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092403- The night

When night comes, the blue moon also comes. One of my new friends said that he felt I always wanna be happy in the social situation though I am not that happy, so he tried to avoid talking negative things when talking with me. I appreciate that I have such a comfortable friend. I'm just a little tired to listen to others' complaints coz I already have loads of them (like now haha).

I guess it's about lack of sleep. I fell into sleep at 3 am and my body clock woke me up at 6 am. Though I grabbed a big cup of coffee, I still spent half of the Saturday afternoon confessing to my body and brain (but the quality of sleep is not quite good). Now it's near 10 pm. Thirty minutes later I would go into bed.

Tomorrow I would write some interesting things I went through on my travel from China to the USA and my USA life. Gosh, I really grew a lot.

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092403- The night

When night comes, the blue moon also comes out.

One of my new friends said that he felt I always wannated to be happy in the social situations, even though I am not normally that happy, so he tried to avoid talking about negative things when talking with me.

I appreciate that I have such a comfortablnsiderate friend.

I'm just a little tired tof listening to others' complaints cozbecause I already have loads of them (like now haha).

I guess it's about lack of sleep.

I fell into asleep at 3 am and my body clock woke me up at 6 am.

Though I grabbed a big cup of coffee, I still spent half of theat Saturday afternoon confessing totelling my body and brain (buthat the quality of sleep is not quitevery good).

Now it's nearalmost 10 pm.

TIn thirty minutes later I would go into bed.

Tomorrow I wouldill write some interesting things I went throughexperienced on my travels from China to the USA and my USA life in the USA.

Gosh, I really grewchanged a lot.

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tana_gao

Sept. 25, 2022

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Though I grabbed a big cup of coffee, I still spent half of theat Saturday afternoon confessing totelling my body and brain (buthat the quality of sleep is not quitevery good).

excellent correction!

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tana_gao

Sept. 25, 2022

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Thanks for your feedback, more natural expressions I learned from it!

092403- The night

When the night comes, the blue moon also comes.

This feels better to me.

One of my new friends said that he felt that I always wanna be happy in the social situations even though I am not that happy, so he tried to avoid talksaying negative things when talking with me.

Saying or talking about negative things, not taking negative things. I moved the that for better flow. I'm a bit unsure about the "he felt that I always wanna be happy in social situations even though I am not that happy" part. There's nothing wrong with it, but I don't think it makes much sense? Maybe it would be better to say something like "I always wanna seem happy," if that's what you meant. Also, it might make sense to change the tense of "felt" and "tried" to "feels" and "tries."

I appreciate that I have such aa friend that I can be so comfortable friearound.

You only say "comfortable X" for... like... furniture. Or environments. So you can say "comfortable chair," "comfortable atmosphere," "comfortable bed," etc. but not "comfortable friend."

I'm just a little too tired to listen to others' complaints coz I already have loads of them myself (like now haha).

If you meant that you have already had enough of listening to others' complaints, you should say "little tired of listening to others' complaints."

I guess it's about lack of sleep.

I fell into sleep at 3 am and my body clock woke me up at 6 am.

Though I grabbed a big cup of coffee, I still spent half of themy Saturday afternoon confessing? to my body and brain (but the quality of sleep is not quite good).

Alternatively: "half (of) the afternoon on Saturday." I'm not sure what confess was supposed to mean, nor what "but the quality of sleep is not quite good" means. If you don't mind, if you could elaborate a bit in the comments, I would be happy to explain further in the comments.

Now it's nearalmost 10 pm.

Thirty minutes later, I wouldill go into bed.

Tomorrow, I wouldill write some interesting things I went through on my travelip from China to the USA and my USA lifeduring my life in the USA.

You said "on my trip," but you can't say "on my life," and "things I went through my life" doesn't make sense either, so you need to say "during" there.

Gosh, I really grew a lot.

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Nice work! Good night :)

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tana_gao

Sept. 25, 2022

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Though I grabbed a big cup of coffee, I still spent half of themy Saturday afternoon confessing? to my body and brain (but the quality of sleep is not quite good).

Thanks. What I was trying to say is: I slept from 2 pm to 4 pm. "Confessing" is my joke (absolutely it fails haha), I mean that I sleep to say sorry to my brain because I just enjoy sleeping for 3 hours today, and my brain is not happy and my emotion is down.

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tana_gao

Sept. 25, 2022

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Thanks, lunabunn, your feedbacks are always useful and supportive! You too!

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lunabunn

Sept. 25, 2022

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Thanks. What I was trying to say is: I slept from 2 pm to 4 pm. "Confessing" is my joke (absolutely it fails haha), I mean that I sleep to say sorry to my brain because I just enjoy sleeping for 3 hours today, and my brain is not happy and my emotion is down.

Ah, I think that would work with some alternate wording!
How about: "... afternoon apologizing to my body and brain ..."
As for the last part in the parentheses, I am still a bit unsure, but I think something like "... but the quality of my sleep was not very good ..." would be fine.

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tana_gao

Sept. 25, 2022

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Ah, I think that would work with some alternate wording! How about: "... afternoon apologizing to my body and brain ..." As for the last part in the parentheses, I am still a bit unsure, but I think something like "... but the quality of my sleep was not very good ..." would be fine.

Greattttt! You got my point! Thanks very much!

092403- The night


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When night comes, the blue moon also comes.


When the night comes, the blue moon also comes.

This feels better to me.

When night comes, the blue moon also comes out.

One of my new friends said that he felt I always wanna be happy in the social situation though I am not that happy, so he tried to avoid talking negative things when talking with me.


One of my new friends said that he felt that I always wanna be happy in the social situations even though I am not that happy, so he tried to avoid talksaying negative things when talking with me.

Saying or talking about negative things, not taking negative things. I moved the that for better flow. I'm a bit unsure about the "he felt that I always wanna be happy in social situations even though I am not that happy" part. There's nothing wrong with it, but I don't think it makes much sense? Maybe it would be better to say something like "I always wanna seem happy," if that's what you meant. Also, it might make sense to change the tense of "felt" and "tried" to "feels" and "tries."

One of my new friends said that he felt I always wannated to be happy in the social situations, even though I am not normally that happy, so he tried to avoid talking about negative things when talking with me.

I appreciate that I have such a comfortable friend.


I appreciate that I have such aa friend that I can be so comfortable friearound.

You only say "comfortable X" for... like... furniture. Or environments. So you can say "comfortable chair," "comfortable atmosphere," "comfortable bed," etc. but not "comfortable friend."

I appreciate that I have such a comfortablnsiderate friend.

I'm just a little tired to listen to others' complaints coz I already have loads of them (like now haha).


I'm just a little too tired to listen to others' complaints coz I already have loads of them myself (like now haha).

If you meant that you have already had enough of listening to others' complaints, you should say "little tired of listening to others' complaints."

I'm just a little tired tof listening to others' complaints cozbecause I already have loads of them (like now haha).

I guess it's about lack of sleep.


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I fell into sleep at 3 am and my body clock woke me up at 6 am.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I fell into asleep at 3 am and my body clock woke me up at 6 am.

Though I grabbed a big cup of coffee, I still spent half of the Saturday afternoon confessing to my body and brain (but the quality of sleep is not quite good).


Though I grabbed a big cup of coffee, I still spent half of themy Saturday afternoon confessing? to my body and brain (but the quality of sleep is not quite good).

Alternatively: "half (of) the afternoon on Saturday." I'm not sure what confess was supposed to mean, nor what "but the quality of sleep is not quite good" means. If you don't mind, if you could elaborate a bit in the comments, I would be happy to explain further in the comments.

Though I grabbed a big cup of coffee, I still spent half of theat Saturday afternoon confessing totelling my body and brain (buthat the quality of sleep is not quitevery good).

Now it's near 10 pm.


Now it's nearalmost 10 pm.

Now it's nearalmost 10 pm.

Thirty minutes later I would go into bed.


Thirty minutes later, I wouldill go into bed.

TIn thirty minutes later I would go into bed.

Tomorrow I would write some interesting things I went through on my travel from China to the USA and my USA life.


Tomorrow, I wouldill write some interesting things I went through on my travelip from China to the USA and my USA lifeduring my life in the USA.

You said "on my trip," but you can't say "on my life," and "things I went through my life" doesn't make sense either, so you need to say "during" there.

Tomorrow I wouldill write some interesting things I went throughexperienced on my travels from China to the USA and my USA life in the USA.

Gosh, I really grew a lot.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Gosh, I really grewchanged a lot.

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