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So I read a story lately that was titled "Take your lumps". They said it was a Japanese tale, but clearly it was a very modern adaptation, a mostly comic one. I liked it a lot and laughed my head off.
The story is about a man who was born with a zit on his face, nothing bad at first. But as the years passed, the zit became a mole, grew up again and became a lump. So this man had a big lump on his left cheek. He felt that all everyone sees about him is the lump. Maybe it's true, maybe not. The story says he got married and had a son. But as he felt disfigured, he began to avoid people. So he became a woodcutter. All day he is in the woods. He only comes back when everyone else is sleeping. As he's a hard worker, people think well of him. He's the honest, hard-working woodcutter.
Then one day he met oni (I think they're Japanese spirits) who came to have a party in the woods and he knows they are going to kill him. How he regrets, then, not having had any fun in his life ! He despairs so much, he has a sort of breakdown and join the oni in their dancing. And he dances so well, so energetically that the oni spare him and take his lump. Later, a jealous man who also had a lump will be trying the same thing but come back with two lumps.
I'm pretty sure I read that tale in French years ago in my Collection of Occitanies Tales. It was supposed to be a really old french story. In my version, the hero was a hunchback - which made more sense to me - but he also danced all night with the faes.
The morale, of course, is that things could always be worse and that you should appreciate what you have, tomorrow it could be too late...

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Korossol into the Ring 27

So I recently read a story lately that was titled "Take yYour lLumps".

In English, the names of proper nouns have the first letter of all nouns, verbs, adjetives, adverbs, etc., within them capitalized.

They said it was a Japanese tale, but clearly it was a very modern adaptation, a mostly comic onend it was very humorous.

I liked it a lot and laughed my head off.

The story is about a man who was born with a zit on his face, but nothing really bad at first.

But as the years passed, the zit became a mole, grew up again andcontinued to grow, and eventually became a lump.

So this man had a big lump on his left cheek.

He felt that all everanyone seesnoticed about him iwas the lump.

Maybe it's true, maybe not.

The story says he got married and had a son.

But as he felt disfigured, he began to avoid people.

So he became a woodcutter.

All day he iHe was in the woods all day.

He only coames back when everyone else iwas sleeping.

As he' was a hard worker, people thinkought well of him.

He' was the honest, hard-working woodcutter.

Then one day he met some oni (I think they're Japanese spirits) who cahad come to have a party in the woods and he knowsew that they awere going to kill him.

How he regretsted, then, not having had any fun in his life !

He despairsed so much, that he hasd a sort of breakdown and joined the oni in their dancing.

And he dancesd so well, so energetically, that the oni spared him and takeook his lump.

Later, a jealous man who also had a lump will be tryingtried the same thing, but coame back with two lumps.

I'm pretty sure I read that tale in French years ago in my "Collection of Occitanies Tales".

It was supposed to be a really old fFrench story.

In my version, the hero was a hunchback - which made more sense to me - but he also danced all night with the faes.

I don't know what "faes" is.

The morale, of course, is that things could always be worse and that you should appreciate what you have, as tomorrow it could be too late...

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Korossol into the Ring 27

So I read a story lately that was titled "Take your lumps".

So I recently read a story lately that was titled "Take yYour lLumps".

They said it was a Japanese tale, but clearly it was a very modern adaptation, a mostly comic one.

They said it was a Japanese tale, but clearly it was a very modern adaptation, a mostly comic onend it was very humorous.

I liked it a lot and laughed my head off.

The story is about a man who was born with a zit on his face, nothing bad at first.

The story is about a man who was born with a zit on his face, but nothing really bad at first.

But as the years passed, the zit became a mole, grew up again and became a lump.

But as the years passed, the zit became a mole, grew up again andcontinued to grow, and eventually became a lump.

So this man had a big lump on his left cheek.

He felt that all everyone sees about him is the lump.

He felt that all everanyone seesnoticed about him iwas the lump.

Maybe it's true, maybe not.

The story says he got married and had a son.

But as he felt disfigured, he began to avoid people.

So he became a woodcutter.

All day he is in the woods.

All day he iHe was in the woods all day.

He only comes back when everyone else is sleeping.

He only coames back when everyone else iwas sleeping.

As he's a hard worker, people think well of him.

As he' was a hard worker, people thinkought well of him.

He's the honest, hard-working woodcutter.

He' was the honest, hard-working woodcutter.

Then one day he met oni (I think they're Japanese spirits) who came to have a party in the woods and he knows they are going to kill him.

Then one day he met some oni (I think they're Japanese spirits) who cahad come to have a party in the woods and he knowsew that they awere going to kill him.

How he regrets, then, not having had any fun in his life !

How he regretsted, then, not having had any fun in his life !

He despairs so much, he has a sort of breakdown and join the oni in their dancing.

He despairsed so much, that he hasd a sort of breakdown and joined the oni in their dancing.

And he dances so well, so energetically that the oni spare him and take his lump.

And he dancesd so well, so energetically, that the oni spared him and takeook his lump.

Later, a jealous man who also had a lump will be trying the same thing but come back with two lumps.

Later, a jealous man who also had a lump will be tryingtried the same thing, but coame back with two lumps.

I'm pretty sure I read that tale in French years ago in my Collection of Occitanies Tales.

I'm pretty sure I read that tale in French years ago in my "Collection of Occitanies Tales".

It was supposed to be a really old french story.

It was supposed to be a really old fFrench story.

In my version, the hero was a hunchback - which made more sense to me - but he also danced all night with the faes.

In my version, the hero was a hunchback - which made more sense to me - but he also danced all night with the faes.

The morale, of course, is that things could always be worse and that you should appreciate what you have, tomorrow it could be too late...

The morale, of course, is that things could always be worse and that you should appreciate what you have, as tomorrow it could be too late...

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