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Hey! Spring of Trivia

ponta 360 · July 27

Target Language - English

"Hey! Spring of Trivia" is a TV show that verifies various theories. I like a theory: Can bodyguards protect a VIP when it comes to dodgeball. The bodyguards are four and well-trained from America. The opponent is a team that has wined in a national convention for elementary school students. The VIP is the school headmaster, and they win if they can protect him for five minutes. As a result, they couldn't because they weren't trained to catch a ball, so only guarded him with their body. This verification was ridiculous and funny.


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nutty 0 July 27, 2021
Hey! Spring of Trivia
Spring of Trivia" is a TV show that verifies various theories.

Spring of Trivia" is a TV show that verifietests various theories.

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"Hey! Spring of Trivia" is a TV show that puts various theories to the test.
I like a theory: Can bodyguards protect a VIP when it comes to dodgeball.

I like athe theory: "Can bodyguards protect a VIP when it comes tofour, well-trained bodyguards from America protect a VIP in a game of dodgeball.?"

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It sounds more natural when you add the descriptors to the noun "bodyguards" in this sentence, rather than putting them into the next sentence.
The opponent is a team that has wined in a national convention for elementary school students.

The opponent is a team that has wined insing team has won at a national convention for elementary school students.

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The past tense of "win" is "won"
The VIP is the school headmaster, and they win if they can protect him for five minutes.
As a result, they couldn't because they weren't trained to catch a ball, so only guarded him with their body.

As a result, tThey couldn't do this because they weren't trained to catch athe balls, so they only guarded him with their bodyies.

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"As a result" is illogical here because the reason from your last sentence does not connect with the outcome of this sentence. The players lost because "they weren't trained to catch the balls," however your sentence makes it sound like they lost because "they can protect him for five minutes"
This verification was ridiculous and funny.

This verificationchallenge was ridiculous and funny.

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