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May 14

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How do you know that you were not a rabbit in your last life

How do you know that you were not a rabbit in your last life? Do you know what the rabbits are thinking when they eat grass? Do you think I must be crazy if I say that it is not only humans who can think about the universe and there is a crazy, eccentric little bunny who has fun from daily dressing and playing various roles?? He has recorded365 costumes in his lifetime, from crying to violent rage, he doesn't care whether his adrenaline will kill him, he has to realize his dreams - ROLE PLAYING DREAMS!

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    May 16, 2022, 5:16 a.m.
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    Do you think I amust be crazy if I say that it is not only humans who can think about the universe and there is a crazy, eccentric little bunny who has fun from daily dressing and playing various roles??
    I am not sure what you mean by "daily dressing"
    Do you mean "who has fun by dressing up and playing various roles"

    Haha - yes that's exactly what I meant. : -))

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    May 16, 2022, 5:17 a.m.

    Thank you so much! : -DD

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    May 16, 2022, 5:17 a.m.
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    He has recordedworn 365 costumes in his lifetime, from crying to violent rage,; he doesn't care whether his adrenaline will kill him, he has to realize his dreams - ROLE PLAYING DREAMS!
    recorded not used here
    adrenaline in general, it's a bit weird to specify "his" adrenaline

    Thank you! :-)))

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How do you know that you were not a rabbit in your last life?

How do you know that you were not a rabbit in your lpast/previous life?

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Do you know what the rabbits are thinking when they eat grass?

Do you know what the rabbits are thinking when they eat grass?

"the" implies you are talking about specific rabbits

Do you know what the rabbits are thinking when they eat grass?

"the rabbits" isn't incorrect but you don't need "the" in this case as it is implying rabbits in general and not a certain group.

Do you think I must be crazy if I say that it is not only humans who can think about the universe and there is a crazy, eccentric little bunny who has fun from daily dressing and playing various roles??

DoWould you think I must bewas crazy if I sayid that it is not only humans who can think about the universe, and there is a crazy, eccentric little bunny who has fun from daily dressing up and playing various roles? everday?

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Do you think I must be crazy if I say that it is not only humans who can think about the universe and that there is a crazy, eccentric little bunny who has fun from daily dressingdressing up daily and playing various roles??

Do you think I amust be crazy if I say that it is not only humans who can think about the universe and there is a crazy, eccentric little bunny who has fun from daily dressing and playing various roles??

I am not sure what you mean by "daily dressing"
Do you mean "who has fun by dressing up and playing various roles"
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He has recorded365 costumes in his lifetime, from crying to violent rage, he doesn't care whether his adrenaline will kill him, he has to realize his dreams - ROLE PLAYING DREAMS!

He has recordedworn 365 costumes in his lifetime, from crying to violent rage,; he doesn't care whether his adrenaline will kill him, he has to realize his dreams - ROLE PLAYING DREAMS!

recorded not used here
adrenaline in general, it's a bit weird to specify "his" adrenaline
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He has recorded 365 costumes in his lifetime, from crying to violent rage, h. He doesn't care whether his adrenaline will kill him,; he has to realize his dreams - ROLE PLAYING DREAMS!

This sentence was missing a space between recorded and 365. Also, I broke this sentence into two so that it's easier to read.

He has recorded 365 costumes in his lifetime, from crying to violent rage, h. He doesn't care whether his adrenaline will kill him, he has to realize his dreams - ROLE PLAYING DREAMS!

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