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birbblepeets

March 10, 2021

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我的狗

我和我的家人有一个狗。她的名字是Heidi。她有十三岁。她是棕色的和有黑色的斑。因为她很老,她的脸很白色的。

她最爱的菜是鸡肉的硬块。我们不让她吃太多了,但是我们每星期天给她十只硬块。节日的时候,我们给她猪肉的骨。我们不让她吃巧克力。

她是年轻了的时候,她在家外喜欢玩和跑步。现在她只喜欢睡觉。她只想跑步如果看一个猫。她也不喜欢雨。

五个前年,我去了大学,和她很伤心了。我看见我的家人的时候,她很高兴。我爱她,和她爱我们都。


My family and I have a dog. Her name is Heidi. She is thirteen years old. She is brown with black spots. Because she is old, her face is white.

Her favorite food is chicken nuggets. We don't allow her to eat too many, but we give her ten nuggets every Sunday. When it's a holiday, we give her a ham bone. We don't allow her to eat chocolate.

When she was young, she would play and run outside the house. Now, she only likes to sleep. She only wants to run if she sees a cat. She also doesn't like rain.

Five years ago, I went to university, and was sad. When I visit my family, she is happy. I love her, and she loves us all.

Corrections

我的狗

和我的家人有一狗。

一只狗 or 一条狗

她的名字是Heidi。

十三岁

她是棕色的和有,带着黑色的斑

因为她很老,她的脸很白色的

她最爱的菜是鸡肉的硬喜欢吃的是鸡块。

我们不允许她吃太多,但是我们星期天都会给她十只硬块鸡块。

的时候,我们给她猪肉

我们不让她吃巧克力。

年轻的时候,她喜欢在家外喜欢和跑步。

现在她只喜欢睡觉。

她只想跑步如果看一个猫在看到猫的时候才想跑步

她也不喜欢雨。

个前,我了大学,和她离开她,很伤心

I went to university, (left her,) and was sad. 我上了大学,(离开她,) 很伤心。
I went to university, and she was sad. 我上了大学,她很伤心。
去了大学 is OK, but 上了大学 is better.

看见我的家人去探亲的时候,她很高兴。

我爱她,爱我们大家

I love her, and...
", and" can be translated into ",并且" (我爱她,并且她也爱我们), or omitted directly (better).

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birbblepeets

March 17, 2021

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谢谢!When can I use 并且 as opposed to 和?

Also, what is the difference between 让 and 允许?

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heyyawn

March 17, 2021

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If you try to connect sentences like ", and", use "并且". We don't use "和" to connect sentences.
If connecting items, use "和". e.g. 苹果和梨.
There is little difference between 让 and 允许, more in style. 让 is more informal.

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birbblepeets

March 17, 2021

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Thanks! :)

我的狗


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我和我的家人有一个狗。


和我的家人有一狗。

一只狗 or 一条狗

她的名字是Heidi。


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

她有十三岁。


十三岁

她是棕色的和有黑色的斑。


她是棕色的和有,带着黑色的斑

因为她很老,她的脸很白色的。


因为她很老,她的脸很白色的

她最爱的菜是鸡肉的硬块。


她最爱的菜是鸡肉的硬喜欢吃的是鸡块。

我们不让她吃太多了,但是我们每星期天给她十只硬块。


我们不允许她吃太多,但是我们星期天都会给她十只硬块鸡块。

节日的时候,我们给她猪肉的骨。


的时候,我们给她猪肉

我们不让她吃巧克力。


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

她是年轻了的时候,她在家外喜欢玩和跑步。


年轻的时候,她喜欢在家外喜欢和跑步。

现在她只喜欢睡觉。


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

她只想跑步如果看一个猫。


她只想跑步如果看一个猫在看到猫的时候才想跑步

她也不喜欢雨。


她也不喜欢雨。

五个前年,我去了大学,和她很伤心了。


个前,我了大学,和她离开她,很伤心

I went to university, (left her,) and was sad. 我上了大学,(离开她,) 很伤心。 I went to university, and she was sad. 我上了大学,她很伤心。 去了大学 is OK, but 上了大学 is better.

我看见我的家人的时候,她很高兴。


看见我的家人去探亲的时候,她很高兴。

我爱她,和她爱我们都。


我爱她,爱我们大家

I love her, and... ", and" can be translated into ",并且" (我爱她,并且她也爱我们), or omitted directly (better).

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