June 16, 2021
CHALLENGE 17
The last grocery list is some reference books for exams. Almost all of my expenses are necessary.
I'm saving up for an extracurricular class I want to take next year. That course will cost ￥30,000. I also need to get a new laptop for a better class experience. The laptop and the equipment for the class will probably cost at least ￥10,000.
The average monthly income of Chinese people is ￥1000 , while the monthly income of graduates at my university is roughly ￥4000. So ￥40,000 is a small fortune in China.
I've already saved up over ￥30,000 with my part-time job. But in the second half of this year I'm going to focus on my exams and I won't be working part-time. So I need to save money.
CHALLENGE 17
TheMy last grocery list ispurchases were some reference books for my exams.
Grocery list only refers to when you go to the supermarket to buy food.
Almost all of my expenses are necessary.
At the moment, I'm saving up for an extracurricular class I want to take next year which will cost about ￥30,000.
Both this sentence and the next one is correct, but it sounds more natural if you write it like this ^.
That course will cost ￥30,000.
I also need to get a new laptop to do/perfor am better class experiencein my classes.
better class experience is awkward phrasing.
The laptop and the equipmentits accessories for the class will probably cost at least ￥10,000.
The average monthly income ofin Chinese peoplea is ￥1000 , while the monthly income of graduates at my university is roughly ￥4000.
Chinese people is awkward phrasing. We normally generalize income base on the whole country.
So ￥40,000 is a small fortune in China.
I've already saved up over ￥30,000 with my part-time job.
But in the second half of this year I'm going to focus on my exams and I won't be working part-time.
So I need to save money.
Feedback
Great job! Just a few phrases which sounded awkward which I fixed.
June 17, 2021
Thank you very much for the corrections!
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CHALLENGE 17 |
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The last grocery list is some reference books for exams.
Grocery list only refers to when you go to the supermarket to buy food.
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Almost all of my expenses are necessary. |
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I'm saving up for an extracurricular class I want to take next year. At the moment, I'm saving up for an extracurricular class I want to take next year which will cost about ￥30,000. Both this sentence and the next one is correct, but it sounds more natural if you write it like this ^.
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That course will cost ￥30,000. |
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I also need to get a new laptop for a better class experience. I also need to get a new laptop to do/perfor better class experience is awkward phrasing.
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The laptop and the equipment for the class will probably cost at least ￥10,000. The laptop and |
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The average monthly income of Chinese people is ￥1000 , while the monthly income of graduates at my university is roughly ￥4000. The average monthly income Chinese people is awkward phrasing. We normally generalize income base on the whole country.
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So ￥40,000 is a small fortune in China. |
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I've already saved up over ￥30,000 with my part-time job. |
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But in the second half of this year I'm going to focus on my exams and I won't be working part-time. |
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So I need to save money. |
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