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Sept. 26, 2021

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I'm Sleepy

Today, I stayed up all night and have been awake over around clock. Now, I can't think straight. I'm almost falling asleep so that I fainted for a while while I was sitting. I have to go to bed soon, and I bet I will sleep over twelve hours.

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I'm Sleepy

Today, I stayed up all night last night and have been awake over around clocksince.

Now, I can't think straight.

I'm almost falling asleep soso tired that I fainted for a while while I was sitting.

I have to go to bed soon, and I bet I will sleep over twelve hours.

I'm Sleepy

Today, I stayed up all night and have been awake over around clock.

Today, I stayed up all night and have been awake over around the clock.

I understand what you're trying to say here, but the phrase "around the clock" doesn't work well with the verb "awake". It's meant more for activity verbs like "working around the clock" "studying around the clock".

Now, I can't think straight.

Now, I can't think straight.

No comma needed

I'm almost falling asleep so that I fainted for a while while I was sitting.

I'm almost falling asleep so that I fainted, I even nodded off for a while while I was sitting.

Fainting is a bit too strong of a verb here. "Nodding off" is a better suited, where someone is accidentally sleeping for a few seconds-minutes

I have to go to bed soon, and I bet I will sleep over twelve hours.

I have to go to bed soon, and I bet I will sleep over twelve hours.

No need for "and" here.

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Great job, I like how you tried to use an English idiom and expressive two-clause sentences. Keep it up!

I'm Sleepy

Today, I stayed up all night and have been awake over around clock.

Today, I stayed up all night last night and have been awake over around clocksince.

Today, I stayed up all night and have been awake over around the clock.

Now, I can't think straight.

Now, I can't think straight.

I'm almost falling asleep so that I fainted for a while while I was sitting.

I'm almost falling asleep soso tired that I fainted for a while while I was sitting.

I'm almost falling asleep so that I fainted, I even nodded off for a while while I was sitting.

I have to go to bed soon, and I bet I will sleep over twelve hours.

I have to go to bed soon, and I bet I will sleep over twelve hours.

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