July 26, 2022
Dream Destination
If I could, I'd like to see the northern lights in Norway or Alaska or something. The problem is I'm very sensitive to snow and very low temperatures. It would be a sight to behold though. The aurora videos alone make them seem like magic so I can't imagine what it would be like to seem them in real life.
If I could, I'd like to see the northern lights in Norway or Alaska or somethingwhere.
Since it's a place, somewhere is better.
The problem is that I'm very sensitive to snow and very low temperatures.
It would be a sight to behold though.
The aurora videos alone make ithem seem like magic so I can't imagine what it would be like to seem them in real life.
Dream Destination
If I could, I'd like to see the northern lights in Norway or Alaska or somethingwhere.
The problem is, I'm very sensitive to snow and very low temperatures.
The aurora videos alone make them seem like magical, so I can't imagine what it would be like to seem them in real life.
"like magic" also works.
Dream Destination
If I could, I'd like to see the northern lights in Norway or Alaska or somethingwhere.
The aurora videos alone make them seem like magic so I can't imagine what it would be like to seem them in real life.
If I could, I'd like to see the northern lights in Norway or Alaska or something.
The problem is, I'm very sensitive to snow and very low temperatures.
"sensitive to snow" makes it sound like it is somehow painful if snow touches your skin. Is that what you are trying to communicate? Also, it would be better if you didn't use the word "very" twice in that sentence. I would suggest eliminating the second "very."
The aurora videos alone make them seem like magic, so I can't imagine what it would be like to seem them in real life.
This is a compound sentence so traditional conventions say that you should separate your independent clauses (i.e. complete sentences) with a comma and a coordinating conjunction, which you already have: "so"
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This is a good effort. I hope you reach your goals for learning English.
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If I could, I'd like to see the northern lights in Norway or Alaska or something. If I could, I'd like to see the northern lights in Norway or Alaska or some If I could, I'd like to see the northern lights in Norway or Alaska If I could, I'd like to see the northern lights in Norway or Alaska or some If I could, I'd like to see the northern lights in Norway or Alaska or some Since it's a place, somewhere is better.
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The problem is I'm very sensitive to snow and very low temperatures. The problem is, I'm very sensitive to snow and very low temperatures. The problem is, I'm very sensitive to snow and very low temperatures. "sensitive to snow" makes it sound like it is somehow painful if snow touches your skin. Is that what you are trying to communicate? Also, it would be better if you didn't use the word "very" twice in that sentence. I would suggest eliminating the second "very."
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The aurora videos alone make them seem like magic so I can't imagine what it would be like to seem them in real life. The aurora videos alone make them seem "like magic" also works.
The aurora videos alone make them seem like magic, so I can't imagine what it would be like to see This is a compound sentence so traditional conventions say that you should separate your independent clauses (i.e. complete sentences) with a comma and a coordinating conjunction, which you already have: "so"
The aurora videos alone make them seem like magic so I can't imagine what it would be like to see The aurora videos alone make it |
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