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07/06 A bad situation: opinion essay :)

Everyone has difficult situations in life, and some people have opposing views about how to face these problems. Some individuals tend to believe that it is better to accept a bad situation, while I argue that it is more beneficial to improve the situation.

On the one hand, it could be argued that accepting a bad situation without doing anything to change it can cause some mental health disabilities and therefore a bad quality of life. Situations such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money can lead to depression and anxiety. In fact, I lived that experience firsthand. When I was working as a journalist for a newspaper, I was very miserable because of the toxic job environment. I felt depressed while staying there, and it wasn't until I quit that I was able to enjoy my life.

In addition, when people do not make decisions to leave a bad situation, they will continue to live in this circumstance forever. Individuals will not stop experiencing a shortage of money unless they find alternative income or improve their career, and if they do not do it, they will stick with the same problems. For instance, I have an uncle who is always dealing with financial difficulties and never finds an economic stability. That had condemned him with the same frustration over and over.

In conclusion, I believe that accepting a bad situation without doing anything to change it can cause some mental health disabilities and also condemn people to live with the same problems forever.

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Everyone has difficult situations in life, and some people have opposing views about how to face these problems.

Some individuals tend to believe that it is better to accept a bad situation, while I argue that it is more beneficial to improve the situation.

On the one hand, it could be argued that accepting a bad situation without doing anything to change it can cause some mental health disabilitichallenges and therefore a bad quality of life.

Situations such as an unsatisfactory job or a shortage of money can lead to depression and anxiety.

In fact, I lived that've experienced that firsthand.

When I was working as a journalist for a newspaper, I was very miserable because of the toxic jobwork environment.

I felt depressed while staying there, and it wasn't until I quit that I was able to enjoy my life.

In addition, when people do not make decisions to leave a bad situation, they will continue to live in thisose circumstances forever.

Individuals will not stop experiencing a shortage of money unless they find alternative sources of income or improve their career, and if they do not do it, they will be stiuck with the same problems.

For instance, I have an uncle who is always dealing with financial difficulties and has never finds an economicound financial stability.

Thatis hads condemned him withto face the same frustration over and over.

In conclusion, I believe that accepting a bad situation without doing anything to change it can cause some mental health disabilitichallenges and also condemnause people to live with the same problems forever.

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Great writing! Interesting topic as always.

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Xtren070

June 11, 2024

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Thank you a lot :3

07/06 A bad situation: opinion essay :)

Everyone has difficult situations in life, and some people have opposing views about how to face these problems.

Some individuals tend to believe that it is better to accept a bad situation, while I argue that it is more beneficial to improve ithe situation.

More natural not to repeat the noun.

On the one hand, it could be argued that accepting a bad situation without doing anything to change it can cause some mental health disabilitisues and therefore a bad quality of life.

Depression, anxiety, and other mental illnesses are not generally considered "disabilities" in the same way as autism, schizophrenia, ADHD, etc., are. The reasons are maybe more political than functional, but you generally wouldn't use "disability" unless you were talking about one of those.

Situations such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money can lead to depression and anxiety.

In fact, I lived that experienced that firsthand.

When I was working as a journalist for a newspaper, I was very miserable because of the toxic job environment.

I felt depressed while staying there, and it wasn't until I quit that I was able to enjoy my life.

In addition, when people do not make decisions to leave a bad situation, they will continue to live in thise same circumstance forever.

Individuals will not stop experiencing a shortage of money unless they find alternative income or improve their career, and if they do not do it, they will remain stiuck with the same problems.

For instance, I have an uncle who is always dealing with financial difficulties and is never finds an economically stabilityle.

That had condemntrapped him with the same frustration over and over.

"Condemn" fundamentally means "to blame" or "find responsible."

"The cuprite was condemned to 10 years in prison." -- Here, the culprit was condemned by the judge or thus ordered to serve time in prison.

So I think you might also be able to use "condemn" in this sentence as perhaps the meaning has shifted to being trapped or imposed upon, inspired by uses like in the above sentence, but in the next sentence it feels like the wrong meaning of "condemn" comes out so I thought it better to change it here too.

In conclusion, I believe that accepting a bad situation without doing anything to change it can cause some mental health disabilitisues and also condemntrap people into liveing with the same problems forever.

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Very well written and an interesting read.

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Xtren070

June 11, 2024

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Thank you!!

Everyone has difficult situations in life, and some people have opposing views about how to face these problems.


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Some individuals tend to believe that it is better to accept a bad situation, while I argue that it is more beneficial to improve the situation.


Some individuals tend to believe that it is better to accept a bad situation, while I argue that it is more beneficial to improve ithe situation.

More natural not to repeat the noun.

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On the one hand, it could be argued that accepting a bad situation without doing anything to change it can cause some mental health disabilities and therefore a bad quality of life.


On the one hand, it could be argued that accepting a bad situation without doing anything to change it can cause some mental health disabilitisues and therefore a bad quality of life.

Depression, anxiety, and other mental illnesses are not generally considered "disabilities" in the same way as autism, schizophrenia, ADHD, etc., are. The reasons are maybe more political than functional, but you generally wouldn't use "disability" unless you were talking about one of those.

On the one hand, it could be argued that accepting a bad situation without doing anything to change it can cause some mental health disabilitichallenges and therefore a bad quality of life.

07/06 A bad situation: opinion essay :)


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Situations such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money can lead to depression and anxiety.


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Situations such as an unsatisfactory job or a shortage of money can lead to depression and anxiety.

In fact, I lived that experience firsthand.


In fact, I lived that experienced that firsthand.

In fact, I lived that've experienced that firsthand.

When I was working as a journalist for a newspaper, I was very miserable because of the toxic job environment.


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When I was working as a journalist for a newspaper, I was very miserable because of the toxic jobwork environment.

I felt depressed while staying there, and it wasn't until I quit that I was able to enjoy my life.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In addition, when people do not make decisions to leave a bad situation, they will continue to live in this circumstance forever.


In addition, when people do not make decisions to leave a bad situation, they will continue to live in thise same circumstance forever.

In addition, when people do not make decisions to leave a bad situation, they will continue to live in thisose circumstances forever.

Individuals will not stop experiencing a shortage of money unless they find alternative income or improve their career, and if they do not do it, they will stick with the same problems.


Individuals will not stop experiencing a shortage of money unless they find alternative income or improve their career, and if they do not do it, they will remain stiuck with the same problems.

Individuals will not stop experiencing a shortage of money unless they find alternative sources of income or improve their career, and if they do not do it, they will be stiuck with the same problems.

For instance, I have an uncle who is always dealing with financial difficulties and never finds an economic stability.


For instance, I have an uncle who is always dealing with financial difficulties and is never finds an economically stabilityle.

For instance, I have an uncle who is always dealing with financial difficulties and has never finds an economicound financial stability.

That had condemned him with the same frustration over and over.


That had condemntrapped him with the same frustration over and over.

"Condemn" fundamentally means "to blame" or "find responsible." "The cuprite was condemned to 10 years in prison." -- Here, the culprit was condemned by the judge or thus ordered to serve time in prison. So I think you might also be able to use "condemn" in this sentence as perhaps the meaning has shifted to being trapped or imposed upon, inspired by uses like in the above sentence, but in the next sentence it feels like the wrong meaning of "condemn" comes out so I thought it better to change it here too.

Thatis hads condemned him withto face the same frustration over and over.

In conclusion, I believe that accepting a bad situation without doing anything to change it can cause some mental health disabilities and also condemn people to live with the same problems forever.


In conclusion, I believe that accepting a bad situation without doing anything to change it can cause some mental health disabilitisues and also condemntrap people into liveing with the same problems forever.

In conclusion, I believe that accepting a bad situation without doing anything to change it can cause some mental health disabilitichallenges and also condemnause people to live with the same problems forever.

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