Summer has come

June came. I every time smelled that summer is approaching. It makes me cheerful and excited. When I was a teenager and in my early twenty, I really loved the summer season. Every summer, I had been to some beaches in different areas and enjoyed swimming with friends of mine. Also, going the windsurfing made me so exciting.

Suddenly I really wanted to buy a board for windsurfing. However, I realized that I need to buy a car before I buy the board, because nobody carry the board by their hands. My younger sister and I went to a used car shop to check how much is a car and needed to figure out which car might be able to buy and I can drive it by myself. Those time, my face and body got suntan every summer as if I was a professional surfer.

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Summer has come

June came.

I ~~every time smelled that~~can always smell when summer is approaching.

I wasn't really sure what this sentence meant. Something like this?

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It makes me cheerful and excited.

When I was a teenager and in my early twentyies, I really loved the summer season.

Twenty, twenty one, twenty two, twenty three, etc - these ages are "your twenties", because each of them is a twenty-something and there are ten of them, so plural :)

Usage

Every summer, I ~~had be~~went to ~~some~~many beaches in different areas and enjoyed swimming with friends of mine.

"had been" doesn't seem like the best tense here. You would use it if you were talking about a sequence of specific events in a story - "I had been to the beach before I went inside the house, so I was still all sandy". But here it feels more habitual.

"some" is okay but "many" seems to fit better.

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Also, going ~~the~~ windsurfing made me so excit~~ing~~ed.

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Suddenly I really wanted to buy a board for windsurfing.

However, I realized that I needed to buy a car before I could buy the board, because nobody carr~~y the~~ies a board ~~by their hands~~on foot.

Matching past tense. "Before I buy" is okay but "before I could buy" is clearer, and "by their hands" is okay but "on foot" describes what you mean better, and it's a useful expression!

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My younger sister and I went to a used car shop to check how much ~~is a car and needed to~~they cost and figure out which car I might be able to buy and ~~I can~~ drive it by myself.

This was not a well constructed sentence.

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Those times, my face and body got suntanned every summer as if I was a professional surfer.

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June 16, 2021, 11 a.m.

Thank you so much for correcting my writing. Have a nice day!!

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