603-1625), who had inherited the Scottish throne when he was only 13 months old, became king (1603-1625).
I would put the additional information after stating he was King of Scotland as it's related to that more than becoming the king :)
His childhood was turbulent, and later on he married Anne of Denmark, with whom he had 9 children.
Pronouns needed here :)
James I was a strong advocate of royal absolutism and the divine right of kings, in which asserted kings derived their authority directly from God and, therefore, could not be held accountable for their actions by an earthly authority (such as Parliament), only by a divine authority.
This earned him a reputation for narrow-mindedness and conflict with an increasingly self-asserted Parliament, which set the stage for the rebellion against his successor, Charles I.
He commissioned a version of the Bible, which remained the standard text for more than 250 years - the King James’ Bible.
The Gunpowder Plot
13 young cCatholic gentlemen from the mMidlands had beingen conspiring a frustrated plot led by Robert Catesby to blow up the kKing, the House of Lords and House of Commons on the 5th of November 1605, the date onf the ceremonial opening of Parliament.
I *think* Catholic and Midlands are both capitalised :)
King is capitalised here because it's referring to a specific king.
Last change is a stylistic one to help it flow better :)
The fFamily links ofties to a fellow plotter, Thomas Percy, to the powerful Earl of Northumberland, for whom he worked as steward, would help the conspirators gain access to Parliament.
Most people I know say 'family ties' over 'links' but what you said wasn't wrong :)
After the explosion, they would gather together the Catholic gentry of the Midlands and seize Princess Elizabeth, the only one of King James' children who would not be present at the ceremony.
They wanted to return England to the Catholic faith and hoped for a new monarch (James's 9-year-old daughter) who was brought up to be sympathetic to their cause.
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Really good text, hopefully offered you some alternatives :)
July 7, 2021
Indeed, very helpful! Thanks a bunch! :)
I'm trying to improve my English by reading stuff and rewriting immediately after a text using my own words without looking at the original source.
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I'm trying to improve my English by reading stuff and rewriting immediately after a text using my own words without looking at the original source. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I'm trying to improve my English by reading stuff and rewriting it immediately after |
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Therefore, I'd be very appreciative if you could spot any mistakes or unnatural words and sentences out there. Therefore, I'd be very appreciative if you could spot any mistakes or unnatural words and sentences I would use 'in' when talking about a piece of text :) |
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After Elizabeth I died childless in 1603, James I of England and VI of Scotland became king (1603-1625), who had inherited the Scottish throne when he was only 13 months old. After Elizabeth I died childless in 1603, James I of England and VI of Scotland I would put the additional information after stating he was King of Scotland as it's related to that more than becoming the king :) |
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His childhood was turbulent, and later on married Anne of Denmark, with whom had 9 children. His childhood was turbulent, and later on he married Anne of Denmark, with whom he had 9 children. Pronouns needed here :) |
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James I was a strong advocate of royal absolutism and the divine right of kings, which asserted kings derived their authority directly from God and, therefore, could not be held accountable for their actions by an earthly authority (such as Parliament), only by a divine authority. James I was a strong advocate of royal absolutism and the divine right of kings, in which asserted kings derived their authority directly from God and, therefore, could not be held accountable for their actions by an earthly authority (such as Parliament), only by a divine authority. |
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This earned him a reputation for narrow-mindedness and conflict with an increasingly self-asserted Parliament, which set the stage for the rebellion against his successor, Charles I. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He commissioned a version of the Bible, which remained the standard text for more than 250 years - the King James’ Bible. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The Gunpowder Plot This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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13 young catholic gentlemen from the midlands had being conspiring a frustrated plot led by Robert Catesby to blow up the king, the House of Lords and House of Commons the 5th of November 1605 on the ceremonial opening of Parliament. 13 young I *think* Catholic and Midlands are both capitalised :) King is capitalised here because it's referring to a specific king. Last change is a stylistic one to help it flow better :) |
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The family links of a fellow plotter, Thomas Percy, to the powerful Earl of Northumberland, for whom he worked as steward, would help the conspirators gain access to Parliament.
Most people I know say 'family ties' over 'links' but what you said wasn't wrong :) |
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After the explosion, they would gather together the Catholic gentry of the Midlands and seize Princess Elizabeth, the only one of King James' children who would not be present at the ceremony. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They wanted to return England to the Catholic faith and hoped for a new monarch (Jame's 9-year-old daughter) who was brought up to be sympathetic to their cause. They wanted to return England to the Catholic faith and hoped for a new monarch (James's 9-year-old daughter) who was brought up to be sympathetic to their cause. |
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