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SonDepTrai21st

July 17, 2025

7
10:30pm

The sound of wind, the leafs clapped each others, the lights of car and motor/scooter.

("xe máy" could be translate to "motorbike", but it's not. I don't know what's that called, in Vietnam we use a lot, everywhere)

That's a quiet place, I was sitting there, in the swing, look around.

Every time my room mate make a phone call, play some music, I know there's nothing I can do.

I've been doing this for a few days, I hate it because I always having poor sleep, but I grateful because life is hard, which is makes the fulfill life.

Seems like I get wrong a lot in "the" and "a/an"

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10:30 pm

The sound of (the) wind, the leafves clappeding each others, the lights ofrom cars and motor/scooters.

The sentence starts off in present tense, so continuing with the present.
We would typically say "the" wind, but just wind is ok too
Plural of leaf = leaves
Motor = engine, what all automatic vehicles have inside. Motors don't produce light, so it won't fit here

("xe máy" could be translate to "motorbike"," but it's not.

I think motorbike would be okay. It's hard for me to say because I'm not familiar with this kind of vehicle. Perhaps it is like a moped? You can Google that to see if it matches.

I don't know what's that called, in Vietnam we use them a lot, everywhere)

That


There
's a quiet place, I was sitting there, in the swing, looking around.

Every time my room mate makes a phone call, or plays some music, I know there's nothing I can do.

I've been doing this for a few days,. I hate it because (I always/it makes me) havinge poor sleep, but I am grateful because life is hard, which is makes ithe fulfill lifeing.

"It makes me" is more appropriate because your roommate's actions are CAUSING your bad sleep.
The last part of your sentence doesn't make a lot of sense to me, but hopefully I edited it to your point. I interpreted that you are thankful for life's difficulties.

SIt seems like I get wrong a lot inmake a lot of mistakes with "the" and "a/an."

Don't worry, this is a common problem with learning English and it will come more naturally to you with time.

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Good job. Sorry about your roommate, that is a frustrating situation.

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SonDepTrai21st

July 19, 2025

7

Thanks bro.

Can I ask you why did you change "That's a quiet place, I was sitting there, in the swing, looking around."

into "there". What's the difference between "that" and "there"?

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nefare

July 19, 2025

0

No problem.

Original : "That's a quiet place, I was sitting there..." to "There's a quiet place, I was sitting there..."

When you use "that," you are pointing the place out to me, but it has to be either a place you have already mentioned or a place I can see if we are together. Otherwise, you need to introduce it. And "there is" is typically used to introduce something (the other user corrected with "it was a" which also works to introduce/describe the area for your story). Example: "There is a beautiful view at the top of the nearby hill. That's the place I will have my wedding." Even if I can't see the hill, you just told me about it so I know of it now. Example 2: "That bike was made 100 years ago." This works if we are sitting together and I can see the bike you are talking about.

Hope that helps.

The sound of wind, the leafs clappedves rustled against each others, the lights of the car and motor/scooter.

You could use “clapped” (but you need to say “clapped against”) but the word “clapped” sounds more like a the sound you would make with your hands when you clap them together and it’s a much sharper sound than leaves would normally make. In English you would normally describe leaves as “rustling” or you could say “whispered” if you were being metaphorical.
You also need an action after “the lights of the car and motorcycle/scooter for it to make sense. If you just want to convey that there were car and motorcycle/scooter lights you could say “there were car lights and motorcycle/scooter lights” or there were lights from cars and motorcycles/scooters” but if you were being more descriptive you could say something like “I could see the lights of cars and motorcycles in the distance”.

I don't know what's that called, in Vietnam we use a lot, everywhere)

That'


It wa
s a quiet place, I was sitting there, ion the swing, looking around.

Every time my room mate makes a phone call, or plays some music, I know there's nothing I can do.

I've been doing this for a few days,. I hate it because I always havinge poor sleep, but I’m grateful at the same time because life is hard, which isand that makes thit more fulfill lifeing.

Seems like I get wrong a lot in "the" and "a/an" wrong a lot

Don’t worry, “the” and “a/an” are tricky but most English people will still generally know what you mean if you get them wrong 🙂

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SonDepTrai21st

July 19, 2025

7

Thanks mate, I appreciate it.

10:30pm


10:30 pm

The sound of wind, the leafs clapped each others, the lights of car and motor/scooter.


The sound of wind, the leafs clappedves rustled against each others, the lights of the car and motor/scooter.

You could use “clapped” (but you need to say “clapped against”) but the word “clapped” sounds more like a the sound you would make with your hands when you clap them together and it’s a much sharper sound than leaves would normally make. In English you would normally describe leaves as “rustling” or you could say “whispered” if you were being metaphorical. You also need an action after “the lights of the car and motorcycle/scooter for it to make sense. If you just want to convey that there were car and motorcycle/scooter lights you could say “there were car lights and motorcycle/scooter lights” or there were lights from cars and motorcycles/scooters” but if you were being more descriptive you could say something like “I could see the lights of cars and motorcycles in the distance”.

The sound of (the) wind, the leafves clappeding each others, the lights ofrom cars and motor/scooters.

The sentence starts off in present tense, so continuing with the present. We would typically say "the" wind, but just wind is ok too Plural of leaf = leaves Motor = engine, what all automatic vehicles have inside. Motors don't produce light, so it won't fit here

("xe máy" could be translate to "motorbike", but it's not.


("xe máy" could be translate to "motorbike"," but it's not.

I think motorbike would be okay. It's hard for me to say because I'm not familiar with this kind of vehicle. Perhaps it is like a moped? You can Google that to see if it matches.

I don't know what's that called, in Vietnam we use a lot, everywhere) That's a quiet place, I was sitting there, in the swing, look around.


I don't know what's that called, in Vietnam we use a lot, everywhere)

That'


It wa
s a quiet place, I was sitting there, ion the swing, looking around.

I don't know what's that called, in Vietnam we use them a lot, everywhere)

That


There
's a quiet place, I was sitting there, in the swing, looking around.

Seems like I get wrong a lot in "the" and "a/an"


Seems like I get wrong a lot in "the" and "a/an" wrong a lot

Don’t worry, “the” and “a/an” are tricky but most English people will still generally know what you mean if you get them wrong 🙂

SIt seems like I get wrong a lot inmake a lot of mistakes with "the" and "a/an."

Don't worry, this is a common problem with learning English and it will come more naturally to you with time.

Every time my room mate make a phone call, play some music, I know there's nothing I can do.


Every time my room mate makes a phone call, or plays some music, I know there's nothing I can do.

Every time my room mate makes a phone call, or plays some music, I know there's nothing I can do.

I've been doing this for a few days, I hate it because I always having poor sleep, but I grateful because life is hard, which is makes the fulfill life.


I've been doing this for a few days,. I hate it because I always havinge poor sleep, but I’m grateful at the same time because life is hard, which isand that makes thit more fulfill lifeing.

I've been doing this for a few days,. I hate it because (I always/it makes me) havinge poor sleep, but I am grateful because life is hard, which is makes ithe fulfill lifeing.

"It makes me" is more appropriate because your roommate's actions are CAUSING your bad sleep. The last part of your sentence doesn't make a lot of sense to me, but hopefully I edited it to your point. I interpreted that you are thankful for life's difficulties.

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