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April 3, 2021

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Sleep in Spring

There is great poetry that describes sleep in spring. The poetry is "Spring Dawn" by Meng Hao Ran. It says I overslept, being unaware of dawn because it's so comfy to relax in the bed and the climate is warm in spring. Birds tweet here and there, and I just remembered the sound of wind and rain was intense last night. The flowers in my garden should have dispersed.
The poet was a government official in ancient China, and it's said he made this work after quitting his job. Today, I overslept as he described. It's no problem because I'm on spring vacation, but the vacation ends in a week.

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Sleep in Spring

There is a great poetrym that describes sleep in spring.

The poetrym is "Spring Dawn" by Meng Hao Ran.

Poetry: the genre of poem writing
Poem: a specific work

It says "I overslept, being unaware of dawn because it's so comfy to relax in the bed and the climate is warm in spring.

Birds tweet here and there, and I just remembered the sound of wind and rain was intense last night.

The flowers in my garden should have dispersed."

Adding quotes helps distinguish which part is the poem and which part is your thoughts

The poet was a government official in ancient China, and it's said he made this work after quitting his job.

Today, I overslept as he described.

It's no problem because I'm on spring vacation, but the vacation ends in a week.

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Great job! Thank you for sharing the poem.

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ponta

April 4, 2021

217

Thank you!

Sleep in Spring

There is great poetry thatm which describes sleep in spring.

US alternatives

There is a great piece of poetry which describes sleep in spring.

The poetrym is "Spring Dawn" by Meng Hao Ran.

Same as previous corrector's.

It says "I overslept, being unaware of dawn because it's so comfy to relax in theg in bed and the climateweather is warm in spring.

US alternative. We always use quotation marks (") to quote from passages.

Birds tweet here and there, and I just remembered that the sound of wind and rain was intense last night.

US alternative translation.

The flowers in my garden should have been dispersed."

US alternative

The poet was a government official in ancient China, and it's said he made thisthat he created this piece of work after he quitting his job.

US alternative

Today, I overslept just as he described.

You can use "just" to emphasize what happened.

It's no problem because I'm on spring vacation, but the vacation ends in a week.

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What a great piece of poetry. Thank you for sharing it!

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ponta

April 4, 2021

217

Thank you so much, too!

Sleep in Spring

There is great poetry that describes sleep in spring.

There is a great poetrym that describes sleep in spring.

There is great poetry thatm which describes sleep in spring.

The poetry is "Spring Dawn" by Meng Hao Ran.

The poetrym is "Spring Dawn" by Meng Hao Ran.

The poetrym is "Spring Dawn" by Meng Hao Ran.

It says I overslept, being unaware of dawn because it's so comfy to relax in the bed and the climate is warm in spring.

It says "I overslept, being unaware of dawn because it's so comfy to relax in the bed and the climate is warm in spring.

It says "I overslept, being unaware of dawn because it's so comfy to relax in theg in bed and the climateweather is warm in spring.

Birds tweet here and there, and I just remembered the sound of wind and rain was intense last night.

Birds tweet here and there, and I just remembered that the sound of wind and rain was intense last night.

The flowers in my garden should have dispersed.

The flowers in my garden should have dispersed."

The flowers in my garden should have been dispersed."

The poet was a government official in ancient China, and it's said he made this work after quitting his job.

The poet was a government official in ancient China, and it's said he made thisthat he created this piece of work after he quitting his job.

Today, I overslept as he described.

Today, I overslept just as he described.

It's no problem because I'm on spring vacation, but the vacation ends in a week.

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