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ismysecond

Dec. 4, 2020

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My songs, my life.

When I´m singing , my mind is in a new and happy world.

Music is for me a new life.

Several songs have important remembers .Each song had a part of my life. A song is a remember of people in a particular moment and my mind fly very fast . The years pass in seconds and the neurons dance free.

The day changes in a moment, my face has the eyes young and a big smile.

These songs are the paradise, my paradise , where I rest .

What a pity that this time is short.

Then come the reality.

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My songs, my life.

When I'm singing , , my mind is in a new and happy world.

Music is, for me , a new life.

Several songs have important remembers .memories. Each song hadolds a part of my life.

A song is a rememberory of people in a particular moment, and my mind fly ies very fast .quickly.

The yYears pass in seconds , and the neurons dance freely.

The day changes in a moment, and my face has the eyes young eyes and a big smile.

These songs are the paradise, my paradise , where I rest .

What a pity that this time is short.

Then come thes reality.

My sSongs, mMy lLife.

In English, the first letter of all verbs, adjetives, adverbs, pronouns, nouns, etc., are capitalized.

When I'm singing , my mind is in a newdifferent and happy world.

"New" technically isn't wrong but I wasn't sure what you meant by it, so I put different there instead in case that's what you meant to say.

Music is for me a gives me new life.

Several songs have important remembers .Each song I have strong memories with several songs, and each one hads a part of my life.

We don't really use "important" in that way.

A song is a rememberory of people in a particular moment and my mind fly very fast ies through them all quickly.

I wasn't really sure what you wanted to say in the last part, so I guessed.

The yYears pass in seconds , and the neurons dance freearound.

I think that this is more what you were trying to say.

The day changes in a moment, my face has the eyes young andview restored and my face with a big smile.

I wasn't really sure what the "eyes young" meant so I guessed.

These songs are the paradise, my paradise , where I rest .

What a pity that this time is short.

Then come thes reality.

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Great Job! Just a few corrections!

My songs, my life.

My sSongs, mMy lLife.

When I´m singing , my mind is in a new and happy world.

When I'm singing , , my mind is in a new and happy world.

When I'm singing , my mind is in a newdifferent and happy world.

Music is for me a new life.

Music is, for me , a new life.

Music is for me a gives me new life.

Several songs have important remembers .Each song had a part of my life.

Several songs have important remembers .memories. Each song hadolds a part of my life.

Several songs have important remembers .Each song I have strong memories with several songs, and each one hads a part of my life.

A song is a remember of people in a particular moment and my mind fly very fast .

A song is a rememberory of people in a particular moment, and my mind fly ies very fast .quickly.

A song is a rememberory of people in a particular moment and my mind fly very fast ies through them all quickly.

The years pass in seconds and the neurons dance free.

The yYears pass in seconds , and the neurons dance freely.

The yYears pass in seconds , and the neurons dance freearound.

The day changes in a moment, my face has the eyes young and a big smile.

The day changes in a moment, and my face has the eyes young eyes and a big smile.

The day changes in a moment, my face has the eyes young andview restored and my face with a big smile.

These songs are the paradise, my paradise , where I rest .

These songs are the paradise, my paradise , where I rest .

These songs are the paradise, my paradise , where I rest .

What a pity that this time is short.

Then come the reality.

Then come thes reality.

Then come thes reality.

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