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Diary: May Holidays

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heyyawn 94 · May 4

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Today is the fourth day of the 5-day holiday in May. My roommate went out to play. I didn't leave school and I really like having only one person in the dorm. But the school's bed-checking requirement almost drove me crazy. I was used to going to bed at 10pm, but the requirement was to check in at 11pm. This caused my sleep schedule to become chaotic. Tomorrow my roommate is coming back and I have to endure the noisy dorm life again :(


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secretpostman 0 May 4, 2021
Diary: May Holidays
Today is the fourth day of the 5-day holiday in May.
My roommate went out to play.

My roommate went out to playhas gone off to have fun.

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"went out to play", idiomatically, strikes me as a very childlike thing. After the family had lunch together, the kids went out to play. I think instead of "went out" you need something that says he's *left* - he's not just stepped outside for a short time, he's gone to stay somewhere else for this period. So - he left (for home, for a friend's place, on holiday), he is gone, he has gone or has gone off somewhere, he went to stay somewhere. And instead of playing, he's having fun or enjoying himself or having a good time.
I didn't leave school and I really like having only one person in the dorm.

I didn't leave schoolcampus and I really like having only one person in the dorm.

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Again, "leave school" is, to me, quite an idiomatic phrase that means a children's school, under 18 years old, and it means either you've been dismissed for the day (we leave school at half past three) or you've finished your education (he left school when he turned 16). Campus seems like a good word here.
But the school's bed-checking requirement almost drove me crazy.
I was used to going to bed at 10pm, but the requirement was to check in at 11pm.
This caused my sleep schedule to become chaotic.
Tomorrow my roommate is coming back and I have to endure the noisy dorm life again :(

Overall feedback & comment:

I never had to endure a roommate at university and I'm super grateful for that. But even with my own room the dorms were not very pleasant! You have my sympathy :(
Comment added on 05/04/2021