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Oct. 31, 2022

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温客行想让周子舒做什么,而周子舒想要怎样地活着?

温客行想让周子舒让白衣前辈给他治病。如果周子舒让白衣前辈给他治病,他还能再活十年。不过,治病以后,他的武功也会消失。

温客行认为如果周子舒先愿意被治病,而且活下来,世界够大找到回复他武功的办法。不过,周子舒感觉如果他失去他的武功的话,他无法继续做自己,于是活着的原因都没有。

周子舒想要过一种能做自己的生活。他从来都不能为所欲为,总是被别人控制,所以现在他想尝尝自由的滋味。他想环游天下,喝很多酒,享受跟知己还有的时光。

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温客行想让周子舒做什么,而周子舒想要怎样地怎么样活着?

改成这样更最然:
温客行想让周子舒做什么,而周子舒想活成怎样?

温客行想通过周子舒让白衣前辈给他治病。

如果周子舒让白衣前辈给他治病,白衣前辈同意,那他还能再活十年。

不过,治病以后,他的武功也会消失。

更好的说法:
但是代价是让他武功尽失

温客行认为如果周子舒先愿意被治病,而且活下来,世界够大找到回复他武功的办法想着如果能治愈并活下来,他能去世界其他地方,慢慢找办法恢复武功

不过,周子舒感觉如果温客行失去他的武功的话,他无法继续做自己,于是活着的原因都没有。

周子舒想要温客行过上一种能做自己的生活。

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ariyana

Oct. 31, 2022

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温客行想通过周子舒让白衣前辈给他治病。

I meant to say that Wen Kexing wants Zhou Zishu to let Ye Baiyi treat him (Zhou Zishu).

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ariyana

Oct. 31, 2022

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周子舒想要温客行过上一种能做自己的生活。

Zhou Zishu wants to live a free life (while he still can). He doesn't want Wen Kexing to live a free life. Sorry if that wasn't clear from my writing.

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ariyana

Oct. 31, 2022

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如果周子舒让白衣前辈给他治病,白衣前辈同意,那他还能再活十年。

Ye Baiyi already agreed to treat Zhou Zishu, but Zhou Zishu doesn't want to get treatment (because he would lose his martial arts abilities). I wanted to say: If Zhou Zishu lets Ye Baiyi treat him, then he can live for another 10 years. What was I wrote originally wrong?

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kent

Nov. 5, 2022

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Ye Baiyi already agreed to treat Zhou Zishu, but Zhou Zishu doesn't want to get treatment (because he would lose his martial arts abilities). I wanted to say: If Zhou Zishu lets Ye Baiyi treat him, then he can live for another 10 years. What was I wrote originally wrong?

叶白衣同意为周子舒治疗,但周子舒因为不想失去武功而放弃了。如果周子舒好好接受治疗,那么他至少还能再活10年

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kent

Nov. 5, 2022

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I meant to say that Wen Kexing wants Zhou Zishu to let Ye Baiyi treat him (Zhou Zishu).

温客行希望周子舒接受治疗

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kent

Nov. 5, 2022

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Zhou Zishu wants to live a free life (while he still can). He doesn't want Wen Kexing to live a free life. Sorry if that wasn't clear from my writing.

sorry, i still cannot understand the logic of this paragraph.
Why didn't zhouzishu want WenKexing to lead a free life but wants to be happy himself?What a terrible person. Are they bloody enemies of each other?

温客行想让周子舒做什么,而周子舒想要怎样地活着?


温客行想让周子舒做什么,而周子舒想要怎样地怎么样活着?

改成这样更最然: 温客行想让周子舒做什么,而周子舒想活成怎样?

温客行想让周子舒让白衣前辈给他治病。


温客行想通过周子舒让白衣前辈给他治病。

如果周子舒让白衣前辈给他治病,他还能再活十年。


如果周子舒让白衣前辈给他治病,白衣前辈同意,那他还能再活十年。

不过,治病以后,他的武功也会消失。


不过,治病以后,他的武功也会消失。

更好的说法: 但是代价是让他武功尽失

温客行认为如果周子舒先愿意被治病,而且活下来,世界够大找到回复他武功的办法。


温客行认为如果周子舒先愿意被治病,而且活下来,世界够大找到回复他武功的办法想着如果能治愈并活下来,他能去世界其他地方,慢慢找办法恢复武功

不过,周子舒感觉如果他失去他的武功的话,他无法继续做自己,于是活着的原因都没有。


不过,周子舒感觉如果温客行失去他的武功的话,他无法继续做自己,于是活着的原因都没有。

周子舒想要过一种能做自己的生活。


周子舒想要温客行过上一种能做自己的生活。

他从来都不能为所欲为,总是被别人控制,所以现在他想尝尝自由的滋味。


他想环游天下,喝很多酒,享受跟知己还有的时光。


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