Nov. 3, 2020
オンライン授業
I woke up around 9am, washed my face in the bathroom, brushed my teeth, sat down at my desk and drank a glass of tomato juice.
Around 10:30, I turned on my desktop computer to prepare for my class that started at 10:40, opened my gmail, moved to classroom, opened the zoom link for the class I was taking, and waited for the class to start.
Class ended at 12:10 and we ate the carbonara my mom had made, but she had forgotten to buy bacon and it was carbonara without bacon. We sat down again and took classes from 13:00 to 17:50 p.m., with a 10-minute break every hour and a half.
I promised my family to see for dinner at a sushi restaurant near the station. My favorite fish is salmon roe, but there was less salmon roe than the last time I went to the sushi restaurant, and the other tuna and salmon seemed to be smaller than the last time I went there. I think food in general is getting smaller these days, not just sushi, and one thing I thought was particularly bad was the ice cream parm made by Morinaga. It's obviously got smaller and I don't want to buy it anymore.
I got home around 8:30am, practiced my English pronunciation and studied finance, invited my college friends over discord to play computer games, varolant, with me until 11pm, and then took a bath and tried to went to sleep, but I couldn't sleep well, so I drank my dad's nihonsyu and I got myself drunk and went to sleep.
朝、9時ごろに起床し、洗面所で顔を洗って、歯を磨き、机の席に座って、コップ一杯のトマトジュースを飲んでいた。
10時30分頃に10時40分から始まる授業に備えて、デスクトップPCの電源をつけて、gmailを開いてclassroomに移り、受講する授業のzoomのリンクを開いて、授業が始まるのを待っていた。
12時10分に授業が終わって、母が作ったカルボナーラを食べたのだが、母親がベーコンを買い忘れていて、ベーコンなしのカルボナーラだった。再び席について、13時から17時50分の1時間半ごとに10分の休憩をはさみながら授業を受けた。
夕食をとるために、家族とlineで駅近くのすし屋で待ち合わせをして、夕食をすました。私がすきなネタはイクラだが、この前すし屋にいった時よりもイクラの量が少なくなっていて、他のマグロやサーモンのネタも小さくなっているように見えた。寿司だけに限らず、最近、食べ物が全般的に小さくなっていると思う、特にひどいと思ったのが、アイスのパルムだ。明らかに小さくなっていて、もう買いたいと思わない。
家には8時半頃に帰ってから、英語の発音練習と金融の勉強をし、大学の友達をdiscordを使って誘って一緒にパソコンゲーム、varolantを23時までプレイして、それから、風呂に入って布団に入って寝ようとしたのだが、良く寝むれなかったので父親の日本酒を飲んで、自分を酔っ払いさせて寝た。
オンライン授業 (Online class)
Around 10:30, I turned on my desktop computer to prepare for my class thatwhich started at 10:40, opened my gGmail, moved to classroom, opened the zZoom link for the class I was taking, and waited for the class to start.
"Desktop Computer" is not used very much anymore.
Class ended at 12:10 and we ate the carbonara my mom had made, but she had forgotten to buy bacon andso it was carbonara without bacon.
You could also say "...she had forgotten to buy bacon so _we had_ carbonara without bacon"
We sat down again and took classes from 13:00 to 17:50 p.m., with a 10-minute break every hour and a half.
You used the 24 hour system so AM/PM isn't needed.
I promised to see my family to see for dinner at a sushi restaurant near the station.
If you were meeting your family then this how you would say it.
My favorite fish is salmon roe, but there was less salmon roe than the last time I went to the sushi restaurant, and the other tuna and salmon also seemed to be smaller than the last time I went there.
You had said you were at the sushi restaurant, so saying it again isn't necessary.
I think food in general is getting smaller these days, not just sushi, and one thing I thought waink is particularly bad wais the ice cream parm made by Morinaga.
It's obviously gotten smaller and I don't want to buy it anymore.
I got home around 8:30apm, practiced my English pronunciation and, studied finance, and invited my college friends over discord to play computer games, with me, specifically varolant, with me until 11pm, and t. Then I took a bath and tried to wentgo to sleep, but I couldn't sleep well, so I drank my dad's nihonsyu and I got myself, got drunk and went to sleep.
I assume you meant 8:30pm lol. Also, try not to use "and" more than once in the same sentence.
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Sounds like a busy day. Good work!
Nov. 4, 2020
thank you very much !!
I woke up around 9am, washed my face in the bathroom, brushed my teeth, sat down at my desk and drank a glass of tomato juice.
Around 10:30, I turned on my desktop computer to prepare for my class that started at 10:40, opened my gGmail, moved to my classroom, opened the zZoom link for the class I was taking, and waited for the class to start.
We sat down again and took classes from 13:00 to 17:50 p.m., with a 10-minute break every hour and a half.
P.M. is not needed since you used the 24-hour system :)
I promised my family to seelook for dinner at a sushi restaurant near the station.
"Look for" suggests that you have to search or find it.
I got home around 8:30am, practiced my English pronunciation and studied finance, invited my college friends over dDiscord to play computer games, vVarolant, with me until 11pm, and then took a bath and tried to wentgo to sleep, but I couldn't sleep well, so I drank my dad's nNihonsyu and I got myself drunk and went to sleep.
Capital letters should be used for names of things.
Since the main verb "tried" is in past tense you don't need the past tense of "to go".
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You sound like you had a busy day!
Nov. 4, 2020
I appreciate it！！
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I woke up around 9am, washed my face in the bathroom, brushed my teeth, sat down at my desk and drank a glass of tomato juice. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Around 10:30, I turned on my desktop computer to prepare for my class that started at 10:40, opened my gmail, moved to classroom, opened the zoom link for the class I was taking, and waited for the class to start. Around 10:30, I turned on my desktop computer to prepare for my class that started at 10:40, opened my Around 10:30, I turned on my "Desktop Computer" is not used very much anymore. |
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Class ended at 12:10 and we ate the carbonara my mom had made, but she had forgotten to buy bacon and it was carbonara without bacon. Class ended at 12:10 and we ate the carbonara my mom had made, but she had forgotten to buy bacon You could also say "...she had forgotten to buy bacon so _we had_ carbonara without bacon" |
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We sat down again and took classes from 13:00 to 17:50 p.m., with a 10-minute break every hour and a half. We sat down again and took classes from 13:00 to 17:50 P.M. is not needed since you used the 24-hour system :) We sat down again and took classes from 13:00 to 17:50 You used the 24 hour system so AM/PM isn't needed. |
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I promised my family to see for dinner at a sushi restaurant near the station. I promised my family to "Look for" suggests that you have to search or find it. I promised to see my family If you were meeting your family then this how you would say it. |
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My favorite fish is salmon roe, but there was less salmon roe than the last time I went to the sushi restaurant, and the other tuna and salmon seemed to be smaller than the last time I went there. My favorite fish is salmon roe, but there was less salmon roe than the last time I went You had said you were at the sushi restaurant, so saying it again isn't necessary. |
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I think food in general is getting smaller these days, not just sushi, and one thing I thought was particularly bad was the ice cream parm made by Morinaga. I think food in general is getting smaller these days, not just sushi, and one thing I th |
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It's obviously got smaller and I don't want to buy it anymore. It's obviously gotten smaller and I don't want to buy it anymore. |
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I got home around 8:30am, practiced my English pronunciation and studied finance, invited my college friends over discord to play computer games, varolant, with me until 11pm, and then took a bath and tried to went to sleep, but I couldn't sleep well, so I drank my dad's nihonsyu and I got myself drunk and went to sleep. I got home around 8:30am, practiced my English pronunciation and studied finance, invited my college friends over Capital letters should be used for names of things. Since the main verb "tried" is in past tense you don't need the past tense of "to go". I got home around 8:30 I assume you meant 8:30pm lol. Also, try not to use "and" more than once in the same sentence. |
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