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April 18, 2022

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Essay: Energy for a tourist island (C1 CAE)

You have watched and listened to a video on Youtube about which form of renewable energy would be best for a tourist island. You have made the notes below:

Which form of renewable energy would be best for a tourist island?
- Wind turbines
- Solar Panels
- Nuclear power
Some opinions expressed in the discussion:
- “Nuclear power is a sustainable energy source that reduces carbon emissions.”
- “Wind turbines would destroy the landscape of the island. “
- “We couldn’t be 100% powered by solar panels.”

Write an essay discussing two of the renewable energy forms in your notes- You should explain which form of renewable energy would be best for a tourist island, giving reasons in support of your answer.
You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should use your own words as far as possible.

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What could make it sound more natural ?

I recently watched an interesting Youtube video, in which several participants discussed an unusual environmental topic: the best energy source to keep a tourist island running. The debate was focused on two types of sources especially, these were wind and nuclear power.

Regarding nuclear power, to my way of thinking there is no point in using this type of energy. First of all, it is not renewable and therefore not sustainable, unlike it was expressed during the discussion; but more importantly, residual generated remained as radioactive for thousands of years, causing a deleterious damage in the ocean, which it is not a good advertisement for tourists.
Beyond that fact, a nuclear power station is excessive only for an island, even for one with the size of Australia.

Wind is a real renewable energy and a reliable one for an island, since there is often a vast ocean surrounding it, which is an almost endless surface to this purpose. In this sense, there is no need of and it will be impracticable using any square meter of landscape, as it was said in the debate. In short, is a clean, cheap and renewable source of energy, which fit perfectly in a tourist island, where oceanic wind currents will provide plenty of energy for the extra needed, for example, for leisure activities.

To conclude, wind turbines seem to be the best candidates to cover an island's energy supply, yet it is only for tourists, whereas a nuclear power plant have only disadvantages in this specific context.


What could make it sound more natural?

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Essay: Energy for a tourist island (C1 CAE)

You have watched and listened to a video on Youtube about which form of renewable energy would be best for a tourist island.

You have made the notes below:

Which form of renewable energy would be best for a tourist island?

- Wind turbines

- Solar Panels

- Nuclear power

Some opinions expressed in the discussion:

- “Nuclear power is a sustainable energy source that reduces carbon emissions.”

- “Wind turbines would destroy the landscape of the island.

- “We couldn’t be 100% powered by solar panels.”

Write an essay discussing two of the renewable energy forms in your notes- You should explain which form of renewable energy would be best for a tourist island, giving reasons in support of your answer.

You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should use your own words as far as possible.

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What could make it sound more natural ?

I recently watched an interesting Youtube video, in which several participants discussed an unusual environmental topic: the best energy source to keep a tourist island running.

The debate was especially focused on two types of sources especially, these were: wind and nuclear power.

RegardingI don't think it's sensible to use nuclear power, to my way of thinking there is no point in using this type of energyrun a tourist island.

" to my way of thinking there is no point in using this type of energy."

This sounds like a very strong and general conclusion. The reasons you give below are more particular to a tourist island, so I have softened this and made it more specific.

First of all, contrary to the Youtube video, it is not renewable and therefore not sustainable, unlike it was expressed during the discussion; but m. More importantly, residualit generateds residue that remained as radioactive for thousands of years, causing a deleterious; this will damage in the ocean, which it and is not a good advertisement for tourists.

"unlike it was expressed during the discussion" is incorrect. Otherwise I made changes to make the style clearer and more natural.

Beyond that fact,Another objection is that a nuclear power station is excessive only for an island, even for one with the size of Australia.

"is excessive only for an island" is incorrect. I think you mean, "is excessive for powering just an island".

Wind is a realgenuinely renewable source of energy, and a reliable one for an island, since there is often a vast ocean surrounding it, which is an almost endless surface to this purposn island is usually surrounded by ocean that can be used to farm it, making it reliable.

I wasn't quite sure what you meant by "which is an almost endless surface to this purpose." Which purpose? How is it used?

In this sense, there is no need of and it will be impracticable using any square meter of landscape, as it was said in the debate.

"there is no need of [what?]"

"it will be impracticable using any square meter of landscape," what does this mean?

I don't know what you were trying to say here.

In short, wind is a clean, cheap and renewable source of energy, which fi that perfectly infits the needs of a tourist island, where; oceanic wind currents will provide plenty of energy for the extra needed, for example, for leisure activitieleisure activities and other tourist needs.

You left out some important words here.

ToI conclude, that wind turbines seem to be the best candidates to cover an tourist island's energy supply, yet it is only for tourists, whereas. This argument is specific to tourist islands, however, and a nuclear power plant may have only disadvantages in othis specificer contexts.

"yet it is only for tourists" what is [it]?

"a nuclear power plant have only disadvantages in this specific context" in which specific context?

I had to guess.

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This is good but you tend to leave out important words and use "it" too much. I then have to guess what you're trying to say.

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isaac

April 22, 2022

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Thank you so much The marmot for all corrections and advices.

The debate was focused on two specific types of sources especially, these were: wind and nuclear power.

Regarding nuclear power, tTo my way of thinking, there is no point in using this type of energyan energy source like nuclear power.

First of all, it is not renewable and therefore not sustainable, unlike iwhat was expressed during the discussion; but more importantly, the residue/ residual waste generated can remained as radioactive for thousands of years, causing a delet and cause serious damage into the ocean, which it is not a good advertisement for touristsputs off tourists from visting (the area).

"deletéreo" no es una palabra común en inglés, a menos que seas poeta :p

Beyond that factAside from this, a nuclear power station is excessive only for an island, even for one with the size of Australia.

Wind is a realform of renewable energy and indeed a reliable one for an island, since there is often a vast ocean surrounding it, which is an almost endless surface to this purpose. As such, it is unlikely to run out anytime soon.

In this sense, thereAs such, nuclear energy is not need of and it will be impracticable using any square meter of landscapecessary and the size of a nuclear power plant makes it impractical for an island, as it was said in the debate.

In short, wind is a clean, cheap and renewable source of energy, which fit perfectly ingoes well with a tourist island, where oceanic wind currents will provide plenty of energy for the extra needed, for example, for leisure activities.

To conclude, wind turbines seem to be the best candidates to cover an island's energy supply, yet it is only for tourists, whereas a nuclear power plant have only disdoes not have any advantages in this specific context.

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applebubble

April 19, 2022

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A decir verdad, las ideas no están muy claras. Te recomiendo que leas el New York Times, hay artículos muy parecidos a este.

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applebubble

April 19, 2022

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Así podrás estudiar las estructuras y cómo los autores organizan sus ideas, y escribirás de forma más coherente y natural. ¡Ánimo!

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isaac

April 21, 2022

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Este ensayo era un poco enrevesado, bueno eso y que estoy probando cosas distintas para ir mejorando :)
Gracias por las correcciones y por el consejo, haber si voy mejorando la sintaxis.

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applebubble

April 21, 2022

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de nada :)

Essay: Energy for a tourist island (C1 CAE)

You have watched and listened to a video on Youtube about which form of renewable energy would be best for a tourist island.

You have made the notes below:

Which form of renewable energy would be best for a tourist island?

- Wind turbines

- Solar Panels

- Nuclear power

Some opinions expressed in the discussion:

- “Nuclear power is a sustainable energy source that reduces carbon emissions.”

- “Wind turbines would destroy the landscape of the island.

- “We couldn’t be 100% powered by solar panels.”

Write an essay discussing two of the renewable energy forms in your notes- You should explain which form of renewable energy would be best for a tourist island, giving reasons in support of your answer.

You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should use your own words as far as possible.

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What could make it sound more natural ?

I recently watched an interesting Youtube video, in which several participants discussed an unusual environmental topic: the best energy source to keep a tourist island running.

The debate was focused on two types of sources especially, these were wind and nuclear power.

The debate was focused on two specific types of sources especially, these were: wind and nuclear power.

The debate was especially focused on two types of sources especially, these were: wind and nuclear power.

Regarding nuclear power, to my way of thinking there is no point in using this type of energy.

Regarding nuclear power, tTo my way of thinking, there is no point in using this type of energyan energy source like nuclear power.

RegardingI don't think it's sensible to use nuclear power, to my way of thinking there is no point in using this type of energyrun a tourist island.

First of all, it is not renewable and therefore not sustainable, unlike it was expressed during the discussion; but more importantly, residual generated remained as radioactive for thousands of years, causing a deleterious damage in the ocean, which it is not a good advertisement for tourists.

First of all, contrary to the Youtube video, it is not renewable and therefore not sustainable, unlike it was expressed during the discussion; but m. More importantly, residualit generateds residue that remained as radioactive for thousands of years, causing a deleterious; this will damage in the ocean, which it and is not a good advertisement for tourists.

First of all, it is not renewable and therefore not sustainable, unlike iwhat was expressed during the discussion; but more importantly, the residue/ residual waste generated can remained as radioactive for thousands of years, causing a delet and cause serious damage into the ocean, which it is not a good advertisement for touristsputs off tourists from visting (the area).

Beyond that fact, a nuclear power station is excessive only for an island, even for one with the size of Australia.

Beyond that fact,Another objection is that a nuclear power station is excessive only for an island, even for one with the size of Australia.

Beyond that factAside from this, a nuclear power station is excessive only for an island, even for one with the size of Australia.

Wind is a real renewable energy and a reliable one for an island, since there is often a vast ocean surrounding it, which is an almost endless surface to this purpose.

Wind is a realgenuinely renewable source of energy, and a reliable one for an island, since there is often a vast ocean surrounding it, which is an almost endless surface to this purposn island is usually surrounded by ocean that can be used to farm it, making it reliable.

Wind is a realform of renewable energy and indeed a reliable one for an island, since there is often a vast ocean surrounding it, which is an almost endless surface to this purpose. As such, it is unlikely to run out anytime soon.

In this sense, there is no need of and it will be impracticable using any square meter of landscape, as it was said in the debate.

In this sense, there is no need of and it will be impracticable using any square meter of landscape, as it was said in the debate.

In this sense, thereAs such, nuclear energy is not need of and it will be impracticable using any square meter of landscapecessary and the size of a nuclear power plant makes it impractical for an island, as it was said in the debate.

In short, is a clean, cheap and renewable source of energy, which fit perfectly in a tourist island, where oceanic wind currents will provide plenty of energy for the extra needed, for example, for leisure activities.

In short, wind is a clean, cheap and renewable source of energy, which fi that perfectly infits the needs of a tourist island, where; oceanic wind currents will provide plenty of energy for the extra needed, for example, for leisure activitieleisure activities and other tourist needs.

In short, wind is a clean, cheap and renewable source of energy, which fit perfectly ingoes well with a tourist island, where oceanic wind currents will provide plenty of energy for the extra needed, for example, for leisure activities.

To conclude, wind turbines seem to be the best candidates to cover an island's energy supply, yet it is only for tourists, whereas a nuclear power plant have only disadvantages in this specific context.

ToI conclude, that wind turbines seem to be the best candidates to cover an tourist island's energy supply, yet it is only for tourists, whereas. This argument is specific to tourist islands, however, and a nuclear power plant may have only disadvantages in othis specificer contexts.

To conclude, wind turbines seem to be the best candidates to cover an island's energy supply, yet it is only for tourists, whereas a nuclear power plant have only disdoes not have any advantages in this specific context.

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