Sept. 24, 2022
092401- Friend in my house
Yesterday, my friend came to my home and we made dinner together. We also have some coffee wine. An interesting match, I would say. Coffee makes people awake, wine makes people sleepy, then put together, a hilarious output came: I would love to talk more but also would love to sleep right now.
My friend shares her personal story with me. Sometimes making friends is like a sailor meeting iceberg. We just browser others' 10% life, when we learn them better, we would understand them more. I really appreciated her sharing, it meant to trust.
092401- Friend in mMy hHouse
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Yesterday, my friend came to my homuse and we made dinner together.
"House" may be a preference thing. Also, keep in mind that "my friend came to my house" is fairly passive.
We also haved some coffee wine.
I was so close to correcting it to "coffee wine" before I looked it up. It's a real thing that exists.
AIt's an interesting match, I would say.
Coffee mwakes people awake, wup. Wine makes people sleepy, then put. Put them together, a hilarious output came: I would lovend it creates hilarious result: I wanted to talk more, but I also would love to sleep right nowanted to go to sleep.
Separated this into three sentences to make it less clunky. It was a run-on sentence before.
My friend sharesd her personal story with me.
Sometimes, making a friends is like a sailor meeting an iceberg.
We just browser others' 10% life, when we learn them better, we wouldsee only about 10% of their true self at first, but when we learn more about them, we understand them more.
I edited this to get the meaning across better. I used singular they because the saying applies to all genders.
I really appreciated her sharing, it meant to trus that.
I didn't know what "it meant to trust" meant. Does it refer to the saying she said?
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Your friend is very wise, and I never knew about the existence of coffee wine until this journal entry. There were no spelling errors; it was mainly grammar errors, such as forgetting to use past tense. But I understood it pretty well. Good job!
Sept. 25, 2022
Yesterday, my friend came to my homuse and we made dinner together.
Thanks, I have a question: what's the meaning of fairly passive? If I would love to express that I am happy she came, which phrases should I use? Thanks.
Sept. 25, 2022
We just browser others' 10% life, when we learn them better, we wouldsee only about 10% of their true self at first, but when we learn more about them, we understand them more.
Great editation!
Sept. 25, 2022
Yeah, coffee wine is a nice grip when you would love to try something new on a chill night.
Sept. 26, 2022
Thanks, I have a question: what's the meaning of fairly passive? If I would love to express that I am happy she came, which phrases should I use? Thanks.
A passive sentence is one where the speaker is not the subject of the sentence. For example, compare these two sentences:
I gave my dog the ball (active).
My dog received the ball from me (passive).
Your sentence is fine, in my opinion. I was just saying that because some people really hate the passive voice. So it's more something to be aware of.
Sept. 26, 2022
A passive sentence is one where the speaker is not the subject of the sentence. For example, compare these two sentences: I gave my dog the ball (active). My dog received the ball from me (passive). Your sentence is fine, in my opinion. I was just saying that because some people really hate the passive voice. So it's more something to be aware of.
gotta, it really explains my question! Thanks very much!
09/24/01- Friend in my house
Yesterday, my friend came to my homeover and we made dinner together.
"to my home" is correct, but to sound more natural I'd say "she came over".
We also haved some coffee and wine.
An interesting match, I would say.
Great
Coffee makes people awake, wine makes people sleepy, thenand put together, was a hilarious output cameresult: I would love to talk more, but also would love to sleep right now.
This sounds really natural, good job
Sometimes making friends is like a sailor meeting an iceberg.
We just browser others' 10% life,see 10% of other's lives, but when we learn them better, we wcould understand them more.
I really appreciated her sharing, it meant tohat she trusted me.
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Amazing work!
We also haved some coffee and wine.
An interesting matchcombination, I would say.
Coffee makes people awake, and wine makes people sleepy, t. When put together, you get a hilarious output came: I would love to talk more but alsoI would also love to sleep right now.
Sometimes making friends is like a (sailor)boat meeting an iceberg.
We just browser others' 10% life, when we learn them better, we would understand them more.
I don't get this sentence. Could you perhaps rephrase it?
I really appreciated her sharing, it meant to trust. her story. It shows she trusts me.
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Very good!
Sept. 24, 2022
We just browser others' 10% life, when we learn them better, we would understand them more.
Thanks rationelis! I tried to say that an iceberg just shows its 10% above the sea level, but 90% of it is under the surface. We could only see its groomed appearance when we have a long-distance to watch them, just when we get closer, then we could understand its deep and natural reality. How could I express it more naturally? I really appreciate your reading and feedback, thanks! ;D
Sept. 25, 2022
Thanks rationelis! I tried to say that an iceberg just shows its 10% above the sea level, but 90% of it is under the surface. We could only see its groomed appearance when we have a long-distance to watch them, just when we get closer, then we could understand its deep and natural reality. How could I express it more naturally? I really appreciate your reading and feedback, thanks! ;D
Ah, like that!
Perhaps something like: 'We are aware of just 10% of eachother's life.'
Sept. 25, 2022
Ah, like that! Perhaps something like: 'We are aware of just 10% of eachother's life.'
Great ideas 💡!
We also haved some coffee wine.
past tense to match with "came to my house"
An interesting matchcombination, I would say.
Coffee mwakes people awakeup, wine makes peoplethem sleepy, then putput them together, and a hilarious output camecome ensues: I would love to talk more but also would love to go to sleep right now.
We just browser others' 10% 10% of their life, w. When we learnget to know them better, we would understand them more.
I really appreciated her sharing, it meant tos she trusts me.
Or you can say "it was a sign of trust"
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Nicely written. "Coffee wine" is that a single thing or do you mean "coffee and wine" . I liked the sailor analogy.
Sept. 24, 2022
Thanks, Simon! Your feedback gave me more natural expressions in English, polish!
About the Coffee Wine, I checked it out, finding that its real name is Coffee Liqueur haha. A good one if you would love to taste it!
Yeah, writing analogy in English is a challenge for me, thanks for your encouragement! :D
Sept. 24, 2022
Thanks, Simon! Your feedback gave me more natural expressions in English, polish! About the Coffee Wine, I checked it out, finding that its real name is Coffee Liqueur haha. A good one if you would love to taste it! Yeah, writing analogy in English is a challenge for me, thanks for your encouragement! :D
Ah yes coffee liqueur. Cool.
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