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reasons spend less time family than before and measures

Some people argue that families are less close than before. The triggers and methods to fix it are as follows.
 
To begin with, the less time they spend with their families are supposed to blame. Living in a world where competition has become fiercer than ever before, individuals now suffer from great pressure from every walk of life. In this case, they have to push themselves harder, in order to pursue a better life. For example, they have to devote more time and energy to improving themselves to get decent jobs, because of high requirements from employees. Therefore, they are too occupied to spare time for their family, which results in alienating their beloved.
 
However, there are still some measures that could be taken to tackle this problem. First of all, they should achieve a work-family balance. For instance, adults could make a schedule for their work time and family time to notice themselves, thus avoiding imbalance between work and family. Furthermore, turning off their electronic equipment and talking more with family members when they are together. As high technology brings them more interesting things which can easily attract their attention such as computer games and televisions, as a result, they are addicted to those activities, totally ignoring the people they love, even when they sit down next to each other.
 
In conclusion, the reason behind this phenomenon is that they spare less time with their families since the stress that is imposed on them; however, this problem can be easily addressed by achieving a work-family balance and using fewer devices.

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rReasons people spend less time with family than before and measures

I'm not sure what you mean by "and measures"

The triggers and methods to fix it are as follows.:

To begin with, the less time they spend with their families are supposed to blame.

Living in a world where competition has become fiercer than ever before, individuals now suffer from great pressure from every walk of life.

In this case, they have to push themselves harder, in order to pursue a better life.

For example, they have to devote more time and energy to improving themselves in order to get decent jobs, because of high requirements from employeers.

Here we are talking about the people giving jobs. They are therefore employers. An employee is someone who is working for someone else

Therefore, they are too occupied to spare time for their familyies, which results in alienating their beloved.

When saying "they" you are talking about multiple people, therefore it's not only one family but multiple

However, there are still some measures that could be taken to tackle this problem.

First of all, they should achieve a work-family balance.

For instance, adults could make a schedule for their work time and family time to notice themselves, thus avoiding imbalance between work and family.

Furthermore, turning off their electronic equipment and talking more with family members when they are together.

As highadvanced technology brings them more interesting things which can easily attract their attention, those are things such as computer games and televisions, a. As a result, they areget addicted to those activities, totally ignoring the people they love, even when they sit down next to each other.

I'm guessing you're thinking about high-tech, you can only say "high-tech", high technology is not a thing

In conclusion, the reason behind this phenomenon is that theypeople spare less time with their families sincebecause of the stress that is imposed on them; however, this problem can be easily addressed by achieving a work-family balance and using fewer devices.

They is too undefined here, it is more correct to just say people in general

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Good journal, you were talking about some important topics

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ricky

Nov. 29, 2020

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Thank you so much!

reasons spend less time family than before and measures

rReasons people spend less time with family than before and measures

Some people argue that families are less close than before.

The triggers and methods to fix it are as follows.

The triggers and methods to fix it are as follows.:

To begin with, the less time they spend with their families are supposed to blame.

To begin with, the less time they spend with their families are supposed to blame.

Living in a world where competition has become fiercer than ever before, individuals now suffer from great pressure from every walk of life.

In this case, they have to push themselves harder, in order to pursue a better life.

For example, they have to devote more time and energy to improving themselves to get decent jobs, because of high requirements from employees.

For example, they have to devote more time and energy to improving themselves in order to get decent jobs, because of high requirements from employeers.

Therefore, they are too occupied to spare time for their family, which results in alienating their beloved.

Therefore, they are too occupied to spare time for their familyies, which results in alienating their beloved.

However, there are still some measures that could be taken to tackle this problem.

First of all, they should achieve a work-family balance.

For instance, adults could make a schedule for their work time and family time to notice themselves, thus avoiding imbalance between work and family.

Furthermore, turning off their electronic equipment and talking more with family members when they are together.

As high technology brings them more interesting things which can easily attract their attention such as computer games and televisions, as a result, they are addicted to those activities, totally ignoring the people they love, even when they sit down next to each other.

As highadvanced technology brings them more interesting things which can easily attract their attention, those are things such as computer games and televisions, a. As a result, they areget addicted to those activities, totally ignoring the people they love, even when they sit down next to each other.

In conclusion, the reason behind this phenomenon is that they spare less time with their families since the stress that is imposed on them; however, this problem can be easily addressed by achieving a work-family balance and using fewer devices.

In conclusion, the reason behind this phenomenon is that theypeople spare less time with their families sincebecause of the stress that is imposed on them; however, this problem can be easily addressed by achieving a work-family balance and using fewer devices.

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