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Aug. 11, 2022

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最好的礼物

这是我老母亲送给我的礼物,一颗纤细的树苗,我将它种在我家后院贫瘠的土地上。就这样,我一天天看着它长大。经过三年,它终于长成了一颗大树。在这期间,我感触颇深,我在它的身上看到了坚韧的品质,挺过了炎热的夏天,熬过了寒冷的冬天。啊!多么伟大的生命啊,你让我看到了大自然所创造的奇迹,看到了你那顽强的生命力。时隔多年,我早已去往中国谋生,随离你甚远,但我依然可以感受到你那顽强的生命,我将会学习你那高尚的品质并受益一生!


This is a gift from my old mother. It is a slender sapling. I planted it on the barren land in my backyard. In this way, I watched it grow up day by day. After three years, it finally grew into a big tree. During this period, I had a deep feeling. I saw the tough quality in it. It survived the hot summer and the cold winter. Ah! What a great life! You let me see the miracle created by nature and your tenacious vitality. After many years, I have already gone to China to make a living. I am far away from you, but I can still feel your tenacious life. I will learn your noble quality and benefit from it all my life!

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最好的礼物

这是我老母亲送给我的礼物,一颗纤细的树苗,我将它种在我家后院贫瘠的土地上。

就这样,我一天天看着它长大。

三年,它终于长成了一颗大树。

在这期间,我感触颇深,我在它的身上看到了坚韧的品质——它挺过了炎热的夏天,熬过了寒冷的冬天。

啊!

多么伟大的生命啊,你让我看到了大自然所创造的奇迹,看到了你那顽强的生命力。

时隔多年,我早已去往中国谋生,离你甚远,但我依然可以感受到你那顽强的生命,我将会学习你那高尚的品质并受益一生!

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这是我老母亲送给我的礼物,一颗纤细的树苗,我将它种在我家后院贫瘠的土地上。

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最好的礼物


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这是我老母亲送给我的礼物,一颗纤细的树苗,我将它种在我家后院贫瘠的土地上。


这是我老母亲送给我的礼物,一颗纤细的树苗,我将它种在我家后院贫瘠的土地上。

就这样,我一天天看着它长大。


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经过三年,它终于长成了一颗大树。


三年,它终于长成了一颗大树。

在这期间,我感触颇深,我在它的身上看到了坚韧的品质,挺过了炎热的夏天,熬过了寒冷的冬天。


在这期间,我感触颇深,我在它的身上看到了坚韧的品质——它挺过了炎热的夏天,熬过了寒冷的冬天。

啊!


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多么伟大的生命啊,你让我看到了大自然所创造的奇迹,看到了你那顽强的生命力。


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时隔多年,我早已去往中国谋生,随离你甚远,但我依然可以感受到你那顽强的生命,我将会学习你那高尚的品质并受益一生!


时隔多年,我早已去往中国谋生,离你甚远,但我依然可以感受到你那顽强的生命,我将会学习你那高尚的品质并受益一生!

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