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Mar 18

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What's the most beautiful monument you've ever visited?

It happened when I was at school. On our end-of-year trip we went to Greece to see the Acropolis of Athens. Our history teacher came with us to teach us about the art and architecture of the place. Although it was surprisingly crowded and we were there for a week, it was worth it.

When you visit historical places like this, it feels as if you were on another planet. And that happened to me as I saw the Parthenon. Despite my expectations were high, I was amazed by its majesty. Our teacher told us about its importance, the civilization who built it and what values it represented at present. It was an unforgettable experience.

And so, I am now looking forward to visiting the Colosseum in Rome. It's my next destination of exploration and learning about ancient cultures.

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    March 19, 2023, 11:05 a.m.

    Thanks a million! (◕‿◕)/

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    March 19, 2023, 11:07 a.m.

    Many thanks!

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It happened when I was at school.

On our end-of-year trip we went to Greece to see the Acropolis of Athens.

OnFor our end-of-year trip, we went to Greece to see the Acropolis ofin Athens.

Technically, there is more than one acropolis; however, we normally use the word to refer to the one in Athens, so you wouldn't have to specify here.
Usage Stylistic

On our end-of-year trip, we went to Greece to see the Acropolis of Athens.

Grammar
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Our history teacher came with us to teach us about the art and architecture of the place.

Our history teacher came with us to teach us about the place's art and architecture of the place.

This sounds more natural
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Although it was surprisingly crowded and we were there for a week, it was worth it.
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When you visit historical places like this, it feels as if you were on another planet.

When you visit historical places like this, it feels as if you weare on another planet.
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And that happened to me as I saw the Parthenon.

Despite my expectations were high, I was amazed by its majesty.

Despite my high expectations were high, I was still amazed by its majestyicness.

Usage

Despite that my expectations were high, I was (still) amazed by its majesty.

"still" would add emphasis here

Our teacher told us about its importance, the civilization who built it and what values it represented at present.

Our teacher told us about its importance, the civilization whothat built it, and what values it represented at currently represents.

Grammar Usage

Our teacher told us about its importance, the civilization whothat built it and what values it representeds at present.

"who" is for people and "that" is for most other things
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It was an unforgettable experience.
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And so, I am now looking forward to visiting the Colosseum in Rome.

It's my next destination of exploration and learning about ancient cultures.

It's my next destination of exploration and learningI hope to learn more about ancient cultures.

Your point was clear, but I was having a hard time rephrasing the sentence. I think this is what you were trying to say though.
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It's my next destination tof exploratione and learning about ancient cultures.

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