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Lunar New Year's Day Five
It's the fifth day of Lunar New Year today, the holiday is already halfway over. This holiday is very fulfilling to me.
My family went to my hometown to have the New Year's Eve diner with my parents, my siblings and their kids. After dinner, we went to sing, chatted and laughed. The next day, my brother and I visited our relatives, some of them had changed a lot compared to years ago. Then my wife and I came back home left my daughter at my hometown, because she liked to play with the kids there.
On the third day of the holiday, my wife and I went to Aranya, a beach resort in northern China. We stayed there for two days. It was a little cold there, but it was very crowded. There were many Spring Festive activities, such as lion dances, iron flower performances and blessing garden events, etc. Except these activities, we had lots of delicious food too. It was really wonderful.
Now I'm at home and planning to go to my hometown and pick up my daughter.
Lunar New Year's: Day Five
Looks cleaner!
It's the fifth day of Lunar New Year today, so the holiday is already halfway over.
I would make this a subordinate clause here because it makes the sentence flow better- not wrong though!
This holidayLunar New Year is very fulfilling to me.
Stating "This holiday" is a unclear and because the sentence is by itself, it makes more sense to add a subject.
My family went to my hometown to have thea New Year's Eve dinner with my parents, my siblings, and their kids.
Dinner is spelling incorrectly, and always put a comma before "and" if it's in a list and separating subjects!
After dinner, we went to sisung, chatted and laughed.
Make them all the same tense/ format.
The next day, my brother and I visited our relatives, some of them had changed a lot compared to years ago.
ThenAfterwards, my wife and I came back home and left my daughter at my hometown, because she likeds to play with the kids there.
There were many Spring Festive activities, such as lion dances, iron flower performances, and blessing garden events, etc.
Except these activities, wWe had lots of delicious food too.
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I'm glad day 5 of Lunar New Year was fun; the activities you shared sounded amazing. Spending time with family is important! Additionally, good job on this paragraph!
Lunar New Year's: Day Five
I feel like putting the colon : makes the title look neater.
It's the fifth day of Lunar New Year today,; the holiday is already halfway over.
A semicolon ; is better for this. It's in between a comma and full stop.
TI find this holiday is very fulfilling to me.
My family went to my hometown to have the New Year's Eve dinner with my parents, my siblings and their kids.
After dinner, we went to sing, chattedstarted ¶
to sing. We also chatted amongst ourselves and laughed.
The next day, my brother and I visited our relatives, ; some of them had changed a lot compared to years ago.
A semi colon is better than a comma after the word "relatives"
ThenLater, my wife and I came back home and left my daughter at my hometown, because she liked to playing with the kids there.
It was a little cold there, but it was and very crowded.
There were many Spring Festiveal activities, such as lion dances, iron flower performances and blessing garden events, etc.
ExceptAs well as these activities, we had lots of delicious food too.
Now I'm at home and, planning to go to my hometown and pick up my daughter.
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Your post was well written!
The Fifth Lunar New Year's Day Five
It's the fifth day of Lunar New Year today, the holiday is already halfway over.
This holiday is very fulfilling tofor me.
My family went to my hometown to have the New Year's Eve dinner with my parents, my siblings and their kids.
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The next day, my brother and I visited our relatives,. sSome of them hadve changed a lot compared toover the years ago.
This isn't grammatically incorrect, it just sounds a little unnatural in English. You could also say, "Some of them have changed a lot since our childhood."
Then my wife and I came back home, leftaving my daughter atin my hometown, because she liked tos playing with the kids there.
On the third day of the holiday, my wife and I went to Aranya, a beach resort in northern China.
We stayed there for two days.
It was a little cold there, but it was very crowded.
There were many Sspring Ffestive activities, such as lion dances, iron flower performances and blessing garden events, etc.
ExceptAs well as these activities, we had lots of delicious food too.
It was really wonderful.
Now I'm at home and planning to go to my hometown andto pick up my daughter.
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This holiday is very fulfilling to me. This holiday is very fulfilling
Stating "This holiday" is a unclear and because the sentence is by itself, it makes more sense to add a subject. |
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After dinner, we went to sing, chatted and laughed. After dinner, we After dinner, we After dinner Make them all the same tense/ format. |
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The next day, my brother and I visited our relatives, some of them had changed a lot compared to years ago. The next day, my brother and I visited our relatives This isn't grammatically incorrect, it just sounds a little unnatural in English. You could also say, "Some of them have changed a lot since our childhood." The next day, my brother and I visited our relatives A semi colon is better than a comma after the word "relatives" The next day, my brother and I visited our relatives, |
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Then my wife and I came back home left my daughter at my hometown, because she liked to play with the kids there. Then my wife and I came back home, le
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On the third day of the holiday, my wife and I went to Aranya, a beach resort in northern China. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We stayed there for two days. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was a little cold there, but it was very crowded. This sentence has been marked as perfect! It was a little cold there |
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There were many Spring Festive activities, such as lion dances, iron flower performances and blessing garden events, etc. There were many There were many Spring Festiv There were many Spring Festive activities, such as lion dances, iron flower performances, and blessing garden events |
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Except these activities, we had lots of delicious food too.
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Now I'm at home and planning to go to my hometown and pick up my daughter. Now I'm at home and planning to go to my hometown Now I'm at home |
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