Aug. 25, 2021
Is Facebook make people happy?
I just met someone in the class. Then, they suddenly asked me if I have a Facebook account. How many times I said that I don't have it. To be honest, I do not like SNS.
Some people are addict to type stories about their daily lives in Facebook. There is no hesitation to post their families' faces and private pictures. In fact, they are really satisfied with it. Why does this phenomenon occur in modern society in the world? What are those people chasing? When they show off their deluxe and gorgeous honeymoon pictures in a public, they would be under illusion and might think they are celebrities. I think they want to get social approval from many people. Scary thing is that some robberies broke houses because owners' of houses showed too much information of their houses go through SNS without any thought of risks.
In the contrast, my father and younger brother are concentrate to hide private. For example, my father really doesn't want to invite anyone in his house except our relatives in order to conceal inside of the house. When my brother go out from the house, he will check if anyone walk in front of the house. In case, there are people around there, he will wait until they will disappear. I think that are too much careful and unusual.
Is Facebook makeing people happy?
I just met someone in the class.
Then, they suddenly asked me if I have a Facebook account.
How manyThis is not the first times I've said that I don't have itone.
Phrasing a bit awkward.
To be honest, I do not like SNS.
Some people are addicted to typeposting stories about their daily lives ion Facebook.
There is no hesitation to post their families' faces and private pictures.
Alt: There is no hesitation to post their families' faces, as well as private pictures.
In fact, they areseem really satisfied with it.
Why does this phenomenon occur in modern society in the world?
A bit repetitive, just modern society OR the world is fine.
What are those people chasing?
When they show off their deluxe and gorgeous honeymoon pictures in a public space, they would bare under the illusion and might thinkthat they are celebrities.
I get what you're trying to say, but people don't really describe honeymoon with deluxe. "Luxurious" is a better word choice.
I think they want to get social approval from many people.
SThe scary thing is that, some robberies broke houses because owners' of housetook place because the victims showed too much information ofabout their houses go through SNS without any thought ofposts. They were posting without thinking of the risks.
Too much info going on, making it a run-on sentence. I separated it into two.
In the contrast, my father and younger brother are concentraboth committed to hidestaying private.
For example, my father really doesn't want to invite anyone into his house except for our relatives in order to conceal inside of the house.
The previous sentence just talked about your father's commitment to staying private, so "in order to conceal inside of the house" is redundant.
When my brother goes out from the house, he will, he checks if anyone walk in front of the houseis nearby.
In case,f there are people around there, he will waits until they will disappear before leaving the house.
That said, I think thatey are too much careful andbeing too careful and their behavior are a little unusual.
Aug. 26, 2021
Thank you so much for your correction. How are you, kidneyprivilege? Your correction pointed my weak points of English and described me to easy to understand. I will try to use "as well as" in my future's writing. I hope you are having nice summer days!!
Aug. 26, 2021
No problem! Glad to help. I'm doing pretty good, hope you are too!
IDoes Facebook mMake pPeople hHappy?
"Is" is a to-be verb, like ある. "Does" is to actively do, like してる.
In English, the words making up a title should be capitalized except for words such as a, for, so, etc.
How many times have I said that I don't have it.?
"Have" is needed here to form the present perfect tense.
Some people are addicted to typeing stories about their daily lives ion Facebook.
Addict is a noun, addicted is an adjective. Since "are" is used earlier in the sentence, "to type" needs to be "typing." (Some people are to type vs. Some people are typing)
"Some people are addicts, typing stories about their daily lives on Facebook," could also work here depending on if you wanted to say the people are addicts instead.
Why does this phenomenon occur in modern society in the world?
Adding "in the world" isn't necessary and sounds somewhat confusing.
When they show off their deluxe and gorgeous honeymoon pictures in a public, they wouldmay be under the illusion and might thinkthat they are celebrities.
"Public" doesn't need "a" in this instance. If you were describing a public bath or a public bus, then using a before public is appropriate. "Would" as you have used it carries a high degree of certainty with it, "may" is the better choice here as you are supposing why they might be posting photos. In order to be "under the illusion," you need to say what they are under the illusion of, in this case being celebrities.
SThe scary thing is that some robberies brokes have broken into houses because owners' of housef the owners showeding too much information of their houses go throughn SNS without any thought of the risks.
Robberies are when theft has taken place, robbers are people who commit theft. I'm using present perfect tense again to describe an event that has and continues to happen for "robbers have broken." Since the topic of the sentence is houses, you don't need to specify what the owners own or what the information is about as it is implied by the rest of the sentence.
In the contrast, my father and younger brother are concentrate to hided on being private.
I think a more natural sentence would be, "In contrast, my father and younger brother are focused on privacy." However, the wording you've chosen works well and conveys the same point.
For example, my father really doesn't want to invite anyone inside his house, except our relatives, in order to conceal the inside of the house.
When my brother go out from the house, he willleaves, he checks if anyone walks in front of the house.
In English we try to avoid repetition where possible. While "When my brother leaves the house," is grammatically correct, stylistically it is a little clunky. "When my brother leaves," is still correct and is more natural.
In case, there are people around there, he will wait until they will disappear.
I think that they are too much careful and unusual.
"Too" already carries the meaning of more or much, so "much" isn't necessary here.
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Great entry overall! I would consider learning some more synonyms when you notice yourself using the same word a lot, such as home instead of house. Some corrections I wasn't sure what grammar point I was correcting, but if you have any questions about why I corrected something in a certain way let me know and I'll try to figure it out for you.
Aug. 26, 2021
Hello, Morgan. Thank you so much for your correction. Your explanation are very good. Now I understand when I can use "would". You corrected some sentences I typed from the past tense to present perfect tense. That is my question. Sometimes I used present tense, then those were corrected to the past tense. So I totally confused which sentences I can use the past tense. I have known that the end of sentences have "since" or " for 5 years ( specific number)" , I need to use present tense. Without those ending, I can't figure out when I should use present tense. If you can explain about this, I really appreciate it.
Aug. 26, 2021
Grammarly says, "The present perfect tense refers to an action or state that either occurred at an indefinite time in the past (e.g., we have talked before) or began in the past and continued to the present time (e.g., he has grown impatient over the last hour). This tense is formed by have/has + the past participle."
And Wikipedia says, "The present perfect is a grammatical combination of the present tense and perfect aspect that is used to express a past event that has present consequences. The term is used particularly in the context of English grammar to refer to forms like "I have finished."
In other words, you use it when you need to convey that some aspect of a past action is still taking place or having affect.
For example, "I walked the dog," means you have completed the action of walking the dog and it no longer has an impact on what you will be doing. This is an instance where past tense is correct, you don't need to add "have" because the action is fully complete.
However, say you want to apply for a position at an animal shelter, you may say, "I have walked dogs before." While in both instances walking the dog happened in the past, in the second example the action still has an impact on what you are currently doing. This means you need to use present perfect tense, "have walked."
More Examples:
PT: I applied to jobs. (The action of applying was done)
PPT: I have applied to jobs. (You've applied to jobs, but maybe haven't been hired yet).
PT: I raised cows. (The action of raising cows was done)
PPT: I have raised cows. (You've raised cows until this point or before, now you are ready to sell them or apply your experience to raising more cows.)
I hope this helped some!
Aug. 26, 2021
Hello, Morgan. I am impressed your great explanation to my question. Many thank you to take a time for me. I think I understand mostly. I am going to read it again and again. You help me a lot. Thank you and have a good night!!!
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Is Facebook make people happy? Is Facebook mak
"Is" is a to-be verb, like ある. "Does" is to actively do, like してる.
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Then, they suddenly asked me if I have a Facebook account. |
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How many times I said that I don't have it.
Phrasing a bit awkward.
How many times have I said that I don't have it "Have" is needed here to form the present perfect tense.
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To be honest, I do not like SNS. |
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Some people are addict to type stories about their daily lives in Facebook. Some people are addicted to Some people are addicted to typ Addict is a noun, addicted is an adjective. Since "are" is used earlier in the sentence, "to type" needs to be "typing." (Some people are to type vs. Some people are typing)
"Some people are addicts, typing stories about their daily lives on Facebook," could also work here depending on if you wanted to say the people are addicts instead. |
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There is no hesitation to post their families' faces and private pictures. There is no hesitation to post their families' faces and private pictures. Alt: There is no hesitation to post their families' faces, as well as private pictures.
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In fact, they are really satisfied with it. In fact, they |
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Why does this phenomenon occur in modern society in the world? Why does this phenomenon occur in modern society A bit repetitive, just modern society OR the world is fine.
Why does this phenomenon occur in modern society Adding "in the world" isn't necessary and sounds somewhat confusing.
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When they show off their deluxe and gorgeous honeymoon pictures in a public, they would be under illusion and might think they are celebrities. When they show off their I get what you're trying to say, but people don't really describe honeymoon with deluxe. "Luxurious" is a better word choice.
When they show off their deluxe and gorgeous honeymoon pictures in "Public" doesn't need "a" in this instance. If you were describing a public bath or a public bus, then using a before public is appropriate. "Would" as you have used it carries a high degree of certainty with it, "may" is the better choice here as you are supposing why they might be posting photos. In order to be "under the illusion," you need to say what they are under the illusion of, in this case being celebrities.
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I think they want to get social approval from many people. |
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Scary thing is that some robberies broke houses because owners' of houses showed too much information of their houses go through SNS without any thought of risks.
Too much info going on, making it a run-on sentence. I separated it into two.
Robberies are when theft has taken place, robbers are people who commit theft. I'm using present perfect tense again to describe an event that has and continues to happen for "robbers have broken." Since the topic of the sentence is houses, you don't need to specify what the owners own or what the information is about as it is implied by the rest of the sentence.
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In the contrast, my father and younger brother are concentrate to hide private. In In I think a more natural sentence would be, "In contrast, my father and younger brother are focused on privacy." However, the wording you've chosen works well and conveys the same point.
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For example, my father really doesn't want to invite anyone in his house except our relatives in order to conceal inside of the house. For example, my father The previous sentence just talked about your father's commitment to staying private, so "in order to conceal inside of the house" is redundant.
For example, my father really doesn't want to invite anyone inside his house, except our relatives, in order to conceal the inside of the house. |
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When my brother go out from the house, he will check if anyone walk in front of the house. When my brother goes out When my brother In English we try to avoid repetition where possible. While "When my brother leaves the house," is grammatically correct, stylistically it is a little clunky. "When my brother leaves," is still correct and is more natural.
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In case, there are people around there, he will wait until they will disappear. I In case |
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I think that are too much careful and unusual. That said, I think th I think that they are too "Too" already carries the meaning of more or much, so "much" isn't necessary here.
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