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kiwy

Nov. 5, 2021

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In the morning reading class, after I turned off the radio, none of the students kept reading. I asked them to read, but all of them were quiet. I blamed them that they were quiet when they were asked to read, on the contrary, they were noisy. They kept silent, even the headmaster appeard, they were silent as stones. Wierdly, the headmaster said nothing, because she usually would talk with the teacher or students about the bad performance. When the bell rang, nobody moved as usual, they still were silent. It was really surprised and funny. Then I dismissed them. They left quickly.

During the exercise class, the headmaster asked the students who didn't obey the rule to put on the whole uniform (shirt and trousers) to stand out. Then the director asked the teachers in charge to deal with this problem. There were ten of my students. I told them to queue so that I could take a photo. Then I say nothing and went to the office. They followed me. However, some of them walked into the classroom. I stepped in, and said angry, "Who told you that you can come back?" Then I walked into the office, and told them that I've reminded them to put on the whole uniform all day for countless times, but they didn't take it seriously. I was unable to handle their problem so that I would pose the picture on the parents chat group to ask the parents for help. I took out a handbook which record the students' bad behaviour details, and asked them to sign. I looked out, there was several boys walking in the corridor. It was time for math class, they should not have been there. Thus, I went to the classroom and saw nobody there. I asked a boy who was going downstairs where all the students had gone. He answered that they had went running. I realised that they had misunderstood my words. I told them to run 5 laps last night. Because the playground was wet, I didn't ask them to run. I said to the boy, "It is time for math class, just tell them to go back to have class." I went to the end of the corridor and looked at the playground, some boys had nearly finished one lap while all the girls were falling behind. The girls didn't stop until they had run one lap.
Ms. Li said that it seemed they were really scared of me. "If they really were, they won't be so noisy ," I replied.
I know the it is unfair to punish the guys who didn't violate the rules. But most of them were noisy, I can't accurately found out who were making noise. Besides, I think running more will help them with their P.E. exam and is good for their health.

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FunnyStrange

"Funny" can mean "strange", but it can also mean "amusing". I think that "strange" would be better here because I kept waiting for an amusing moment while I was reading your post, but it never came.

In themy morning reading class, after I turned off the radio, none of the students kept reading.

If you say "In *the* morning reading class", it suggests that we're familiar with it already. But this is the first sentence of the post, so "my" is better.

More generally, it's not clear what you mean here. Do you usually play the radio and have students read something along with it, with the understanding that when you turn it off, they're supposed to keep reading? I'm having trouble understanding how that's supposed to work.

I asked them to read, but all of them were quiet.

I blametold them that they were quiet when they were asked to read, on the contrarybut when they were asked to be quiet, they were noisy.

"Blame" means to assign someone the responsibility for something that went wrong. But here you're not trying to figure out who is responsible; you're criticizing their behavior. If you want to emphasize the criticism, you could say:

I criticized them for being quiet when they were asked to read, but noisy when they were asked to be quiet.

They kept silent, ev. Even when the headmaster appeared, they were [as] silent as stones.

There was a comma splice in the original (a comma joining two sentences that can stand alone on their own).

Wieirdly, the headmaster said nothing, because she usually would talk with the teacher or students about the bad performancebehavior.

When the bell rang, nobody moved as usual, tthey usually do. They still were silent.

another comma splice

It was really surpriseding and funnystrange.

Then I dismissed them.

They left quickly.

Then the director asked the teachers in charge to deal with this problem.

There were ten of mythe students were mine.

Then I sayid nothing and went to the office.

Did they know they were supposed to go to the office, too?

They followed me.

However, some of them walked into the classroom instead.

I stepped in,to the classroom and said angrily, "Who told you that you can come back?"

Then I walked into the office, and told them that I've reminded them countless times to put on the whole uniform all day for countless times, but they didn't take it seriously.

Since I was unable to handle their problem so that, I would poset the picture on the parents' chat group to ask the parents for help.

I took out a handbook which records the details of students' bad behaviour details, and asked them to sign.

I looked out, t. There wasere several boys walking in the corridor.

It was time for math class, so they should not have been there.

Thus,When I went to the classroom and, I saw nobody there.

I asked a boy who was going downstairs where all the students had gone.

He answered that they had wentgone running.

I realised that they had misunderstood my words.

I had told them to run 5 laps last night.

BHowever, because the playground was wet now, I didn't askexpect them to run. today. [?]

Is this what you meant?

Also, I'm puzzled by what you told them the night before. Did you tell them that you wanted them to run five laps every day?

I said to the boy, "It is time for math class, j. Just tell them to go back to have class."

I went to the end of the corridor and looked at the playground, s. Some boys had nearly finished one lap whilebut all the girls were falling behind.

The girls didn't stop until they had run one lap.

What about the boys?

Ms. Li said that it seemed they were really scared of me.

Was it the fact that the girls completed the lap that made it seem as though they were scared of you? Or something else?

"If they really were, they wouldn't be so noisy ," I replied.

Note that there shouldn't be a space before a comma.

I know the it is unfair to punish the guys who didn't violate the rules.

But since most of them were noisy, I caouldn't accurately found out whoich ones were making noise.

Besides, I think running more will help them with their P.E. exam and is good for their health.

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Your English is quite good. However, you should try to avoid comma splices (search for "comma splice" on the Internet). Also, you may be assuming that your readers know certain details about your story that they actually don't. Please try to remember that we are more ignorant than you think! :)

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kiwy

Nov. 6, 2021

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In themy morning reading class, after I turned off the radio, none of the students kept reading.

If you say "In *the* morning reading class", it suggests that we're familiar with it already. But this is the first sentence of the post, so "my" is better.

More generally, it's not clear what you mean here. Do you usually play the radio and have students read something along with it, with the understanding that when you turn it off, they're supposed to keep reading? I'm having trouble understanding how that's supposed to work.

yep, I often play the radio and have them read after the words.

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kiwy

Nov. 6, 2021

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BHowever, because the playground was wet now, I didn't askexpect them to run. today. [?]

Is this what you meant?

Also, I'm puzzled by what you told them the night before. Did you tell them that you wanted them to run five laps every day?

yes, you get it.

no, I just told them to run on Friday.

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kiwy

Nov. 6, 2021

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The girls didn't stop until they had run one lap.

What about the boys?

They came back first

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kiwy

Nov. 6, 2021

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Ms. Li said that it seemed they were really scared of me.

Was it the fact that the girls completed the lap that made it seem as though they were scared of you? Or something else?

no, what Ms. Li means is that I didn't asked them to run, but they misunderstood my words and went running immediately.

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kiwy

Nov. 6, 2021

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Thank you very much! I've learned a lot from your corrections.

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alan

Nov. 6, 2021

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yep, I often play the radio and have them read after the words.

Do you mean "I often play the radio and then have them read the words back"? Or "I often play the radio and then have them read books when the radio is done"?

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kiwy

Nov. 7, 2021

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Do you mean "I often play the radio and then have them read the words back"? Or "I often play the radio and then have them read books when the radio is done"?

the previous one

Funny

FunnyStrange

In the morning reading class, after I turned off the radio, none of the students kept reading.

In themy morning reading class, after I turned off the radio, none of the students kept reading.

I asked them to read, but all of them were quiet.

I blamed them that they were quiet when they were asked to read, on the contrary, they were noisy.

I blametold them that they were quiet when they were asked to read, on the contrarybut when they were asked to be quiet, they were noisy.

They kept silent, even the headmaster appeard, they were silent as stones.

They kept silent, ev. Even when the headmaster appeared, they were [as] silent as stones.

Wierdly, the headmaster said nothing, because she usually would talk with the teacher or students about the bad performance.

Wieirdly, the headmaster said nothing, because she usually would talk with the teacher or students about the bad performancebehavior.

When the bell rang, nobody moved as usual, they still were silent.

When the bell rang, nobody moved as usual, tthey usually do. They still were silent.

It was really surprised and funny.

It was really surpriseding and funnystrange.

Then I dismissed them.

They left quickly.

During the exercise class, the headmaster asked the students who didn't obey the rule to put on the whole uniform (shirt and trousers) to stand out.

Then the director asked the teachers in charge to deal with this problem.

There were ten of my students.

There were ten of mythe students were mine.

I told them to queue so that I could take a photo.

Then I say nothing and went to the office.

Then I sayid nothing and went to the office.

They followed me.

However, some of them walked into the classroom.

However, some of them walked into the classroom instead.

I stepped in, and said angry, "Who told you that you can come back?"

I stepped in,to the classroom and said angrily, "Who told you that you can come back?"

Then I walked into the office, and told them that I've reminded them to put on the whole uniform all day for countless times, but they didn't take it seriously.

Then I walked into the office, and told them that I've reminded them countless times to put on the whole uniform all day for countless times, but they didn't take it seriously.

I was unable to handle their problem so that I would pose the picture on the parents chat group to ask the parents for help.

Since I was unable to handle their problem so that, I would poset the picture on the parents' chat group to ask the parents for help.

I took out a handbook which record the students' bad behaviour details, and asked them to sign.

I took out a handbook which records the details of students' bad behaviour details, and asked them to sign.

I looked out, there was several boys walking in the corridor.

I looked out, t. There wasere several boys walking in the corridor.

It was time for math class, they should not have been there.

It was time for math class, so they should not have been there.

Thus, I went to the classroom and saw nobody there.

Thus,When I went to the classroom and, I saw nobody there.

I asked a boy who was going downstairs where all the students had gone.

He answered that they had went running.

He answered that they had wentgone running.

I realised that they had misunderstood my words.

I told them to run 5 laps last night.

I had told them to run 5 laps last night.

Because the playground was wet, I didn't ask them to run.

BHowever, because the playground was wet now, I didn't askexpect them to run. today. [?]

I said to the boy, "It is time for math class, just tell them to go back to have class."

I said to the boy, "It is time for math class, j. Just tell them to go back to have class."

I went to the end of the corridor and looked at the playground, some boys had nearly finished one lap while all the girls were falling behind.

I went to the end of the corridor and looked at the playground, s. Some boys had nearly finished one lap whilebut all the girls were falling behind.

The girls didn't stop until they had run one lap.

The girls didn't stop until they had run one lap.

Ms. Li said that it seemed they were really scared of me.

Ms. Li said that it seemed they were really scared of me.

"If they really were, they won't be so noisy ," I replied.

"If they really were, they wouldn't be so noisy ," I replied.

I know the it is unfair to punish the guys who didn't violate the rules.

I know the it is unfair to punish the guys who didn't violate the rules.

But most of them were noisy, I can't accurately found out who were making noise.

But since most of them were noisy, I caouldn't accurately found out whoich ones were making noise.

Besides, I think running more will help them with their P.E. exam and is good for their health.

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