Dec. 4, 2022
Please review my essay.
The diagram illustrates how paper is made and recycled in a manufacturing process.
Overall, there are three main stages in the process including seven small steps: first, transforming trees into logs, second, processing them into papers and finally, recycling the used papers.
The first stage involves trees being cut down into logs using a saw at a lumber mill. In the second stage, the logs are shipped to a pulping centre, where they are crushed into pulp. The pulp is then brought to a paper-making plant, in which it is passed through a paper press to be turned into paper. Turning to the third stage, after being used and discarded, the paper is transported to a recycling plant by a truck. Subsequently, it is shredded into small pieces by a machine, which are transformed into pulp. Finally, the pulp is brought back to the paper-making plant and processed into paper.
Overall, there are three main stages in the process including seven small steps: first, is transforming trees into logs, second, is processing them into papers and finally, recycling the used papers.
Subsequently, it is shredded into small pieces by a machine, which are then transformed into pulp.
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I think your English is close to perfect in this one as I can't find the original wording to be wrong. There are lots of commas, so my advice is to try to use them when necessary and if there is another sentence or a semicolon you can replace some of them with.
Dec. 4, 2022
Thank you very much.
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Please review my essay. |
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The diagram illustrates how paper is made and recycled in a manufacturing process. |
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Overall, there are three main stages in the process including seven small steps: first, transforming trees into logs, second, processing them into papers and finally, recycling the used papers. Overall, there are three main stages in the process including seven small steps: first |
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The first stage involves trees being cut down into logs using a saw at a lumber mill. |
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In the second stage, the logs are shipped to a pulping centre, where they are crushed into pulp. |
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The pulp is then brought to a paper-making plant, in which it is passed through a paper press to be turned into paper. |
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Turning to the third stage, after being used and discarded, the paper is transported to a recycling plant by a truck. |
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Subsequently, it is shredded into small pieces by a machine, which are transformed into pulp. Subsequently, it is shredded into small pieces by a machine, which are then transformed into pulp. |
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Finally, the pulp is brought back to the paper-making plant and processed into paper. |
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