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maartijn

July 5, 2021

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Sentences 159: Sever, Heart On Sleeve, Unhinged

He severed links with his sister as she repeatedly spoke badly about his husband.
I'm in awe of his braveness! He wears his heart on his sleeve, even in the workplace.
My sister-in-law has seemed unhinged since her Covid infection, maybe these are long-term consequences.

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Sentences 159: Sever, Heart On Sleeve, Unhinged

He severed links with his sister as she had repeatedly spoken badly about his husband.

If you're using "as" to mean "because", I would recommend changing it to this for clarity (she spoke badly, then he severed links).

I'm in awe of his braveness!

"courage" is more common than "braveness"

He wears his heart on his sleeve, even in the workplace.

My sister-in-law has seemed unhinged since her Covid infection,; maybe these areis is a long-term consequences thereof.

"thereof" ties your second phrase to the first one
; is necessary because "maybe these are long-term consequences" is a sentence in itself, not a dependent phrase
I would use the singular "this is a long-term consequence" simply because it sounds more natural

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Excellent work! These are exclusively stylistic suggestions

Sentences 159: Sever, Heart On Sleeve, Unhinged

He severed links with his sister as she repeatedly spoke badly about his husband.

He severed links with his sister as she had repeatedly spoken badly about his husband.

I'm in awe of his braveness!

I'm in awe of his braveness!

He wears his heart on his sleeve, even in the workplace.

My sister-in-law has seemed unhinged since her Covid infection, maybe these are long-term consequences.

My sister-in-law has seemed unhinged since her Covid infection,; maybe these areis is a long-term consequences thereof.

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