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ponta 360 · June 2

Prompt: "PROMPT FOR JUNE 2021 WRITING CHALLENGE: If you could only eat one meal for the rest of your life, what would it be?" by Jacque. Like this prompt? Write your own response here.

Target Language - English

I'll choose sushi for the food. First of all, sushi is my favorite food as many Japanese like it. Sushi has a lot of variations for the fish, source, and style. California role is so different from basic sushi but I also like these kinds of mutations. In addition, sushi consists of fish and rice, so it wouldn't harm my health eating it for some time.


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ksproctor 0 June 2, 2021
First of all, sushi is my favorite food as many Japanese like it.

First of all, like many Japanese, sushi is my favorite food as many Japanese like it.

  • Correction Type:
  • Stylistic
Sometimes "as" has the meaning of because, so for me, this sentence says that, because many Japanese like sushi, you also like it. I made some a suggestion above, but I probably didn't express what you wanted to express. If you have questions, you can send me a message I'll try to help :)
Sushi has a lot of variations for the fish, source, and style.
California role is so different from basic sushi but I also like these kinds of mutations.

California rolel is so different from basic sushi but I also like these kinds of mutvariations.

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  • Spelling
  • Usage
Mutation usually has a definition more related to science, referring to a change in something's DNA. It could have the meaning of change, but for me, the word "variation" seems to be a better fit.
In addition, sushi consists of fish and rice, so it wouldn't harm my health eating it for some time.

Overall feedback & comment:

Nice work! I just made some small changes related to some vocabulary, as well as the change to the use of "as" in your 2nd sentence. If you have any questions about it, feel free to let me know!
Comment added on 06/02/2021