Dec. 5, 2020
Journal 12/5/20
Our daily work is: going to work at 8 am and getting off work at 11:30 am; going to work at 2:30 pm and getting off work at 5:30 pm. Apart from this, we get two days off once a week. Even during work time, there is not necessarily a job to do. In China, when people get a job funded by government finance, they all worked this way years to years until they retired. After getting a similar job, people usually don't study hard or stop learning because they have gotten a life long career-the job will support them for the rest of their lives. Thus, many people hang out with friends, playing cards, chatting and drinking as long as they have time. But this kind of life I hate the most. I can't get joy from it. I still want to do meaningful things, for example, making money, learning and so on. I think life is too short to waste, we should do meaningful things as much as possible, and only by doing so won't we regret our lives when we leave the world.
Apart from this, we get two days off once aeach week.
The original "two days off once a week" makes sense, but "each week" is more natural.
Even during work timethe workday, there is not necessarily a jobwork to do.
You could also say, "Even during working hours, there is not..." But "workday" sounds more natural.
In China, when people get a job funded by the government finance, they all worked this way for years toand years until they retired.
AfterWhen getting a similarsuch a job, people usually don't study hard orand stop learning because they have gotten a life long career-t. The job will support them for the rest of their lives.
But thisI hate that kind of life I hate the most.
Since hate is already a strong word, you don't need "the most."
I can't getfind joy fromin it.
I think life is too short to waste, we should do meaningful things as much as possible, and o. Only by doing so won't we regreill we have no regrets about our lives when we leave theis world.
Please forgive me for making this two sentences. I am a professional editor, I can't help it :)
I also changed "leave the world" to "leave this world" because, for some reason, when people talk about death, they talk about it with "this world" rather than "the world."
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Journal 12/5/20 |
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Our daily work is: going to work at 8 am and getting off work at 11:30 am; going to work at 2:30 pm and getting off work at 5:30 pm. |
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Apart from this, we get two days off once a week. Apart from this, we get two days off The original "two days off once a week" makes sense, but "each week" is more natural.
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Even during work time, there is not necessarily a job to do. Even during You could also say, "Even during working hours, there is not..." But "workday" sounds more natural.
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In China, when people get a job funded by government finance, they all worked this way years to years until they retired. In China, when people get a job funded by the government |
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After getting a similar job, people usually don't study hard or stop learning because they have gotten a life long career-the job will support them for the rest of their lives.
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Thus, many people hang out with friends, playing cards, chatting and drinking as long as they have time. |
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But this kind of life I hate the most. But Since hate is already a strong word, you don't need "the most."
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I can't get joy from it. I can't |
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I still want to do meaningful things, for example, making money, learning and so on. |
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I think life is too short to waste, we should do meaningful things as much as possible, and only by doing so won't we regret our lives when we leave the world. I think life is too short to waste, we should do meaningful things as much as possible Please forgive me for making this two sentences. I am a professional editor, I can't help it :)
I also changed "leave the world" to "leave this world" because, for some reason, when people talk about death, they talk about it with "this world" rather than "the world." |
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