May 11, 2020
Pencils or pens?
When I visited a high school in Australia, I found something different from Japan. The students were using pens, instead of pencils. In Japan, high school students use pencils that look like pens. We call them "sharp pencils". If you use a pencil, you can erase what you have written, but if you use a pen, you cannot. So I wondered why they were using pens. And I thought European or American high school students use pens too because Australians do.
Let me know what high school students in your countries use to write with!
When I visited a high school in Australia, I foundsaw something different from how things are in Japan.
The students were using pens, instead of pencils.
If you use a pencil, you can erase what you have written, but if you use a pen, you cannot.
And then I thought that European orand American high school students probably use pens too because they are similar to Australians do.
"Because Australians do" sounds a bit vague in this context; I don't know if the revision correctly conveys what you were trying to say.
Let me know what high school students in your countries use to write with!
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In America it depends on the age: younger students use pencils but older students use pens.
May 11, 2020
And then I thought that European orand American high school students probably use pens too because they are similar to Australians do.
Yes that's exactly what I meant.
May 11, 2020
I don't know which is better but that's interesting.
May 11, 2020
And thank you so much!
May 11, 2020
No problem! Your text was great!
Pencils or pens?
When I visited a high school in Australia, I founnoticed something different from Japan.
The students were using pens, instead of pencils.
In Japan, high school students use pencils that look like pens.
We call them "sharp pencils"."
If you use a pencil, you can erase what you have written, but if you use a pen, you cannot.
So I wondered why they were using pens.
And I thoughtI wondered if European or American high school students use pens too because Australians do.
"Because" is used when one thing is a reason for another. You could say, "Because Australia, Europe, and America are similar culturally, I wondered if European and American high school students use pens too." Or "Because I saw Australian students using pens, I wondered if European and American students use pens too."
Let me know what high school students in your countries use to write with!
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Nice entry! In my high school in America, some students used pens and others used pencils :)
May 11, 2020
Thank you for your corrections and letting me know about that!
When I visited a high school in Australia, I foundnoticed the students were doing something different from students in Japan.
The studentsy were using pens, instead of pencils.
If you use a pencil, you can erase what you have written, but if you use a pen, you cannot.
And I thoughtThen I wondered if European or American high school students use pens, too because Australians do.
This is simpler and I think it still makes your point.
Let me know what high school students in your countries use to write with!
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When I was in elementary school I used pencils. But I started using pens in junior high school.
May 11, 2020
That' interesting. We're not even allowed to use them in high school.(no one tries to use them)
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And I thought European or American high school students use pens too because Australians do.
This is simpler and I think it still makes your point.
"Because" is used when one thing is a reason for another. You could say, "Because Australia, Europe, and America are similar culturally, I wondered if European and American high school students use pens too." Or "Because I saw Australian students using pens, I wondered if European and American students use pens too." And then I thought that European "Because Australians do" sounds a bit vague in this context; I don't know if the revision correctly conveys what you were trying to say. |
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