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Report on improvement that could be made in our city

Introduction

The objective of the following report is to outline the features of the city that our citizens like most and describe some recommendations that could improve dwellers daily life.

The positive aspects of the city

To start off it has to be said that our city is quite small. Yet, there is not a huge number of features that we could refer to. One of the best aspects of the city is the services we have such as the roads, the parks and so on.

Dwellers of our city usually spend the most part of their free time in the center of the city, when we could find coffee bars, shops, parks for children, etc.

Aspects that our city need

The following recommendations should be taken into consideration in order to make citizens life easier.

On one hand, beyond those positive aspects I have mentioned there is lack of some services. For instance, the existence of a shopping center or a cinema it would make the city a better site to stay as well as it would be more visited by tourists.

In the other hand, the number of cars in our city is greater and greater and creating more parking facilities would make dwellers life better.

Conclusion

In light of the above, all the recommendations made should be taken in consideration and implemented as soon as possible.

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The positive aspects of the city

Report on improvement that could be made in our city


Report on improvements that could be made in our city Report on improvements that could be made in our city

Report on improvements that could be made in our city Report on improvements that could be made in our city

Introduction


The objective of the following report is to outline the features of the city that our citizens like most and describe some recommendations that could improve dwellers daily life.


The objective of the following report is to outline the features of the city that our citizens like most, and describto provide some recommendations that could improve city dwellers' daily life. The objective of the following report is to outline the features of the city that our citizens like most, and to provide some recommendations that could improve city dwellers' daily life.

You need an apostrophe after 'dwellers' to say that it is their daily life that you're referring to. I would use a comma to separate the 2 parts of your sentence because each is quite long and they are about different things. Adding a comma tells the reader they should be able to understand the first part before they read the second.

The objective of the following report is to outline the features of the city that our citizens like most and describe some recommendations that could improve dwellers daily life. The objective of the following report is to outline the features of the city that our citizens like most and describe some recommendations that could improve daily life.

"Dweller" no es una palabra común.

The positive aspects of the city


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To start off it has to be said that our city is quite small.


To start off, it has to be said that our city is quite small. To start off, it has to be said that our city is quite small.

To start off, it has to be said that our city is quite small. To start, it has to be said that our city is quite small.

Yet, there is not a huge number of features that we could refer to.


Yet, tThere isare not a huge number of features that we could refer tomany positive features to mention (or describe). There are not many positive features to mention (or describe).

'Huge' is very casual. 'Large' would be better in writing. But it is still better not to use so many words when a simpler phrase -- not many -- will be clearer.

Yet, tThere isare not a huge numberlot of features (that) we couldan refer to. There are not a lot of features (that) we can refer to.

¿Qué quieres decir con "refer to"? Quizás "There are not a lot of features to examine/investigate/consider"?

One of the best aspects of the city is the services we have such as the roads, the parks and so on.


One of the best aspects of the city is the servicesinfrastructure we have, such as the roads, the parks and so on. One of the best aspects of the city is the infrastructure we have, such as roads, parks and so on.

Infrastructure is not a very common word but it's exactly what roads and parks are. 'Services' is much more vague, and also it is more often used to mean things like water and sewer and electricity.

One of the best aspects of the city is the services we havinfrastructure such as the roads, the parks and so on. One of the best aspects of the city is the infrastructure such as the roads, parks and so on.

Dwellers of our city usually spend the most part of their free time in the center of the city, when we could find coffee bars, shops, parks for children, etc.


DwellerInhabitants of our city usually spend the most part of their free time in the center of the city, when we could findthere are coffee bars, shops, parks for children, etc. Inhabitants of our city usually spend most of their free time in the center of the city, when there are coffee bars, shops, parks for children, etc.

Dwellers should work -- it is a synonym of inhabitants -- but it's just not normal English.

DwellerThe locals/inhabitants/people/residents of our city usually spend the most parmost of their free time in the center of the city/city center, whenre we couldan find coffee bars, shops, parks for children, etc. The locals/inhabitants/people/residents of our city usually spend most of their free time in the center of the city/city center, where we can find coffee bars, shops, parks for children, etc.

Aspects that our city need


AspecImprovements that our city needs Improvements that our city needs

Aspects is too vague and it isn't necessarily positive.

Aspects that our city needs Aspects that our city needs

The following recommendations should be taken into consideration in order to make citizens life easier.


The following recommendations shwould be taken into consideration in order to makmake the citizens' lifeves easier. The following recommendations would make the citizens' lives easier.

The following recommendations should be taken into consideration in order to make citizens' life easier. The following recommendations should be taken into consideration in order to make citizens' life easier.

On one hand, beyond those positive aspects I have mentioned there is lack of some services.


On one hand, beyAlthough I mentioned those positive aspects I have mentioned there is lack of some servicesservices as a positive feature, other services are lacking. Although I mentioned services as a positive feature, other services are lacking.

On one hand, beyond those positive aspects above/I have mentioned, there is lack of some services. On one hand, beyond those positive aspects above/I have mentioned, there is lack of some services.

For instance, the existence of a shopping center or a cinema it would make the city a better site to stay as well as it would be more visited by tourists.


For instance, the existence of a shopping center or a cinema it would make the city a better sitplace to stay as well as it would be more visited by touristlive and would attract visitors. For instance, a shopping center or a cinema would make the city a better place to live and would attract visitors.

I don't think tourists would be attracted by a shopping centre, but visitors from the area might.

For instance, the existence of a shopping center or a cinema it would make the city a better sitplace to stay as well asnd it would be more visited byattract more tourists. For instance, the existence of a shopping center or a cinema would make the city a better place to stay and it would attract more tourists.

In the other hand, the number of cars in our city is greater and greater and creating more parking facilities would make dwellers life better.


In the other hand, tThe number of cars in ourthe city is greater and greater and creating more parking facilities would make dwellers life betterowing steadily, creating the need for more parking facilities. The number of cars in the city is growing steadily, creating the need for more parking facilities.

'On the other hand' suggests that you are about to contradict what you just said, but you aren't doing that.

IOn the other hand, the number of cars in our city is greater and greater and ccontinues to grow/increase. Creating more parking facilities would make dwellersresidents'/inhabitants' life better. On the other hand, the number of cars in our city continues to grow/increase. Creating more parking facilities would make residents'/inhabitants' life better.

Conclusion


In light of the above, all the recommendations made should be taken in consideration and implemented as soon as possible.


In light of the above, all the recommendations made should be taken in consideration and implemented as soon as possible. In light of the above, all the recommendations made should be taken in consideration and implemented as soon as possible.

This conclusion doesn't really make sense. You have made a few minor suggestions without a lot of argument in favour of them, so this grand statement at the end isn't justified. It might work if you'd spent pages describing research you'd done on the topics.

In light of the above, all the recommendations made should be taken into consideration and implemented as soon as possible. In light of the above, all recommendations made should be taken into consideration and implemented as soon as possible.

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