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我的OC的背景故事

我的武俠同人文的敘述者,“無名詩人”,是從一位當官的家庭。她算是貴族,但是她從她家逃跑了。只是因為她父親安排她和某個公子包辦結婚。這位小詩人非常在乎她的自由,不願意跟她的未婚夫結婚。

其實,她的未婚夫也有別的心上人。這位未婚夫也不是真真的公子,他的真面目是童話裡的牛郎來到人間去尋找織女。結婚日之前,他找到了他的情侶。牛郎和織女答應幫助“無名詩人”逃走。織女換扮成“無名詩人”的樣子,換到新娘的位置。

“無名詩人”一離開家就拋棄的姓名,說她的表演和寫作會代表她未來遺存的故事。


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我的武俠同人文的敘述者,“無名詩人”,是從一位當官的家庭。她算是貴族,但是她從她家逃跑了。只是因為她父親安排她和某個公子包辦結婚。這位小詩人非常在乎她的自由,不願意跟她的未婚夫結婚。
My Wuxia OC fanfiction's narrator, "nameless poet", was from a family of court officials. She was a noble, but she ran away from home. This was because her parents arranged for her to marry some nobleman. This nameless poet valued her autonomy very much, and didn't want to marry her
fiancé.

其實,她的未婚夫也有別的心上人。這位未婚夫也不是真真的公子,他的真面目是童話裡的牛郎來到人間去尋找織女。結婚日之前,他找到了他的情侶。牛郎和織女答應幫助“無名詩人”逃走。織女換扮成“無名詩人”的樣子,換到新娘的位置。

In reality, her fiancé loved another. This fiancé wasn't really a nobleman, he was the cowherd from a folktale come to the human realm to find the weaver maid. Before the wedding date, he found his sweetheart. The cowherd and the weaver maid agreed to help the nameless poet escape. The weaver maid took on the guise of the nameless poet, and took the place of the bride.

“無名詩人”一離開家就拋棄的姓名,說她的表演和寫作會代表她未來的遺存。

When the nameless left home, she abandoned her family name. She said that her theatrical performances and her written works would represent her legacy in the future.

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我的OC的背景故事

我的武俠同人文的敘述者,“無名詩人”,是從一位當官的家庭「無名詩人」出生自官人世家

算是雖然是個貴族,但是她從她家逃跑離家出走了。

idiom expression

只是因為她父親安排她和某個公子包辦結婚原來她的雙親(預先 / 已經)幫她安排了婚事

但是這位小詩人非常在乎她的自由,不願意跟她的未婚夫結婚(,所以萌生起去意)

the bracket sentence is optional - it means "that's why the idea of leaving her place sparked in her mind". This is to further explain why she, as a princess from a noble family would choose to leave her comfort zone mentioned shortly beforehand.



其實,她的未婚夫也有別的心上人。

而且,這位未婚夫也不是真真門當户對的公子,他的真面目是童話裡的牛郎,他來到人間是為了尋找織女。

idiom expression, meaning that he isn't the right fit to match the status of another.

結婚日之前,他前夕,牛郎找到了他的侶。

牛郎和織女答應幫助無名詩人逃走。

織女扮成無名詩人的樣子,換到站在新娘的位置。



無名詩人一離開家就拋棄的姓名,說她的表演和寫作會代表她未來遺存的故事改名換姓,她深信她的來歷並不重要,她的作品才將會成為她的雋永

I get that you want to emphasis that she doesnt want to bear the family name and what makes her "her" is her work, which is why I add a small sentence to further elaborate the idea.

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I like this story and would love to correct more of your work in the future, looking forward to seeing more, keep up!

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omikami

July 17, 2023

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Thank you very much! I have a bit more of this verse I'm writing that I'm going to share haha :)

我的OC的背景故事


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我的武俠同人文的敘述者,“無名詩人”,是從一位當官的家庭。


我的武俠同人文的敘述者,“無名詩人”,是從一位當官的家庭「無名詩人」出生自官人世家

她算是貴族,但是她從她家逃跑了。


算是雖然是個貴族,但是她從她家逃跑離家出走了。

idiom expression

只是因為她父親安排她和某個公子包辦結婚。


只是因為她父親安排她和某個公子包辦結婚原來她的雙親(預先 / 已經)幫她安排了婚事

這位小詩人非常在乎她的自由,不願意跟她的未婚夫結婚。


但是這位小詩人非常在乎她的自由,不願意跟她的未婚夫結婚(,所以萌生起去意)

the bracket sentence is optional - it means "that's why the idea of leaving her place sparked in her mind". This is to further explain why she, as a princess from a noble family would choose to leave her comfort zone mentioned shortly beforehand.

其實,她的未婚夫也有別的心上人。




其實,她的未婚夫也有別的心上人。

這位未婚夫也不是真真的公子,他的真面目是童話裡的牛郎來到人間去尋找織女。


而且,這位未婚夫也不是真真門當户對的公子,他的真面目是童話裡的牛郎,他來到人間是為了尋找織女。

idiom expression, meaning that he isn't the right fit to match the status of another.

結婚日之前,他找到了他的情侶。


結婚日之前,他前夕,牛郎找到了他的侶。

牛郎和織女答應幫助“無名詩人”逃走。


牛郎和織女答應幫助無名詩人逃走。

織女換扮成“無名詩人”的樣子,換到新娘的位置。


織女扮成無名詩人的樣子,換到站在新娘的位置。

“無名詩人”一離開家就拋棄的姓名,說她的表演和寫作會代表她未來遺存的故事。




無名詩人一離開家就拋棄的姓名,說她的表演和寫作會代表她未來遺存的故事改名換姓,她深信她的來歷並不重要,她的作品才將會成為她的雋永

I get that you want to emphasis that she doesnt want to bear the family name and what makes her "her" is her work, which is why I add a small sentence to further elaborate the idea.

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