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June 27, 2021

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(这是我昨天说的短信,我想看看是否正确)
我最喜欢的动物显然是我家庭的小狗!她一天比一天漂亮,但是仍然是特别可爱!这只狗叫卢娜,新年以来她属于我们。她的皮毛是黑白色的,因为她是一只牧羊犬。每次我一回家,她就跳扑我的怀里;再说她从来没咬人或者其他狗。目前,我的生活缺乏这个蹦蹦跳跳的动物是不可思议的。

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(这是我昨天说的短信,我想看看是否正确)

我最喜欢的动物显然是我家的小狗!

一天比一天漂亮,但是仍然是并且特别可爱!

1. "她" & "他" can only be used to refer to human beings.
2. There is no contrast between "漂亮" and "可爱", so "但是" is not appropriate.

这只狗叫卢娜,新年以来她属于之后/新年的时候来到我们

的皮毛是黑白色的,因为是一只牧羊犬。

每次我一回家,就跳扑我的怀里;再说她到我怀里。它从来没咬人或者其他狗。

"其他" is right here.
"其他" stands for people, animals and things, while "其它" cannot be used for people.
The "他" of "其他" is from ancient Chinese, with the meaning of "另外的、别的".

目前,我的生活缺乏如今,不敢想象生活中缺少这个蹦蹦跳跳的动物是不可思议的会怎样

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destaq

June 28, 2021

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Thank you for your corrections and explanations, the grammar explanations especially were really helpful.

她一天比一天漂亮,但是仍然是特别可爱!


一天比一天漂亮,但是仍然是并且特别可爱!

1. "她" & "他" can only be used to refer to human beings. 2. There is no contrast between "漂亮" and "可爱", so "但是" is not appropriate.

这只狗叫卢娜,新年以来她属于我们。


这只狗叫卢娜,新年以来她属于之后/新年的时候来到我们

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(这是我昨天说的短信,我想看看是否正确)


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

我最喜欢的动物显然是我家庭的小狗!


我最喜欢的动物显然是我家的小狗!

她的皮毛是黑白色的,因为她是一只牧羊犬。


的皮毛是黑白色的,因为是一只牧羊犬。

每次我一回家,她就跳扑我的怀里;再说她从来没咬人或者其他狗。


每次我一回家,就跳扑我的怀里;再说她到我怀里。它从来没咬人或者其他狗。

"其他" is right here. "其他" stands for people, animals and things, while "其它" cannot be used for people. The "他" of "其他" is from ancient Chinese, with the meaning of "另外的、别的".

目前,我的生活缺乏这个蹦蹦跳跳的动物是不可思议的。


目前,我的生活缺乏如今,不敢想象生活中缺少这个蹦蹦跳跳的动物是不可思议的会怎样

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