Dec. 2, 2020
Which is better to gain information?
Do you agree or disagree with the following?
"Reading paper materials is better than watching electronic devices to gain information."
It is critically important that we expand our information and gain knowledge on various topics. No one can deny that there are both positive and negative effects of using paper materials or watch electronic devices to gain information. Personally, I disagree that reading paper materials are better. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, gaining information from electronic devices could be more beneficial to access what we looking at. Moreover, it saves a lot of time, rather than reading many pages to get achieve the point. My opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. Two years ago I had to work with my professor on medically related research. He asked me to read specific books to gain the information needed. Therefore, I have had to read five books, to find the point we are looking at. Instead, I did not follow his rules, and I watched many videos on YOUTUBE related to the topic. Moreover, I searched on researches related websites, and I got more than what he wants in a very short time. The professor was shocked at that, and I think he will consider using modern technology in future papers.
Furthermore, proved paper materials are not present everywhere. Therefore, many people may not get the chance to access what they want to learn or read. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. Last semester I went to visit my friend in a small town near me. He had to work in the library, during my visit, one day I went with him to his work and during my tour in the library, I asked where I can find books about dental emergencies. He told me that we don't have any medically related books. I was shocked, how could that the whole library does not have medically-related books. Then, I Figured out that his town does offer limited things including books. Thanks to our technology, after we went to his home, I opened my laptop, and I got what I was looking for.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that electronic devices are better to gain information. This is because it allows for more information and easily accessed.
Which is better to gain information?
Do you agree or disagree with the following?
"Reading paper materials is better than watching electronic devices to gain information.
It is critically important that we expand our sources of information and gain knowledge on various topics.
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative effects of usingusing either paper materials or watch electronic devices to gain information has both positive and negative effects.
Personally, I disagree with the argument that reading paper materials areis better.
I feel this way for two reasons,There are two reasons why I feel this way, both of which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, gaining information from electronic devices could be more beneficial to access what we looking atelectronic devices offer better access to information.
Moreover, it saves a lot of time, rather than reading many pages to get achieve the pointcompared to reading through several pages to find the same information.
It's a bit early to use 'moreover'. You would use 'moreoever' when you've already argued a point quite a bit and your sentence before this one is not sufficient as is.
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The professor was shocked at that, and I think he will consider using modern technology into conduct research for future papers.
Furthermore, proved paper materials are not present everywhere.
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Therefore, many people may not get the chance to access what they want to learn or read.
Use therefore, moreover, furthermore, etc. more sparingly.
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Feedback
Try to write simpler pieces of text before you take on writing essays. First learn how to write grammatically correct sentences, and after that you can starting writing arguments, pros and cons, etc. and learn when to use words such as moreover, therefore. These words only add weight and only impress when used appropriately. But good effort, it was not a clearcut easy topic to write about.
Dec. 4, 2020
Thanks a lot for your help, really appreciate it.
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Which is better to gain information? |
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Do you agree or disagree with the following? |
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"Reading paper materials is better than watching electronic devices to gain information. |
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It is critically important that we expand our information and gain knowledge on various topics. It is critically important that we expand our sources of information and gain knowledge on various topics. |
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No one can deny that there are both positive and negative effects of using paper materials or watch electronic devices to gain information. No one can deny that |
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Personally, I disagree that reading paper materials are better. Personally, I disagree with the argument that reading paper materials |
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I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
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To begin with, gaining information from electronic devices could be more beneficial to access what we looking at. To begin with, |
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Moreover, it saves a lot of time, rather than reading many pages to get achieve the point. Moreover, it saves a lot of time, It's a bit early to use 'moreover'. You would use 'moreoever' when you've already argued a point quite a bit and your sentence before this one is not sufficient as is.
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My opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. |
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Two years ago I had to work with my professor on medically related research. Two years ago I had to work with my professor on medical |
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He asked me to read specific books to gain the information needed. |
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Therefore, I have had to read five books, to find the point we are looking at.
Therefore doesn't fit here. But did you not mean 'I would have had to read five books... and instead watched videos'?
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Instead, I did not follow his rules, and I watched many videos on YOUTUBE related to the topic. I |
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Moreover, I searched on researches related websites, and I got more than what he wants in a very short time. Moreover, I searched on research |
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The professor was shocked at that, and I think he will consider using modern technology in future papers. The professor was shocked at that, and I think he will consider using modern technology |
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Furthermore, proved paper materials are not present everywhere. Furthermore, proved paper materials are not present everywhere. Sentence doesn't make sense.
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Therefore, many people may not get the chance to access what they want to learn or read. Therefore, many people may not get the chance to access what they want to learn or read. Use therefore, moreover, furthermore, etc. more sparingly.
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My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. |
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Last semester I went to visit my friend in a small town near me. |
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He had to work in the library, during my visit, one day I went with him to his work and during my tour in the library, I asked where I can find books about dental emergencies. He had to work in the library |
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He told me that we don't have any medically related books. He told me that |
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I was shocked, how could that the whole library does not have medically-related books. I was shocked |
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Then, I Figured out that his town does offer limited things including books.
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Thanks to our technology, after we went to his home, I opened my laptop, and I got what I was looking for. |
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In conclusion, I strongly believe that electronic devices are better to gain information. In conclusion, I strongly believe that electronic devices are better |
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This is because it allows for more information and easily accessed. This is because |
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