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Jack

Dec. 25, 2021

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I have lots of memories of my childhood, and it seems that I can only remember things that happened when I was a child. I can't remember things since I became an adult.

Now I'd like to talk about going to school.

The primary school and middle school that I studied in are all in my home town. The primary school is in another village which is about 1.5 kilometers away from my village.

I walked to school every day with my fellow children. We didn't have any transportation, we could only walk.

The roads back then were just natural dirt roads, and surrounded by fields.

Also, the roads would have unknown grass and flowers on them if few people walked on them.

We didn't hate the dirt roads and the long distance walking, we only hated the rainy days.

Because they were dirt roads, they were really hard to walk through. There would be lots of mud on our shoes, it made our feet really heavy.

Another tough situation was on snowy days. It made our walking harder.

Therefore, when rainy days and snowy days come, we will find a strong branch to scrape the mud from our shoes all the way along.

We also had a lot of fun during the journey of going to school or returning home. If we had enough time, we would chase each other for fun during the journey.

I still remember a kind of wild grass growing in the spring which can be eaten, so if it's in spring, the biggest fun during our journey was digging and eating it.

I don't know its English name, I found the photos of it online. I hope you guys can tell me what it is in English.

Okay, I think that's enough for this journal. Have a good day and see you guys next time. Bye bye!

Corrections

I walked to school every day with my fellow childrenthe other kids.

There's nothing technically wrong with "with my fellow children", and it communicates the meaning correctly, but it sounds unnatural. I think that the reason it sounds wrong is that the words are more sophisticated than a child would say.

We didn't have any transportation vehicle, we could only walk.

Walking is transportation. "a vehicle" here would be a stand-in for a bike, a car, a bus, etc.

Because they were dirt roads, they were really hard to walk throughon.

Walking "through" a wall would be painful and require super-powers. Walking "through" a road would require super-powers and for gravity to be backwards.

"on" or "upon" makes more sense.

Feedback

Very good writing. 👍 My corrections are very small. I'm sorry that I have no idea what the name of your wild grass is.

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Jack

Dec. 28, 2021

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Thank you very much for your help. I am very grateful.

Writing Practice

I have lots of memories of my childhood, and it seems that I can only remember things that happened when I was a child.

I can't remember things since I became an adult.

Now I'd like to talk about going to school.

The primary school and middle school that I studied in are all in my home town.

The primary school is in another village which is about 1.5 kilometers away from my village.

I walked to school every day with my fellow children.

I walked to school every day with my fellow childrenthe other kids.

We didn't have any transportation, we could only walk.

We didn't have any transportation vehicle, we could only walk.

The roads back then were just natural dirt roads, and surrounded by fields.

Also, the roads would have unknown grass and flowers on them if few people walked on them.

We didn't hate the dirt roads and the long distance walking, we only hated the rainy days.

Because they were dirt roads, they were really hard to walk through.

Because they were dirt roads, they were really hard to walk throughon.

There would be lots of mud on our shoes, it made our feet really heavy.

Another tough situation was on snowy days.

It made our walking harder.

Therefore, when rainy days and snowy days come, we will find a strong branch to scrape the mud from our shoes all the way along.

We also had a lot of fun during the journey of going to school or returning home.

If we had enough time, we would chase each other for fun during the journey.

I still remember a kind of wild grass growing in the spring which can be eaten, so if it's in spring, the biggest fun during our journey was digging and eating it.

I don't know its English name, I found the photos of it online.

I hope you guys can tell me what it is in English.

Okay, I think that's enough for this journal.

Have a good day and see you guys next time.

Bye bye!

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