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Today I read an article about a Chinese singer or musician. Media crowded him, then after dramatic exposure, he had mental issues and went to the hospital.

I like his signature song that is called My Skateboard Shoes. It is an honest and beautiful song. Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to become to the producers. Sadly, I think his musical talent is less sure, so I don't know how far he could go.

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022502- - An impressive person

We generally put spaces between a dash if they are two separate words.

Today I read an article about a Chinese singer orand musician.

MThe media crowhounded him, thenand after dramatic expotoo much pressure, he had mental issues and went to the hospital.

'Hounding' is a great word to use here, meaning that he is constantly being followed and bothered doggedly.

I like his signature song that is called, My Skateboard Shoes.

It is an honest and beautiful song.

Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to become to the producers.

I'm not quite sure what you mean here.

Sadly, I think his musical talent is less surmore questionable, so I don't know how far he could goan get in his musical career.

I hope I interpreted this properly, might have not given that the previous sentence was unclear. Let me know if I misinterpreted.

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Great job, keep it up!

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Feb. 26, 2022

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MThe media crowhounded him, thenand after dramatic expotoo much pressure, he had mental issues and went to the hospital.

so vivid, I like this word!

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tana_gao

Feb. 26, 2022

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Thanks, your detailed feedback helps a lot!

022502-An impressive person

Today I read an article about a Chinese singer or /musician.

I like his signature song that is called My Skateboard Shoes.

It is an honest and beautiful song.

Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to becomecredits should be given to the producerstion team.

Sadly, I think his musical talent is less sureuncertain now, so I don't know how far he could go.

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Feb. 26, 2022

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Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to becomecredits should be given to the producerstion team.

cool, your corrected sentence express what I want!

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tana_gao

Feb. 26, 2022

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Thanks, I love your writing style!

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Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to becomethe credit should go to the producers.

Using "producers" implies a type of music that is heavily edited in the studio. Otherwise, it could be "other musicians."

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tana_gao

Feb. 26, 2022

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Thanks W_K!

022502-An impressive person

Today I read an article about a Chinese singer or musician.

I agree with sikboy. I often use a slash when I’m referring to something I’m not 100% sure about - or a thing that has multiple meanings, and I want to convey that.

Media crowded him, then after dramatic exposurexcessive exposure of his personal life, he had mental issues and went to the hospital.

Alternative suggestion.

I like his signature song that is called, My Skateboard Shoes.

This is another short and clear alternative.

It is an honest and beautiful song.

Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to become toly everything else in his music is created by the producerstion team.

I understood your original sentence but here’s yet another phrasing 👍

Sadly, I think his musical talent is less sureremains to be proven, so I don't know how far he could gohis career will develop.

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I totally understood everything you originally wrote so no worries! 🙃✌️

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Feb. 26, 2022

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Media crowded him, then after dramatic exposurexcessive exposure of his personal life, he had mental issues and went to the hospital.

I like this suggestion!

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tana_gao

Feb. 26, 2022

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Thanks, your feedback and encouragements always made my day =)

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Feb. 26, 2022

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My pleasure! We started using this site on the same day, and I’m sticking to the promise I made!!

I am going to start making my own daily Korean sentences ASAP, and I’ll keep correcting sentences every day too!!! 🙂🎉😉

Media crowdThe media stalked him, thenand after dramatic exposure, he haa while, he developed mental issues and went to the hospital.

I like his signature song, that is calitled "My Skateboard Shoes".

Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to become to the producers.

I don't understand this.

Sadly, I think his musical talent is less sure, so I don't know how far he could gogoing to disappear (after this incident), so I don't know what will happen after this.

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Some parts are a little unclear.

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Feb. 26, 2022

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Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to become to the producers.

most credit goes to the producers.

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tana_gao

Feb. 26, 2022

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Thanks! I would continue to practice writing, adding more details to express my feelings. Your feedback is precious to me. :)

Today I read an article about a Chinese singer or /musician.

if you are unsure if the person is a singer or musician you can write singer/musician.

Media crowded him, then after dramatic exposure, he had mental issues and went to the hospital.

what do you mean by "dramatic exposure"?

I like his signature song that is called My Skateboard Shoes.

Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to become to the producers.

most honors need to become to the producers
what do you mean here?

Sadly, I think his musical talent is less sure, so I don't know how far he could go.

less sure, so I don't know how far he could go.
what do you mean here?

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nice

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tana_gao

Feb. 25, 2022

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Media crowded him, then after dramatic exposure, he had mental issues and went to the hospital.

I want to express that media wrote too many details about his personal life in a dramatic way.

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tana_gao

Feb. 25, 2022

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Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to become to the producers.

I want to say that he is not a talented musician, most of the highlights are produced by other workers in music industry.

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tana_gao

Feb. 25, 2022

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Sadly, I think his musical talent is less sure, so I don't know how far he could go.

I think he is a little lack of musical talent, so maybe his super-star dream would break soon.

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tana_gao

Feb. 25, 2022

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Thanks, you remind me of writing more details about background when describe a thing or a person. 🍻

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Feb. 25, 2022

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I want to express that media wrote too many details about his personal life in a dramatic way.
After too much negative exposure/bad press by the media.

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Feb. 25, 2022

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I want to say that he is not a talented musician, most of the highlights are produced by other workers in music industry.
Most credit goes to the producers.

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Feb. 25, 2022

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I think he is a little lack of musical talent, so maybe his super-star dream would break soon.
I think he is average/satisfactory so I don't know how far he could go.

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Feb. 25, 2022

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Maybe try these dictionaries. You can learn the words in different context with many languages.

https://en.pons.com/translate

https://www.linguee.com/

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Feb. 26, 2022

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wow! Thanks! It is very useful!

022502-An impressive person


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022502- - An impressive person

We generally put spaces between a dash if they are two separate words.

Today I read an article about a Chinese singer or musician.


Today I read an article about a Chinese singer or /musician.

if you are unsure if the person is a singer or musician you can write singer/musician.

Today I read an article about a Chinese singer or musician.

I agree with sikboy. I often use a slash when I’m referring to something I’m not 100% sure about - or a thing that has multiple meanings, and I want to convey that.

Today I read an article about a Chinese singer or /musician.

Today I read an article about a Chinese singer orand musician.

Media crowded him, then after dramatic exposure, he had mental issues and went to the hospital.


Media crowded him, then after dramatic exposure, he had mental issues and went to the hospital.

what do you mean by "dramatic exposure"?

Media crowdThe media stalked him, thenand after dramatic exposure, he haa while, he developed mental issues and went to the hospital.

Media crowded him, then after dramatic exposurexcessive exposure of his personal life, he had mental issues and went to the hospital.

Alternative suggestion.

MThe media crowhounded him, thenand after dramatic expotoo much pressure, he had mental issues and went to the hospital.

'Hounding' is a great word to use here, meaning that he is constantly being followed and bothered doggedly.

I like his signature song that is called My Skateboard Shoes.


I like his signature song that is called My Skateboard Shoes.

I like his signature song, that is calitled "My Skateboard Shoes".

I like his signature song that is called, My Skateboard Shoes.

This is another short and clear alternative.

I like his signature song that is called My Skateboard Shoes.

I like his signature song that is called, My Skateboard Shoes.

It is an honest and beautiful song.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to become to the producers.


Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to become to the producers.

most honors need to become to the producers what do you mean here?

Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to become to the producers.

I don't understand this.

Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to become toly everything else in his music is created by the producerstion team.

I understood your original sentence but here’s yet another phrasing 👍

Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to becomethe credit should go to the producers.

Using "producers" implies a type of music that is heavily edited in the studio. Otherwise, it could be "other musicians."

Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to becomecredits should be given to the producerstion team.

Except for the lyrics written by this singer, most honors need to become to the producers.

I'm not quite sure what you mean here.

Sadly, I think his musical talent is less sure, so I don't know how far he could go.


Sadly, I think his musical talent is less sure, so I don't know how far he could go.

less sure, so I don't know how far he could go. what do you mean here?

Sadly, I think his musical talent is less sure, so I don't know how far he could gogoing to disappear (after this incident), so I don't know what will happen after this.

Sadly, I think his musical talent is less sureremains to be proven, so I don't know how far he could gohis career will develop.

Sadly, I think his musical talent is less sureuncertain now, so I don't know how far he could go.

Sadly, I think his musical talent is less surmore questionable, so I don't know how far he could goan get in his musical career.

I hope I interpreted this properly, might have not given that the previous sentence was unclear. Let me know if I misinterpreted.

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