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ponta

Oct. 31, 2020

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October 31st, 2020

Today, I went out with my three friends and enjoyed all day. The beginning was very early; I woke up at 4 AM and left my home 30 minutes later. I use a motorbike for transportation, so there were no cars at such an early time, then it was brisk for me to drive.
At first, we visited a fish market at 6 AM. We went to see the morning sun, and the seawater surface was fantastic and beautiful. After that, we enjoyed breakfast; we choose some kinds of fish and bought rice, and made an assorted seafood rice bowl. Of course, it was amazingly delicious.
Next, we went to Matsushima, where is said one of the three most scenic spots in Japan. Matsushima has a unique coastline with pine trees. We climbed a small mountain and the sightseeing was really nice from there. The road was along with the coast, so it was also pleasant to drive there.
Afterward, we enjoyed playing table tennis and eating lunch. It was surprising that it was still in the morning even we had done the activities. Today is the day that I realized "The early bird gets the worm".

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October 31st, 2020

Today, I went out with my three friends and enjoyed all daythe whole day with them.

The beginning was very early; I woke up at 4 AM and left my home 30 minutes later.

I use a motorbike for transportation, so t. There were no cars at such an early time, thenso it was brisquick for me to drive.

Instead of "so it was quick for me to drive" you could write "it was a brisk drive for me."

At fFirst, we visited a fish market at 6 AM.

We went to see the morning sun, and the seawater surface was fantastic and beautiful.

After that, we enjoyed breakfast; w. We choose somea few different kinds of fish and, bought rice, and made an assorted seafood rice bowl.

Next, we went to Matsushima, whereich is said one of the three most scenic spots in Japan.

Matsushima has a unique coastline with pine trees.

We climbed a small mountain, and the sightseeing was really nice from there.

The road was along with the coast, so it was also pleasant to drive there.

Afterward, we enjoyed playing table tennis and eating lunch.

It was surprising that it was still in the morning even we had done thall those activities.

Today is the day that I realized "The early bird gets the worm".

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Very well done!

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nsegal

Oct. 31, 2020

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Nice work! I'll do the second half in a moment. I'm being called away.

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ponta

Nov. 1, 2020

217

Thank you for your correction!

October 31st, 2020

Today, I went out with my three of my friends and enjoyed allthe day.

'my three friends' is a bit unnatural, because it sounds like you only have three friends.
You could also say 'I went out with three friends.'

The beginning wasWe started very early; I woke up at 4 AM and left my home 30 minutes later.

I used a motorbike for transportation, soince there were no cars at such an early time, then it was brisk for me to drive.

Not sure about what you mean by 'then it was brisk for me to drive.'

Did you mean (riding the motorbike) 'was faster than driving?'

At first, we visited a fish market at 6 AM.

We went to see the morning sun, and the seawater surface was fantastic and beautiful.

After that, we enjoyed breakfast; we choose somedifferent kinds of fish and bought rice, and made an assorted seafood rice bowl.

Of course, it was amazingly delicious.

Next, we went to Matsushima, whereich is said to be one of the three most scenic spots in Japan.

Matsushima has a unique coastline with pine trees.

We climbed a small mountain and the sightseeingview was really nice from there.

sightseeing is not usually used to describe the scenery.

The road was along with the coast, so it was also pleasant to drive there.

'The road ran along the cost' is also fine.

Afterward, we enjoyed playing table tennis and eating lunch.

It was surprising that it was still in the morning even after we had done the activities.

Today is the day that I realized "The early bird gets the worm".

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Good job! Sounds like you had a lovely day!

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ponta

Nov. 1, 2020

217

Thank you so much! I intended that riding the motorbike on a not busy road was feel good.

October 31st, 2020

Today, I went out with my three friends and enjoyed all day.

Today, I went out with my three friends and enjoyed all daythe whole day with them.

Today, I went out with my three of my friends and enjoyed allthe day.

The beginning was very early; I woke up at 4 AM and left my home 30 minutes later.

The beginning wasWe started very early; I woke up at 4 AM and left my home 30 minutes later.

I use a motorbike for transportation, so there were no cars at such an early time, then it was brisk for me to drive.

I use a motorbike for transportation, so t. There were no cars at such an early time, thenso it was brisquick for me to drive.

I used a motorbike for transportation, soince there were no cars at such an early time, then it was brisk for me to drive.

At first, we visited a fish market at 6 AM.

At fFirst, we visited a fish market at 6 AM.

We went to see the morning sun, and the seawater surface was fantastic and beautiful.

After that, we enjoyed breakfast; we choose some kinds of fish and bought rice, and made an assorted seafood rice bowl.

After that, we enjoyed breakfast; w. We choose somea few different kinds of fish and, bought rice, and made an assorted seafood rice bowl.

After that, we enjoyed breakfast; we choose somedifferent kinds of fish and bought rice, and made an assorted seafood rice bowl.

Of course, it was amazingly delicious.

Next, we went to Matsushima, where is said one of the three most scenic spots in Japan.

Next, we went to Matsushima, whereich is said one of the three most scenic spots in Japan.

Next, we went to Matsushima, whereich is said to be one of the three most scenic spots in Japan.

Matsushima has a unique coastline with pine trees.

We climbed a small mountain and the sightseeing was really nice from there.

We climbed a small mountain, and the sightseeing was really nice from there.

We climbed a small mountain and the sightseeingview was really nice from there.

The road was along with the coast, so it was also pleasant to drive there.

The road was along with the coast, so it was also pleasant to drive there.

Afterward, we enjoyed playing table tennis and eating lunch.

It was surprising that it was still in the morning even we had done the activities.

It was surprising that it was still in the morning even we had done thall those activities.

It was surprising that it was still in the morning even after we had done the activities.

Today is the day that I realized "The early bird gets the worm".

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