Oct. 31, 2021
Observation
Last Friday, I found that some students hadn't corrected the answer of Uint 2 exam. I was so angry that I punished them for copying 10 times and handed the copies to me on Sundy. Thus when I entered the classroom, I asked them for the copies. Without surprise, some of them didn't finish. I checked their exercise book in the following. Well, some didn't finish either. As a result, they were punished again. They became noisy, so I asked them to dictate words. Without doubt, no one did perfectly. They all were punished the third time.
In the second class, they were so noisy that the headmaster showed up and warned them to be quiet. Unfortunately, after the headmaster gone, they kept making noise. I told them that all of them should run 3 laps tomorrow. They became quiet for just a minute. Then I told them they need to run 5 laps. They finally became quiet.
Tonight, I laughed a lot in class, so they knew that I was happy. Then they tried to chat with me and others. Weeks ago, when I walked into the classroom without saying a word, they would be very quiet for that they knew I was in a bad mood. They knew they would be punished harsh by making any noise. In conclusion, they are quite good at observing now. Ms. Li said that the students have become smart after I told her the incident. I don't think, because if they were smart, they should have stopped making any noise when I told them to run 3 laps.
Observation
Last Friday, I found that some students hadn't corrected the answer of Uinthe unit 2 exam.
"uint" > unit
Is there really only one answer on an exam? As a reader, I expect there to be many answers (plural) that need to be corrected on an exam!
I was so angry that I punished them for copying 10 times and made them handed the copies to me on Sunday.
"to hand" requires a subject nearby. So this would also work "...and they handed the copies to me....", however, "...made them hand..." is more forceful and matches the punishing/angry tone of your action.
Thus when I entered the classroom, I asked them for the copies.
Without surprise, some of them didn't finish.
Next, I checked their exercise book in the following.
"In the following" must be followed by a noun and then another sentence. For example, "In the following sentence, I am a dog". This phrase cannot be placed at the end of a sentence.
Well, some didn't finish the exercise book either.
Optional. Helps clarify which assignment was not finished.
As a result, they were punished again.
They became noisy, so I asked them to dictate words.
Without doubt, no one did perfectly.
They all were punished thea third time.
"a" vs "the", though I don't know why this is the case!
In the second class, they were so noisy that the headmaster showed up and warned them to be quiet.
Unfortunately, after the headmaster goneleft, they kept making noise.
In most English dialects and writing, "Gone" is not a verb, but an adjective. For example "...after the headmaster was gone..." is ok.
When "gone" is used as a verb, it sounds informal and is distinctive of rural American dialects. For example, "I gone and done it again" meaning "I went and did it again".
I told them that all of them should run 3 laps tomorrow.
They became quiet for just a minute.
Then I told them they need to run 5 laps.
They finally became quiet.
Tonight, I laughed a lot in class, so they knew that I was happy.
Then they tried to chat with me and others.
Weeks ago, when I walked into the classroom without saying a word, they would be very quiet for thatbecause they knew I was in a bad mood.
Optional, "for that" is an old form that is not popularly used in most modern English dialects.
They knew they would be punished harshly by making any noise.
How were they punished? Harshly.
Harsh is a noun, harshly is an adjective.
In conclusion, they are quite good at observing now.
Ms. Li said that the students have become smart after I told her the incident.
I don't think that, because if they were smart, they should have stopped making any noise when I told them to run 3 laps.
"think" requires some kind of word/phrase to follow it. "I dont think" can only mean that you literally do not have any thoughts.
Another alternative: "I don't think so, because..." or "I don't think that they are smart, because..."
Feedback
Great essay and I could follow your story well! The corrections are minor and easy to overlook if I were reading for pleasure.
Nov. 1, 2021
Last Friday, I found that some students hadn't corrected the answer of Uinthe unit 2 exam.
"uint" > unit
Is there really only one answer on an exam? As a reader, I expect there to be many answers (plural) that need to be corrected on an exam!
It's my fault, there are many questions, so there are also many answers.
Nov. 1, 2021
Thanks a lot!
|
Observation |
|
Last Friday, I found that some students hadn't corrected the answer of Uint 2 exam. Last Friday, I found that some students hadn't corrected the answer of "uint" > unit
Is there really only one answer on an exam? As a reader, I expect there to be many answers (plural) that need to be corrected on an exam! |
|
I was so angry that I punished them for copying 10 times and handed the copies to me on Sundy. I was so angry that I punished them for copying 10 times and made them han "to hand" requires a subject nearby. So this would also work "...and they handed the copies to me....", however, "...made them hand..." is more forceful and matches the punishing/angry tone of your action.
|
|
Thus when I entered the classroom, I asked them for the copies. |
|
Without surprise, some of them didn't finish. |
|
I checked their exercise book in the following. Next, I checked their exercise book "In the following" must be followed by a noun and then another sentence. For example, "In the following sentence, I am a dog". This phrase cannot be placed at the end of a sentence.
|
|
Well, some didn't finish either. Well, some didn't finish the exercise book either. Optional. Helps clarify which assignment was not finished.
|
|
As a result, they were punished again. |
|
They became noisy, so I asked them to dictate words. |
|
Without doubt, no one did perfectly. |
|
They all were punished the third time. They all were punished "a" vs "the", though I don't know why this is the case!
|
|
In the second class, they were so noisy that the headmaster showed up and warned them to be quiet. |
|
Unfortunately, after the headmaster gone, they kept making noise. Unfortunately, after the headmaster In most English dialects and writing, "Gone" is not a verb, but an adjective. For example "...after the headmaster was gone..." is ok.
When "gone" is used as a verb, it sounds informal and is distinctive of rural American dialects. For example, "I gone and done it again" meaning "I went and did it again". |
|
I told them that all of them should run 3 laps tomorrow. |
|
They became quiet for just a minute. |
|
Then I told them they need to run 5 laps. |
|
They finally became quiet. |
|
Tonight, I laughed a lot in class, so they knew that I was happy. |
|
Then they tried to chat with me and others. |
|
Weeks ago, when I walked into the classroom without saying a word, they would be very quiet for that they knew I was in a bad mood. Weeks ago, when I walked into the classroom without saying a word, they would be very quiet Optional, "for that" is an old form that is not popularly used in most modern English dialects.
|
|
They knew they would be punished harsh by making any noise. They knew they would be punished harshly by making any noise. How were they punished? Harshly.
Harsh is a noun, harshly is an adjective. |
|
In conclusion, they are quite good at observing now. |
|
Ms. Li said that the students have become smart after I told her the incident. |
|
I don't think, because if they were smart, they should have stopped making any noise when I told them to run 3 laps. I don't think that, because if they were smart, they should have stopped making any noise when I told them to run 3 laps. "think" requires some kind of word/phrase to follow it. "I dont think" can only mean that you literally do not have any thoughts.
Another alternative: "I don't think so, because..." or "I don't think that they are smart, because..." |
You need LangCorrect Premium to access this feature.
Go Premium