Dec. 22, 2021
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Although I don't keep animals, I do want to talk about this topic. As far as I remember, my family only kept a yellow dog when I was a kid. That dog was just a local dog, not some dog with a very precious blood race. He was a little bigger than other dogs in my village, but he was not as smart, as nimble as other dogs. Sometimes he looks a bit purblind. Every autumn when dogs chase hares in the cotton fields, my dog can only run behind. One day, it became too old and died. That is the only impression about keeping animals in my family. Many years later, I grew up and had my own family, but I still never keep animals. Here in China, people prefer keeping dogs and cats, especially dogs. If you go to the public area in the evening or on weekends, you can see many different kinds of dogs. Some of them look really cute and lovely. I don't keep pets is not because I don't like animals, but it's because I am lazy. If I keep pets, I have to take care of them, for example, feed them, clean them, so that would be a lot of hassle. Besides, I am also worried about their fur because I am afraid of breathing their fallen fur into my lungs. The last reason is I don't have that much time to keep animals. I always think that I should spend my time working and learning, so how can I have the time to keep animals?
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Although I don't keep any animals, I do want to talk about this topic.
As far as I remember, my family only kept a yellow dog when I was a kid.
That dog was just asome local dog, not some dog with a very precious blood raca purebred one.
The word for that kind of specifically bred dog is "purebred" :)
He was a little bigger than other dogs in my village, but he was not as smart, nor as nimble as other dogs.
Sometimes he looksseemed a bit purblind.
Blindness usually isn't really something you can "see".
Every autumn, when dogsever the dogs would chase hares in the cotton fields, my dog canould only run behind.
"would chase", "used to chase", or just plain "chased" all work here.
One day, it becameEventually, it got too old and died.
Getting old is a gradual process, so "one day" doesn't really fit here.
That is the only impression aboutI ever got from my family when it comes to keeping animals in my family.
Many years later, I grew up and had my own family, but I still never keep animals.
Here in China, people prefer keeping dogs and cats, especially dogs.
If you go to the public area in the evening or on weekends, you can see many different kinds of dogs.
Some of them look really cute and lovely.
I don't keep pets is not because I don't like animals, but it's because I am lazy.
You could also drop "but" and just say "[it's] not because I don't like animals; it's because I am lazy"
If I keep pets, I have to take care of them, for example, by feeding them, and cleaning them, so that would be a lot of hassle.
"take care of them by feeding them" I changed the forms of "feeding" and "cleaning" because they're still continuing the original sentence. I hope that makes sense.
Besides, I am also worried about their fur, because I am afraid of breathing their fallen fur into my lungsin the fur they shed.
"into my lungs" is a little redundant, since you already said "breathing them [in]".
The last reason is I don't have that much time to keepcare for animals.
I always think that I should spend my time working and learning, so how can I have thwould I make time tofor keeping animals?
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Well-written! :)
Dec. 22, 2021
Thank you very much for correcting my junior and giving me many detailed explanations. Thank you very much.
Dec. 22, 2021
No problem at all!
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Although I don't keep animals, I do want to talk about this topic. Although I don't keep any animals, I do want to talk about this topic. |
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As far as I remember, my family only kept a yellow dog when I was a kid. |
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That dog was just a local dog, not some dog with a very precious blood race. That dog was just The word for that kind of specifically bred dog is "purebred" :)
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He was a little bigger than other dogs in my village, but he was not as smart, as nimble as other dogs. He was a little bigger than other dogs in my village, but he was not as smart, nor as nimble as other dogs. |
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Sometimes he looks a bit purblind. Sometimes he Blindness usually isn't really something you can "see".
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Every autumn when dogs chase hares in the cotton fields, my dog can only run behind. Every autumn, when "would chase", "used to chase", or just plain "chased" all work here.
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One day, it became too old and died.
Getting old is a gradual process, so "one day" doesn't really fit here.
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That is the only impression about keeping animals in my family. That is the only impression |
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Many years later, I grew up and had my own family, but I still never keep animals. |
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Here in China, people prefer keeping dogs and cats, especially dogs. |
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If you go to the public area in the evening or on weekends, you can see many different kinds of dogs. |
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Some of them look really cute and lovely. |
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I don't keep pets is not because I don't like animals, but it's because I am lazy. I don't keep pets is not because I don't like animals, but You could also drop "but" and just say "[it's] not because I don't like animals; it's because I am lazy"
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If I keep pets, I have to take care of them, for example, feed them, clean them, so that would be a lot of hassle. If I keep pets, I have to take care of them, for example, by feeding them "take care of them by feeding them" I changed the forms of "feeding" and "cleaning" because they're still continuing the original sentence. I hope that makes sense.
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Besides, I am also worried about their fur because I am afraid of breathing their fallen fur into my lungs. Besides, I am also worried about their fur, because I am afraid of breathing "into my lungs" is a little redundant, since you already said "breathing them [in]".
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The last reason is I don't have that much time to keep animals. The last reason is I don't have that much time to |
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I always think that I should spend my time working and learning, so how can I have the time to keep animals? I always think that I should spend my time working and learning, so how |
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