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Jan. 22, 2022

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teenage mayors

Many teenagers like to try and make a bit of money. They deliver newspaper, work in a shop at the weekends or do a bit of gardening .But young Americas Chris Portman and Jeff Dunkel both decided to try for a different type of job. To get this job there was no job interview for this job they needed to get elected by the public. They both stood for election to be mayor of the towns where they live and they both won. 19 year old Portman and 18 year old Dunkel must now try and balance their lives students with the things they have to do as a mayor. For example, they have to attend meetings, help with fund- raising or open new shops.

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tTeenage mMayors

They deliver newspapers, work in a shop aton the weekends or do a bit of gardening . But two young Americasns, Chris Portman and Jeff Dunkel both, decided to try for a different type of job.

To get this job, there was no job interview f. For this job, they needed to get elected by the public.

They both stood for election to be mayor of the towns where they live and they both wonboth of them were succesfully elected.

19 -year old Portman and 18 -year old Dunkel must now try and balance their lives student lives with the things they have to doir responsibilities as a mayor.

"Things" is a little informal

For example, they have to attend meetings, help with fund- raising orand open new shops.

You could add a little more detail here if you like. For example, fundraising in what respect? What new shops are they obliged to open as mayor?

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This is generally really well-written, only had a few small comments here and there. Great job!

They deliver newspapers, work in a shop at the weekends, or do a bit of gardening .But y. Young Americans Chris Portman and Jeff Dunkel both decided to try for a different type of job.

To get this job there was no job interview fto get this job. For this job they needed to getbe elected by the public.

They both stoodran for election to be mayor of the towns where they lived, and they both won.

19 year old Portman and 18 year old Dunkel must now try and balance their lives as students with the things they have to do as a mayor.

For example, they have to attend meetings, help with fund- raising or open new shops.

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Great job! Interesting story.

Many teenagers like to try and make a bit of money (on the side).

They may deliver newspapers, work in a shop at the weekends or do a bit of gardening .But. However, young Americas 'Chris Portman' and 'Jeff Dunkel' both decided to try for a different type of job.

Try and avoid starting a sentence with 'But'.

To get this job there was no job interview forto get this job, they needed to get elected by (members of) the public.

They both stood for election to be mayor of the towns where they each live, and they both won.

19 year old Portman and 18 year old Dunkel must now try and balance their livesown student lives with the things they have to do as a mayor.

For example, they have to attend meetings, help with fund- raising or open new shops.

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Well done :)

teenage mayors

tTeenage mMayors

Many teenagers like to try and make a bit of money.

Many teenagers like to try and make a bit of money (on the side).

They deliver newspaper, work in a shop at the weekends or do a bit of gardening .But young Americas Chris Portman and Jeff Dunkel both decided to try for a different type of job.

They deliver newspapers, work in a shop aton the weekends or do a bit of gardening . But two young Americasns, Chris Portman and Jeff Dunkel both, decided to try for a different type of job.

They deliver newspapers, work in a shop at the weekends, or do a bit of gardening .But y. Young Americans Chris Portman and Jeff Dunkel both decided to try for a different type of job.

They may deliver newspapers, work in a shop at the weekends or do a bit of gardening .But. However, young Americas 'Chris Portman' and 'Jeff Dunkel' both decided to try for a different type of job.

To get this job there was no job interview for this job they needed to get elected by the public.

To get this job, there was no job interview f. For this job, they needed to get elected by the public.

To get this job there was no job interview fto get this job. For this job they needed to getbe elected by the public.

To get this job there was no job interview forto get this job, they needed to get elected by (members of) the public.

They both stood for election to be mayor of the towns where they live and they both won.

They both stood for election to be mayor of the towns where they live and they both wonboth of them were succesfully elected.

They both stoodran for election to be mayor of the towns where they lived, and they both won.

They both stood for election to be mayor of the towns where they each live, and they both won.

19 year old Portman and 18 year old Dunkel must now try and balance their lives students with the things they have to do as a mayor.

19 -year old Portman and 18 -year old Dunkel must now try and balance their lives student lives with the things they have to doir responsibilities as a mayor.

19 year old Portman and 18 year old Dunkel must now try and balance their lives as students with the things they have to do as a mayor.

19 year old Portman and 18 year old Dunkel must now try and balance their livesown student lives with the things they have to do as a mayor.

For example, they have to attend meetings, help with fund- raising or open new shops.

For example, they have to attend meetings, help with fund- raising orand open new shops.

For example, they have to attend meetings, help with fund- raising or open new shops.

For example, they have to attend meetings, help with fund- raising or open new shops.

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