March 26, 2021
I Can't Bear It Anymore (pt.2)
It is already the second day in a row that my roommates told me that they want to boycott foreign clothing and only support national products. This article is a follow-up to the Xinjiang Cotton. Besides being disgusted that the press is not free, I'm also sick of the damn boycott. I hate this top-down call to boycott products. I'm a Gen-Z, and I've experienced countless boycotts in China when I grow up. I am no longer willing to support the boycott as mindlessly as I used to. My first memory of boycotting was safeguarding the Diaoyu Islands, and that was the only time I ever saw a street march in China. After that, people take it as a "good" example of the "freedom to march". Then there was a boycott of Korean products. Korean music was taken down from all Chinese music apps, and Korean stores were closed, including Korean BBQ restaurants. I don't know when the ban was lifted again. Then the boycott of Japanese goods. Even some people went to smash Japanese brand cars. The most recent one was the boycott of the NBA because of the Rockets' pro-HK comments. This year the ban of the NBA was removed. I used to think that following the officials represented justice, but now I don't want to be a puppet. Many of the production lines of the boycotted products are in China, and boycotting these products is in a sense destroying our own jobs. It's a meaningless protest.
This time, already many stars have taken a stand to lift their endorsements. But there is no clear official statement to boycott those foreign clothes. I believe they dare not. For example, many national team athletes are sponsored by Nike, Adidas, etc. A full boycott of these foreign apparel would also be tantamount to a kind of shutdown. I watched the CCTV News on the bus today and it kept playing the stunt that H&M is "Huang Miu (ridiculous)". What's really ridiculous? This morning a review of Chinese Cotton was 404'd. What sensitive words were involved in this article? No, simply a combination of multiple articles analyzing the cotton situation in Xinjiang. Thousands of articles have been removed for inexplicable reasons. Where there have been no cases of outbreaks for months yet masks are mandatory on public transportation. Universities are still lockdown, with only one door open after 7pm. The door closest to the dorm was closed. Going back to school tonight was the 3rd time I've jumped off a fence at one person's height. I guess that's what's really ridiculous.
This article is a follow-up to the Xinjiang Cotton.
Besides being disgusted that the press is not free, I'm also sick of the damn boycott.
I hate this top-down call to boycott products.
I'm a Gen-Z, and I've experienced countless boycotts in China when Iile growing up.
"when I grow up" is a statement of something that will take place, not a situation in the past.
I am no longer willing to support the boycott as mindlessly as I used to.
My first memory of boycotting was safeguarding the Diaoyu Islands, and that was the only time I ever saw a street march in China.
After that, people takeook it as a "good" example of the "freedom to march".
Then there was a boycott of Korean products.
Korean music was taken down from all Chinese music apps, and Korean stores were closed, including Korean BBQ restaurants.
I don't know when the ban was lifted again.
"Again" is incorrect here, because the ban was only lifted once.
Then it was the boycott of Japanese goods.
Even sSome people went toeven smashed Japanese brand cars.
"went to smash" is not grammatically incorrect, but it is awkward.
The most recent one was the boycott was of the NBA, because of the Rockets' pro-HK comments.
The use of "one" is ambiguous.
This year the ban of the NBANBA ban was removed.
I used to think that following the officials represented justice, but now I don't want to be a puppet.
Many of the production lines of the boycotted products are in China, and boycotting these products is in a sense destroying our own jobs.
It's a meaningless protest.
This time, already many stars have already taken a stand to liftmake their endorsements.
But there is no clear official statement to boycott those foreign clothes.
I believe they dare not.
For example, many national team athletes are sponsored by Nike, Adidas, etc.
A full boycott of theseis foreign apparel would also be tantamount to a kind of shutdown.
"apparel" is singular.
I watched the CCTV News on the bus today and it kept playing the stuntjoke that H&M is "Huang Miu" (ridiculous)".
"stunt" is not the correct word. I'm not sure what you are trying to say so I suggest the word "joke" which makes more sense in this case.
What's really ridiculous?
This morning a review of Chinese Cotton was 404'd.
What sensitive words were involvused in this article?
The word "involved" implies action on the part of the object, in this case, the words. But words are not capable of their own action. The word "used" puts the action on the author of the article.
No, it was simply a combination of multiple articles analyzing the cotton situation in Xinjiang.
As written, it was a phrase, not a complete sentence. It lacked both a subject and a verb.
Thousands of articles have been removed for inexplicable reasons.
Where tThere have been no cases of outbreaks for months, yet masks are mandatory on public transportation.
The word "where" seeks to connect this sentence to the previous narrative, but there is no connection, because this sentence does not discuss the aforementioned articles that have been removed from the internet.
Universities are still in lockdown, with only one door open after 7pm.
The door closest to the dorm wais closed.
The previous sentence is in present tense, this sentence must also be in present tense for consistency.
Going back to school tonight was the 3rd time I've jumped off a fence at one person's height, I jumped off a person-height fence for the third time.
Numbers under 10 are written in English as whole words, unless they are in headlines and titles. The sentence was not incorrect but was very awkward.
I guess that's what's really ridiculous.
Feedback
Overall, the essay does not stay on topic. Beginning with "There have been no cases of outbreaks", the essay seems to be a collection of unrelated topics. When writing, it's best to keep a consistent topic. If you have to change topics, you should create some sort of transition that connects the topics together in some way.
March 27, 2021
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I Can't Bear It Anymore (pt.2) |
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It is already the second day in a row that my roommates told me that they want to boycott foreign clothing and only support national products. |
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This article is a follow-up to the Xinjiang Cotton. This article is a follow-up to |
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Besides being disgusted that the press is not free, I'm also sick of the damn boycott. |
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I hate this top-down call to boycott products. |
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I'm a Gen-Z, and I've experienced countless boycotts in China when I grow up. I'm a Gen-Z, and I've experienced countless boycotts in China wh "when I grow up" is a statement of something that will take place, not a situation in the past.
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I am no longer willing to support the boycott as mindlessly as I used to. |
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My first memory of boycotting was safeguarding the Diaoyu Islands, and that was the only time I ever saw a street march in China. |
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After that, people take it as a "good" example of the "freedom to march". After that, people t |
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Then there was a boycott of Korean products. |
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Korean music was taken down from all Chinese music apps, and Korean stores were closed, including Korean BBQ restaurants. |
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I don't know when the ban was lifted again. I don't know when the ban was lifted "Again" is incorrect here, because the ban was only lifted once.
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Then the boycott of Japanese goods. Then it was the boycott of Japanese goods. |
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Even some people went to smash Japanese brand cars.
"went to smash" is not grammatically incorrect, but it is awkward.
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The most recent one was the boycott of the NBA because of the Rockets' pro-HK comments. The most recent The use of "one" is ambiguous.
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This year the ban of the NBA was removed. This year the |
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I used to think that following the officials represented justice, but now I don't want to be a puppet. I used to think that following |
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Many of the production lines of the boycotted products are in China, and boycotting these products is in a sense destroying our own jobs. Many |
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It's a meaningless protest. |
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This time, already many stars have taken a stand to lift their endorsements. This time, |
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But there is no clear official statement to boycott those foreign clothes. |
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I believe they dare not. |
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For example, many national team athletes are sponsored by Nike, Adidas, etc. |
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A full boycott of these foreign apparel would also be tantamount to a kind of shutdown. A full boycott of th "apparel" is singular.
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I watched the CCTV News on the bus today and it kept playing the stunt that H&M is "Huang Miu (ridiculous)". I watched the CCTV News on the bus today and it kept playing the "stunt" is not the correct word. I'm not sure what you are trying to say so I suggest the word "joke" which makes more sense in this case.
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What's really ridiculous? |
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This morning a review of Chinese Cotton was 404'd. |
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What sensitive words were involved in this article? What sensitive words were The word "involved" implies action on the part of the object, in this case, the words. But words are not capable of their own action. The word "used" puts the action on the author of the article.
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No, simply a combination of multiple articles analyzing the cotton situation in Xinjiang. No, it was simply a combination of multiple articles analyzing the cotton situation in Xinjiang. As written, it was a phrase, not a complete sentence. It lacked both a subject and a verb.
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Thousands of articles have been removed for inexplicable reasons. |
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Where there have been no cases of outbreaks for months yet masks are mandatory on public transportation.
The word "where" seeks to connect this sentence to the previous narrative, but there is no connection, because this sentence does not discuss the aforementioned articles that have been removed from the internet.
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Universities are still lockdown, with only one door open after 7pm. Universities are still in lockdown, with only one door open after 7pm. |
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The door closest to the dorm was closed. The door closest to the dorm The previous sentence is in present tense, this sentence must also be in present tense for consistency.
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Going back to school tonight was the 3rd time I've jumped off a fence at one person's height. Going back to school tonight Numbers under 10 are written in English as whole words, unless they are in headlines and titles. The sentence was not incorrect but was very awkward.
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I guess that's what's really ridiculous. |
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