Proposal: suggestions for a better neighbourhood (C1,CAE)

You work for the local council. You have been asked to write a proposal, suggesting ways in which your neighbourhood could develop and be improved in order for it to be in an appropriate and good state for the next generation.

You should include ideas for:

Environmental issues.
Leisure.
Education.
Housing.

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(What could make it sound more natural? )

Suggestions for the improvement of the neighbourhood.

Introduction

There are facilities and services in the south distric of this town that need to be renovated in order to future generations be able to enjoy them. The most concerning ones are related to: environment, sports (as the most important leisure activity in either place), a proper place to study , and public housing.

Environmental issues

The public park in this area of the city is completely neglected by the town hall. As a result it is in a deplorable state of conservation, since it urgently need of cleaning and gardening works, as well as, planting local trees in those places most affected by the last summer drough.

Leisure facilities

Sports, especially football and basketball are the most demanding and popular leisure activities in our town. Nevertheless, our local teams lacks of a high quality facility where to train, far beyond the old, dirty and untidy sports field. Therefore, making this place back to what it was by keeping daily maintenance labours would encourage teenagers and youths to return to a more healthy way of spending their free time. Furthermore, I recommend to use the existing football field as a place also for playing basketball, and let the remaining space to built a tennis court.

Educative facilities

The local library have several rooms to be used by the students for differents group activities. These have no other use than being a storage for old-fashioned books, which could be sold in the next book fair.
Housing proposal
Since the start of the COVID-19 economical crisis there have been a worrying increase in the percentage of young people unemployed or underpaid in temporary jobs, so they currently have very little chance of becoming independent and self-sufficient people. For this reason, public economic helps, as well as, a fair price in social housing renting must be promoted from the town hall.

Conclusion

To conclude, works on the local park and the sport centre would improve our external image, since both facilities look like as abandoned. On the other hand, a better place to study and live would make life easier for teens and young people, respectively.

What could make it sound more natural?