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May 19, 2020

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๐ŸŒป ์–ด๋‘‘์–ด๋‘‘ํ•œ ๋‚ ์”จ์˜ˆ์š” ~

์˜ค๋Š˜ ๋‚ ์”จ๊ฐ€ ๋ง‘์ง€ ์•Š์•„์š” ! ๐Ÿ˜ฒ ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๋‚˜์ค‘์— ๋น„๊ฐ€ ์˜ฌ ๊ฑฐ์˜ˆ์š” ~ ! โ˜บ๏ธ ๋ณดํ†ต ์ด ์ข…๋ฅ˜์˜ ๋‚ ์”จ๋ฅผ ์ œ๊ฐ€ ์—„์ฒญ ํ–‰๋ณตํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋งŒ๋“ค์–ด์š” .. ๐Ÿฅบ ๊ทธ๋ ‡์ง€๋งŒ ์ „ ์ •๋ง ํ”ผ๊ณคํ•ด์š” ! ์š”์ฆ˜์€ ๋งŽ์€ ์ผ์„ ํ–ˆ์„ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ด์—์š” ~ ? ๐Ÿฅบ ํšŒ์‚ฌ์—์„œ ์ผํ•˜๊ธฐ๋ฅผ ์–ด๋ ตํ•˜๊ณ  ์žฌ๋ฏธ์—†์–ด์š” ~~ ! ๐Ÿ˜ ํ‡ด๊ทผ ํ›„์— ์ž ์„ ์ž๊ณ  ์ œ ์ œ์ผ ์ข‹์•„ํ•˜๋Š” ์‡ผ๋ฅผ ๋ณผ ๊ฑฐ์˜ˆ์š” ~ ! ๐Ÿ˜Š ํ‚น๋ค์˜ ์‹œ์ „ 3๋ฅผ ๊ธฐ๋‹ค๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์žˆ์–ด์š” !!! ๐Ÿ˜† ๋นจ๋ฆฌ๋นจ๋ฆฌ ๊ณณ ์™€์š” !! ๐Ÿ˜


Todayโ€™s weather is not sunny ! ๐Ÿ˜ฒ Also, later, it will rain ~ ! โ˜บ๏ธ Usually, this type of weather makes me extremely happy .. ๐Ÿฅบ However, I am so tired ! Is it because I do so much work ~ ? ๐Ÿฅบ Working at a company is difficult and not fun ~~ ! ๐Ÿ˜ After work, I will sleep and watch my favorite show ~ ! ๐Ÿ˜Š I am waiting for season 3 of Kingdom !!! ๐Ÿ˜† Hurry, hurry and come soon !! ๐Ÿ˜

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๐ŸŒป ์–ด๋‘‘์–ด๋‘‘ํ•œ ๋‚ ์”จ์˜ˆ์š” ~

์˜ค๋Š˜์€ ๋‚ ์”จ๊ฐ€ ๋ง‘์ง€ ์•Š์•„์š” !

์กฐ์‚ฌ, ๊ฐ€ ์—†์œผ๋ฉด ๋ฐ”๋กœ ์•Œ์•„๋ด…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

๐Ÿ˜ฒ ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๋‚˜์ค‘์— ๋น„๊ฐ€ ์˜ฌ ๊ฑฐ์˜ˆ์š” ~ !

โ˜บ๏ธ ๋ณดํ†ต ์ด๋Ÿฐ ์ข…๋ฅ˜์˜ ๋‚ ์”จ๋ฅผ ์ œ๊ฐ€๋Š” ์ €๋ฅผ ์—„์ฒญ ํ–‰๋ณตํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋งŒ๋“ค์–ด์š” .. ๐Ÿฅบ ๊ทธ๋ ‡์ง€๋งŒ ์ „ ์ง€๊ธˆ ์ •๋ง ํ”ผ๊ณคํ•ด์š” !

์˜์–ด ๋ฌธ๋งฅ ์ƒ์œผ๋กœ๋Š” ๋‘ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์ด ์—ฐ๊ฒฐ๋˜์ง€ ์•Š์€ ๊ฒƒ ๊ฐ™์€๋ฐ, ํ•œ๊ตญ์–ด๋กœ๋Š” ๊ทธ๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ๋ณด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋งˆ์น˜ ์ด๋Ÿฐ ๋‚ ์”จ์™€ ์—„์ฒญ ํ”ผ๊ณคํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ด ์›์ธ-๊ฒฐ๊ณผ๋กœ ์—ฐ๊ฒฐ๋œ ๊ฒƒ๋งŒ ๊ฐ™์•„์š”. ๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ "์ง€๊ธˆโ€œ์ด๋ผ๋Š” ์กฐ์‚ฌ๋ฅผ ๋„ฃ์–ด์„œ, ํ”ผ๊ณคํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ด ์ง€๊ธˆ์˜ ํŠน์ •ํ•œ ์‹œ๊ฐ„๊ณผ ๊ด€๋ จ์ด ์žˆ์ง€ ์ด๋Ÿฐ ๋‚ ์”จ๋ฅผ ์ข‹์•„ํ•˜๋Š” ํ‰์†Œ์˜ ๊ฒฝํ–ฅ๊ณผ๋Š” ๋ฌด๊ด€ํ•˜๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋ถ„๋ช…ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋งŒ๋“ค์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

์š”์ฆ˜์€ ๋งŽ์€ ์ผ์„ ํ–ˆ์„๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ด์—์ธ๊ฐ€์š” ~ ?

๐Ÿฅบ ํšŒ์‚ฌ์—์„œ ์ผํ•˜๊ธฐ๋ฅผ๋Š” ์–ด๋ ตํ•˜๊ณ  ์žฌ๋ฏธ์—†์–ด์š” ~~ !

๐Ÿ˜ ํ‡ด๊ทผ ํ›„์— ์ž ์„ ์ž๊ณ  ์ œ(์ผ์–ด๋‚˜์„œ) ์ œ๊ฐ€ ์ œ์ผ ์ข‹์•„ํ•˜๋Š” ์‡ผ๋ฅผ ๋ณผ ๊ฑฐ์˜ˆ์š” ~ !

๋ฌธ๋งฅ์ƒ์œผ๋กœ ์ถ”์ •ํ•ด์„œ ๊ด„ํ˜ธ๋ฅผ ๋„ฃ์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

๐Ÿ˜Š ํ‚น๋ค์˜ ์‹œ์ „์ฆŒ 3๋ฅผ ๊ธฐ๋‹ค๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์žˆ์–ด์š” !!!

์‹œ์ฆŒ์€ ํ•œ๊ตญ์–ด๋กœ ๊ตณ์–ด์ง„ ๋‹จ์–ด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฐœ์Œ๋Œ€๋กœ ์“ฐ์‹œ๋ฉด ์ด์ƒํ•ด์š”.

๐Ÿ˜† ๋นจ๋ฆฌ๋นจ๋ฆฌ ๊ณณ ์™€์š” !!

์œ„์™€ ๊ฐ™์ด ์“ธ ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ๋ฌด์ƒ๋ฌผ์„ ์˜์ง€๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์˜ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์œผ๋กœ ํ‘œํ˜„ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฑด ์–ด์ƒ‰ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. โ€œ๋นจ๋ฆฌ๋นจ๋ฆฌ (๊ณง) ์‹œ์ž‘ํ–ˆ์œผ๋ฉด ์ข‹๊ฒ ์–ด์š”!!โ€ ์ •๋„๊ฐ€ ๋ฌด๋‚œํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. โ€๊ณณโ€์€ โ€๊ณงโ€์ธ๊ฐ€์š”? ๋นจ๋ฆฌ๋นจ๋ฆฌ์™€ ๊ณง์„ ๊ฐ™์ด ์“ฐ๋Š” ํ‘œํ˜„์€, ๋นจ๋ฆฌ๋นจ๋ฆฌ๋งŒ ์“ฐ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ๋ณด๋‹ค๋Š” ๋“œ๋ฌธ ๊ฒƒ ๊ฐ™๋„ค์š”.

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๊ถ๊ธˆํ•˜์‹  ๋ถ€๋ถ„ ์žˆ์œผ์‹œ๋ฉด ๋ง์”€ํ•ด ์ฃผ์„ธ์š”.

๐ŸŒป ์–ด๋‘‘์–ด๋‘‘ํ•œ ๋‚ ์”จ์˜ˆ์š” ~


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์˜ค๋Š˜ ๋‚ ์”จ๊ฐ€ ๋ง‘์ง€ ์•Š์•„์š” !


์˜ค๋Š˜์€ ๋‚ ์”จ๊ฐ€ ๋ง‘์ง€ ์•Š์•„์š” !

์กฐ์‚ฌ, ๊ฐ€ ์—†์œผ๋ฉด ๋ฐ”๋กœ ์•Œ์•„๋ด…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

๐Ÿ˜ฒ ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๋‚˜์ค‘์— ๋น„๊ฐ€ ์˜ฌ ๊ฑฐ์˜ˆ์š” ~ !


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โ˜บ๏ธ ๋ณดํ†ต ์ด ์ข…๋ฅ˜์˜ ๋‚ ์”จ๋ฅผ ์ œ๊ฐ€ ์—„์ฒญ ํ–‰๋ณตํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋งŒ๋“ค์–ด์š” .. ๐Ÿฅบ ๊ทธ๋ ‡์ง€๋งŒ ์ „ ์ •๋ง ํ”ผ๊ณคํ•ด์š” !


โ˜บ๏ธ ๋ณดํ†ต ์ด๋Ÿฐ ์ข…๋ฅ˜์˜ ๋‚ ์”จ๋ฅผ ์ œ๊ฐ€๋Š” ์ €๋ฅผ ์—„์ฒญ ํ–‰๋ณตํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋งŒ๋“ค์–ด์š” .. ๐Ÿฅบ ๊ทธ๋ ‡์ง€๋งŒ ์ „ ์ง€๊ธˆ ์ •๋ง ํ”ผ๊ณคํ•ด์š” !

์˜์–ด ๋ฌธ๋งฅ ์ƒ์œผ๋กœ๋Š” ๋‘ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์ด ์—ฐ๊ฒฐ๋˜์ง€ ์•Š์€ ๊ฒƒ ๊ฐ™์€๋ฐ, ํ•œ๊ตญ์–ด๋กœ๋Š” ๊ทธ๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ๋ณด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋งˆ์น˜ ์ด๋Ÿฐ ๋‚ ์”จ์™€ ์—„์ฒญ ํ”ผ๊ณคํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ด ์›์ธ-๊ฒฐ๊ณผ๋กœ ์—ฐ๊ฒฐ๋œ ๊ฒƒ๋งŒ ๊ฐ™์•„์š”. ๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ "์ง€๊ธˆโ€œ์ด๋ผ๋Š” ์กฐ์‚ฌ๋ฅผ ๋„ฃ์–ด์„œ, ํ”ผ๊ณคํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ด ์ง€๊ธˆ์˜ ํŠน์ •ํ•œ ์‹œ๊ฐ„๊ณผ ๊ด€๋ จ์ด ์žˆ์ง€ ์ด๋Ÿฐ ๋‚ ์”จ๋ฅผ ์ข‹์•„ํ•˜๋Š” ํ‰์†Œ์˜ ๊ฒฝํ–ฅ๊ณผ๋Š” ๋ฌด๊ด€ํ•˜๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋ถ„๋ช…ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋งŒ๋“ค์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

์š”์ฆ˜์€ ๋งŽ์€ ์ผ์„ ํ–ˆ์„ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ด์—์š” ~ ?


์š”์ฆ˜์€ ๋งŽ์€ ์ผ์„ ํ–ˆ์„๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ด์—์ธ๊ฐ€์š” ~ ?

๐Ÿฅบ ํšŒ์‚ฌ์—์„œ ์ผํ•˜๊ธฐ๋ฅผ ์–ด๋ ตํ•˜๊ณ  ์žฌ๋ฏธ์—†์–ด์š” ~~ !


๐Ÿฅบ ํšŒ์‚ฌ์—์„œ ์ผํ•˜๊ธฐ๋ฅผ๋Š” ์–ด๋ ตํ•˜๊ณ  ์žฌ๋ฏธ์—†์–ด์š” ~~ !

๐Ÿ˜ ํ‡ด๊ทผ ํ›„์— ์ž ์„ ์ž๊ณ  ์ œ ์ œ์ผ ์ข‹์•„ํ•˜๋Š” ์‡ผ๋ฅผ ๋ณผ ๊ฑฐ์˜ˆ์š” ~ !


๐Ÿ˜ ํ‡ด๊ทผ ํ›„์— ์ž ์„ ์ž๊ณ  ์ œ(์ผ์–ด๋‚˜์„œ) ์ œ๊ฐ€ ์ œ์ผ ์ข‹์•„ํ•˜๋Š” ์‡ผ๋ฅผ ๋ณผ ๊ฑฐ์˜ˆ์š” ~ !

๋ฌธ๋งฅ์ƒ์œผ๋กœ ์ถ”์ •ํ•ด์„œ ๊ด„ํ˜ธ๋ฅผ ๋„ฃ์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

๐Ÿ˜Š ํ‚น๋ค์˜ ์‹œ์ „ 3๋ฅผ ๊ธฐ๋‹ค๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์žˆ์–ด์š” !!!


๐Ÿ˜Š ํ‚น๋ค์˜ ์‹œ์ „์ฆŒ 3๋ฅผ ๊ธฐ๋‹ค๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์žˆ์–ด์š” !!!

์‹œ์ฆŒ์€ ํ•œ๊ตญ์–ด๋กœ ๊ตณ์–ด์ง„ ๋‹จ์–ด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฐœ์Œ๋Œ€๋กœ ์“ฐ์‹œ๋ฉด ์ด์ƒํ•ด์š”.

๐Ÿ˜† ๋นจ๋ฆฌ๋นจ๋ฆฌ ๊ณณ ์™€์š” !!


๐Ÿ˜† ๋นจ๋ฆฌ๋นจ๋ฆฌ ๊ณณ ์™€์š” !!

์œ„์™€ ๊ฐ™์ด ์“ธ ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ๋ฌด์ƒ๋ฌผ์„ ์˜์ง€๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์˜ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์œผ๋กœ ํ‘œํ˜„ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฑด ์–ด์ƒ‰ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. โ€œ๋นจ๋ฆฌ๋นจ๋ฆฌ (๊ณง) ์‹œ์ž‘ํ–ˆ์œผ๋ฉด ์ข‹๊ฒ ์–ด์š”!!โ€ ์ •๋„๊ฐ€ ๋ฌด๋‚œํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. โ€๊ณณโ€์€ โ€๊ณงโ€์ธ๊ฐ€์š”? ๋นจ๋ฆฌ๋นจ๋ฆฌ์™€ ๊ณง์„ ๊ฐ™์ด ์“ฐ๋Š” ํ‘œํ˜„์€, ๋นจ๋ฆฌ๋นจ๋ฆฌ๋งŒ ์“ฐ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ๋ณด๋‹ค๋Š” ๋“œ๋ฌธ ๊ฒƒ ๊ฐ™๋„ค์š”.

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