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tongxing

Nov. 27, 2022

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November 27,2022
After class, I'm on WeiBo. I saw a pieces of news. It is about a pop star called Kris Wu. A Chinese court sentenced him to 30 years in jail. I used to like him very much. Because I think he was handsome. But ever since I knew he committing an offense including rape. I hate him very much. The law is fair. It doesn't not fault a good man nor spare a bad man.

中文翻译:下课后,我在刷微博,我看见一条新闻,它是关于一个叫吴亦凡的流行歌手,中国法院判决他13年,我以前很喜欢他,因为我觉得他很帅,但是自从我知道他犯了罪比喻强奸,我非常讨厌他,法律是公平的,它不会冤枉一个好人,也不会放过一个坏人。

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法律The Law

November 27, 2022

After class, I'm on WeiBo.

I saw a pieces of news.

or

I saw a news item.

It iwas about a pop star callnamed Kris Wu.

A Chinese court sentenced him to 30 years in jail.

I used to like him very much because I thought he was handsome.

Because I think he was handsome.

This was an incomplete sentence and, stylistically, it didn't make sense so I deleted it and appended it to the previous sentence.

But eEver since I knew he committing an offense including rapefound out that he committed crimes including rape, however, I have come to hate him a lot.

This was also an incomplete sentence so I appended the following sentence to make it complete.

I hate him very much.

The law is fair.

It doesn't not faultwrong a good man nor spare a bad manone.

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Very nice work.

November 27, 2022

In English, you must insert a blank space after each comma and period.

After class, I'm was on WeiBo.

I saw a pieces of news.

It iwas about a pop star called Kris Wu.

A Chinese court sentenced him to 130 years in jail.

I used to like him very much. because I thought he was handsome.

But ever since I knew he had committinged an offense including rape., I have hated him very much.

The law is fair.

It doesn't not fault a good man nor spare a bad man.

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tongxing

Nov. 28, 2022

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Thank you!

法律

November 27,2022

After class, I'm was on WeiBo.

Tense agreement

I saw a pieces of news.

It iwas about a pop star called Kris Wu.

tense agreement

A Chinese court sentenced him to 30 years in jail.

I used to like him very much.

Because I think he was handsome.

Because I think he is handsome OR Because I thought he was handsome

Tense agreement

But ever since I knew he committing aned offenses including rape.

If you use the word 'including...' it suggested he committed more than one offense

I hate him very much.

The law is fair.

It doesn't not faultpunish a good man nor spare a bad man.

I'm not sure fault is the best word here: https://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/english/fault

中文翻译:下课后,我在刷微博,我看见一条新闻,它是关于一个叫吴亦凡的流行歌手,中国法院判决他13年,我以前很喜欢他,因为我觉得他很帅,但是自从我知道他犯了罪比喻强奸,我非常讨厌他,法律是公平的,它不会冤枉一个好人,也不会放过一个坏人。

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Good work! Just check that your tenses are agreeing all the way through.

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sarahlouise

Nov. 27, 2022

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I saw a pieces of news.

A news item/ an article/ a piece of news

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tongxing

Nov. 28, 2022

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Thank you!

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法律The Law

November 27,2022


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November 27, 2022

In English, you must insert a blank space after each comma and period.

November 27, 2022

After class, I'm on WeiBo.


After class, I'm was on WeiBo.

Tense agreement

After class, I'm was on WeiBo.

After class, I'm on WeiBo.

I saw a pieces of news.


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I saw a pieces of news.

I saw a pieces of news.

or I saw a news item.

It is about a pop star called Kris Wu.


It iwas about a pop star called Kris Wu.

tense agreement

It iwas about a pop star called Kris Wu.

It iwas about a pop star callnamed Kris Wu.

A Chinese court sentenced him to 30 years in jail.


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A Chinese court sentenced him to 130 years in jail.

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I used to like him very much.


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I used to like him very much. because I thought he was handsome.

I used to like him very much because I thought he was handsome.

Because I think he was handsome.


Because I think he was handsome.

Because I think he is handsome OR Because I thought he was handsome Tense agreement

Because I think he was handsome.

This was an incomplete sentence and, stylistically, it didn't make sense so I deleted it and appended it to the previous sentence.

But ever since I knew he committing an offense including rape.


But ever since I knew he committing aned offenses including rape.

If you use the word 'including...' it suggested he committed more than one offense

But ever since I knew he had committinged an offense including rape., I have hated him very much.

But eEver since I knew he committing an offense including rapefound out that he committed crimes including rape, however, I have come to hate him a lot.

This was also an incomplete sentence so I appended the following sentence to make it complete.

I hate him very much.


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I hate him very much.

The law is fair.


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It doesn't not fault a good man nor spare a bad man.


It doesn't not faultpunish a good man nor spare a bad man.

I'm not sure fault is the best word here: https://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/english/fault

It doesn't not fault a good man nor spare a bad man.

It doesn't not faultwrong a good man nor spare a bad manone.

中文翻译:下课后,我在刷微博,我看见一条新闻,它是关于一个叫吴亦凡的流行歌手,中国法院判决他13年,我以前很喜欢他,因为我觉得他很帅,但是自从我知道他犯了罪比喻强奸,我非常讨厌他,法律是公平的,它不会冤枉一个好人,也不会放过一个坏人。


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