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My friend

ponta 306 · May 6

Target Language - English

I'll try to introduce a friend of mine. He and I went to the same middle and high school. We became friends because we had been in the archery club for five years.
My impression of him is smart and diligent. He studied hard and now he's studying medicine at a university in our hometown. I think he will be a good doctor in the future. He liked world history, so I sometimes asked him how to study it, because I wasn't good at it. Instead, I taught him physics before an exam. He almost failed the previous physics test, but he got a better score than me after my lesson.
His favorites are star wars, baseball, and comedy. He often joked, and it was boring but funny on the contrary.
One of the best memories with him is that we talked over and stayed up all night, when we went to an away game of archery. The next day, we were drowsy, and almost fell to sleep while the waiting time.


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heyitssharon 0 May 6, 2021
My friend
I'll try to introduce a friend of mine.

I'll try to introduce a friend of mine.

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You can also say "I would like to introduce a friend of mine"
He and I went to the same middle and high school.
We became friends because we had been in the archery club for five years.
My impression of him is smart and diligent.

My impression of him is that he is smart and diligent.

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My impression of him is smart and diligent. >> here the adjectives "smart" and "diligent" refers to your impression. You'll need to add "is that he..." so that you refer your adjectives back to the subject.

My impression of him is favorable. This is correct because favorable refers to impression (favorable / good impression)
He studied hard and now he's studying medicine at a university in our hometown.
I think he will be a good doctor in the future.
He liked world history, so I sometimes asked him how to study it, because I wasn't good at it.
Instead, I taught him physics before an exam.

InsteadConversely, I taught him physics before an exam.

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"Conversely" is used to show a contrast

"Instead" is for when you are referring to an alternative option.
He didn’t buy a book. Instead, he bought a toy.
He almost failed the previous physics test, but he got a better score than me after my lesson.
His favorites are star wars, baseball, and comedy.

His favorites are star wars, baseball, and comedy.

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"favorite" can be adjective or noun.
As adjective: His favorite movie is Star Wars.
As noun: He likes to watch movies. His favorite is Star Wars. / Star Wars is his favorite.

When favorite is used in plural form (favorites)
Noun: His favorites are Star Wars and Harry Potter. / Star Wars and Harry Potter are his favorites.

However, "favorites are..." is used when referring to things in the same category (as seen above sentence).
Bill Gates tries to read 50 books a year – his favorites are non-fiction titles around public health, disease, engineering, business, and science.

So for your sentence I would instead say;
His interests are Star Wars, baseball, and comedy.
He often joked, and it was boring but funny on the contrary.

He often joked, and it was boring but funny on the contraralso funny.

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One of the best memories with him is that we talked over and stayed up all night, when we went to an away game of archery.

One of the best memories with him is thatwas when we talked things over and stayed up all night, when we went to an awayre away for a game of archery.

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talk sth over = to discuss a problem or situation with someone, often to find out their opinion or to get advice before making a decision about it
The next day, we were drowsy, and almost fell to sleep while the waiting time.

The next day, we were drowsy, and almost fell to asleep whileduring the waiting time.

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